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意銜接詞以及高級句式或復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)的使用?!军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,寫了一篇演講稿。文章有以下幾個優(yōu)點:首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包括了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容,沒有遺漏要點。各部分內(nèi)容安排合理,層次清晰。短文主要分成三段,每一段主題都很明確,敘述詳細、清楚。其次短文使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱,短文主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時,動詞形式變化準(zhǔn)確,尤其注意了不規(guī)則動詞的過去式形式,語法規(guī)范,用詞準(zhǔn)確。文章中句式變化豐富,有簡單句、并列句、復(fù)合句,長短句結(jié)合,增強了文章的表現(xiàn)力。短文中使用了較豐富的句型,如When I was in the seventh grade, I always had difficulty in learning English.、My English teacher encouraged me to continue to study and told me some good ways to study it.、I found when I put my heart into it, English didn’t’ seem that difficult、In the future, I won39。t be afraid of the difficulties in my life and I39。m sure that nothing can beat me and I will win!等等。5.假設(shè)你是來自中國的中學(xué)生李華,打算參加當(dāng)?shù)亟M織的國外冬令營,看完了這個網(wǎng)頁后,你打算給Liz Payne留言,表達你在冬令營期間想去London Canal Museum參觀的愿望。內(nèi)容包括:;(包含冬令營的時間,聽Liz Payne的講座);。作文要求:;不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校真實的名稱和學(xué)生的真實姓名;,詞數(shù)80個左右。作文的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出,不計入總詞數(shù),也不必抄寫在答題卡上。Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua,_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Liz Payne,I’m Li Hua, a middle school student learning in Grade 3 in China. I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter vacation. I hope to have a chance to visit London Canal Museum. From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals”February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter Camp. And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn Canal. What’s more, I hope to learn more about London Canal Museum and even more about the UK.I’m looking forward to your reply!Yours,Li Hua【解析】這篇作文要求我們以中學(xué)生李華的身份,給Liz Payne寫一個留言。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個部分:首先是介紹自己的身份;然后寫留言的目的,包括冬令營的時間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座;最后簡單介紹一下你的預(yù)期的收獲。寫作時,應(yīng)根據(jù)題目的這些要求,組織語言,串聯(lián)成一篇短文。通過分析可知,這篇短文應(yīng)使用第一人稱I來敘述,時態(tài)應(yīng)以一般將來時態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時為主。注意英語句子的表達和漢語習(xí)慣是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,使用正確的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以及適當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型,保證句子的準(zhǔn)確性和語言的地道。另外還應(yīng)注意語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫。穿插一些高級詞匯和復(fù)雜句式,提升文章檔次和水平,使表達更加流暢。點睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目要求的所有信息,沒有遺漏要點。作者主要從三個方面敘述:首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的;接下來詳細介紹了自己參加這次冬令營的愿望;最后是一個簡單的結(jié)尾。如果分段敘述效果則會更好,那樣會使文章的層次更加清晰。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱,文章以第一人稱、一般將來時和一般現(xiàn)在時為主,謂語動詞形式準(zhǔn)發(fā),語法規(guī)范,符合英語句子的表達習(xí)慣。短文以簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)為主,也使用了一些復(fù)合句和較高級的句型,如I’m writing to tell you that our city will have a Winter Camp during this winter ;From , I know you will have a report “An Update on the Cotswold Canals” February 6th, which will happen during the same period of our Winter ;And I also hope to listen to your talk so that I can know more about the Stroudwater Canal, the Thames and Severn 。整篇文章語句通順、意思連貫、表達流暢。6.環(huán)保話題是人們最關(guān)心的話題之一,請以Change for a better China為主題,結(jié)合自己家鄉(xiāng)的變化寫一篇英語短文。注意事項:,條理清楚,作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。,詞數(shù)不少于80。 狀況水污染,大氣污染...... 應(yīng)對措施立即阻止此類活動,治理環(huán)境(至少兩條)...... 感想建議環(huán)境能夠變得更好......Change for a better China________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】We all know it is being more and more important to protect our environment well. But some people don’t care about it .They throw litter into the river and even worse factories also put waste into the river, the river is full of rubbish. The air is badly polluted because there are more cars on the road these days. Factories that burn coal also pollute the air with a lot of black smoke. We hardly ever see blue skies anymore.I think everyone in our hometown should play a part in cleaning it up. We should write to the government ,they should close down the factories. Trees are very helpful and important for the environment .We can plant more trees and more tre