【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析：這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述，要求是進(jìn)行描述，并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿模约八嬖诘囊饬x。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的，在討論其如何獲得的時(shí)候要注意正確使用時(shí)態(tài)，在談?wù)撘饬x的時(shí)候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍，描述玩具槍的時(shí)候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充，例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth（用黃布包著的玩具槍），這里用到了過去分詞作定語，作者還描述了玩具槍的功能（small plastic pills），順便還描述了自己小時(shí)候玩槍的經(jīng)歷，準(zhǔn)確使用了時(shí)態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時(shí)候不落俗套，講到了自己的家庭那時(shí)比較困難，父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的，寫作是富有感情的，也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華，表達(dá)了作者的期望（I hope I can be a soldier），上升到了保家衛(wèi)國的層面，這樣的一篇作文是有深度的，能夠讓人感動的，是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。5．書面表達(dá)（本題15分）根據(jù)要求完成短文寫作，請將作文寫在答題卡指定的位置上。為了使生活更美好，社會需要正能量（positive energy）。生活中，我們需要他人的幫助，也要學(xué)會幫助他人。請你在網(wǎng)上給What would you do?本期節(jié)目留言，內(nèi)容包括：1. 你對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法；2. 說說你幫助別人或別人幫助你的一件事例；3. 呼吁大家互幫互助，彼此感恩，讓社會充滿正能量。作文要求：1．不得照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名。2．語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。 作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不必抄寫在試卷上，也不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”（113w）【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，描述對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵大家相互幫助，并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。6．近年來，習(xí)近平主席提出了實(shí)現(xiàn)中華民族偉大復(fù)興的“中國夢”。學(xué)校開展了“夢想少年”的主題演講活動，假如你是張明，請根據(jù)以下提供的要點(diǎn)，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇80－100詞的短文，向大家推介自己。（可聯(lián)系實(shí)際，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮）注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名。提示詞語： good at ..with ...rules up popular with... to do something【答案】I39。m a Dream Teenager Good morning， dear teachers and friends， I am Zhang Ming． It39。s great honor for me to make a speech here． As a fifteenyearold boy， my dream is to be a good teacher． To make my dream e true， I study hard at school and I am good at all my subjects． Also， I am an outgoing and healthy boy who likes footb