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PromiseDear editor,People always emphasize(強(qiáng)調(diào)) the importance of the promise, and they hate people who break their promise. Promise is very important. Everyone should keep it. Yours,Tony【答案】The Importance of PromiseDear editor,People always emphasize(強(qiáng)調(diào))the importance of the promise, and they hate people who break their promise.Recently, a thing happened to my friend, and I think it was really his fault. Last weekend, my friend Daming had a date with his friend Lingling to watch a movie. But he totally forgot it that day because of his review for his exam. So Lingling got too angry to forgive him. In my opinion, it was really his fault. Forgetting the date not only led to Lingling’s anger, but also made her lose trust in him. Keeping promises is always the traditional virtue of the Chinese nation. What Daming should do now is to ask for forgiveness and promise that he will never do that again.Promise is very important. Everyone should keep it. Yours,Tony【解析】【分析】本文為一篇稿件,需要學(xué)生通過大明和玲玲之間,大明沒有信守承諾的事情,談自己的看法。信守承諾是中華民族的傳統(tǒng)美德,在寫作過程中,注意文章結(jié)構(gòu),先寫出大明和玲玲之間的事情,然后再說自己對此的看法?!驹斀狻渴紫?,第一句話直接點(diǎn)明作者的觀點(diǎn),大明是犯錯了的。然后仔細(xì)闡述了事情發(fā)生的經(jīng)過。接下來說出自己對此事件的看法,不信守承諾會導(dǎo)致失去別人的信任,對大明的建議是除了認(rèn)錯之外,還需要再次保證永不再犯?!军c(diǎn)睛】文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,符合邏輯,先表明自己觀點(diǎn),然后闡述事情,提出自己的觀點(diǎn)和建議。整篇文章在謀篇布局上,比較嚴(yán)密。除此之外,中間也使用了一些連接詞,例如but,so,because of等,使文章更加通順。6.書面表達(dá)每個人都有自己心愛的物品,相信你也擁有一個自己心愛的物品吧!請以“A(n) _____ I have”為題,描述一個或一件你心愛的物品,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。要求:1. 請?jiān)陬}目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字;2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。3. 語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,短文連貫通順,80詞左右。A(n) _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A(n) toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析:這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述,要求是進(jìn)行描述,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?,以及它存在的意義。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的,在討論其如何獲得的時候要注意正確使用時態(tài),在談?wù)撘饬x的時候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性,避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫作亮點(diǎn):這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍,描述玩具槍的時候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充,例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth(用黃布包著的玩具槍),這里用到了過去分詞作定語,作者還描述了玩具槍的功能(small plastic pills),順便還描述了自己小時候玩槍的經(jīng)歷,準(zhǔn)確使用了時態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時候不落俗套,講到了自己的家庭那時比較困難,父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的,寫作是富有感情的,也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華,表達(dá)了作者的期望(I hope I can be a soldier),上升到了保家衛(wèi)國的層面,這樣的一篇作文是有深度的,能夠讓人感動的,是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。7.題目②“持之以恒,