【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 樓2河水骯臟2河水清澈（clean and clear）．3步行、騎自行車上班3乘公交車、小汽車上班4道路狹窄（narrow）．4街道寬闊（wide），干凈整潔5居住條件（livingconditions）差5生活越來(lái)越好，環(huán)境（environment）越來(lái)越舒適．6你的感想…（寫(xiě)兩到三句）Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years，great changes have taken place in our hometown． 【答案】Changes in Our HometownIn the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown. In the past, there used to be old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were terrible. People were not rich. They went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings in our hometown. We can see the clean river and the clear water . Even we can see fish in the water. There are many wide and clean roads. Our life is better and better The environment around us is more and more fortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. But I think it’s still important to remember the past. It tells that we should cherish the present life.【解析】【詳解】亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這篇習(xí)作的層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)，例如take place，in our hometown，in the past，used to be，go to do，on foot，by bike，better and better，more and more等。而I think it39。s still important to remember the past/It tells that we should cherish the present ，豐富了習(xí)作內(nèi)容，使表達(dá)多樣，是本文的最大亮點(diǎn)?！军c(diǎn)睛】書(shū)面表達(dá)題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開(kāi)思維，考查運(yùn)用所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語(yǔ)和句式，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分?jǐn)?shù)。6．書(shū)面表達(dá)假如你是李明，你的英國(guó)筆友Jack來(lái)信詢問(wèn)你的家鄉(xiāng)是否有霧霾天氣，情況如何。請(qǐng)你按照以下提示給他回一封。內(nèi)容如下：1. 由于大氣污染程度十分嚴(yán)重，去年已發(fā)生數(shù)次霧霾天氣；2. 人們已經(jīng)意識(shí)到霧霾天氣的危害，正在采取各種措施減少其發(fā)生；3. 你在日常生活中打算為此做些什么。參考詞匯：霧霾haze注意：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；2. 語(yǔ)言通順，句子連貫，條理清楚，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范；3. 詞數(shù)80左右，信件的開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國(guó)筆友寫(xiě)信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們應(yīng)根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)提示，來(lái)組織語(yǔ)言，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。因此文章應(yīng)主要分成三段，一個(gè)內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)句式表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，寫(xiě)完整的句子，利用簡(jiǎn)單句的基本句型，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句；語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況，并結(jié)合自身的實(shí)際情況，講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn)；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，作者根據(jù)表達(dá)需要使用了一般過(guò)去時(shí)、一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)，動(dòng)詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范。短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的習(xí)慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了一些并列句和復(fù)合句，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor