【正文】 Material Science Programs in your University is ideal for my further development. It provides the best of things important to graduate education, including petitive and inspiring academic atmosphere, active and fruitful research, access to firstclass facilities, and close interaction between students and its distinguished faculty. I feel that the program offered by **** University offers is best in graduate education, including a petitive and inspiring academic atmosphere, active and fruitful research, access to first class facilities and close interaction between students and distinguished faculty members. Very fascinated am I by Professor John Paul‘s projects on nanostructured materials, which go beyond traditional technology and where cuttingedge research is done in bination with frontier knowledge from different disciplines. I am fascinated by Professor Marston‘s projects on nanostructured materials, which go beyond traditional technology. （ Editor39。s ment： The above paragraph talks about study as well as extracurricular participation, contents which should have been in two separate paragraphs.） A precious aspect of my undergraduate education is my research experience. (An important aspect of my undergraduate education was my research experience. valuable, very useful, very helpful) Education at the Big Name University emphasizes the importance of handson experience. (At Big Name University, the emphasis is very much on practical, handson experience. ) （ Editor39。當(dāng)然這一項(xiàng) 并不是一定要求的。 關(guān)于科研能力，你可以寫自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，可以寫自己的技能，可以寫自己研究的范圍，還可以寫自己研究的成果。所謂定位，具體在一篇PS里，就是說申請(qǐng)者如何在經(jīng)過第一階段的反思之后確定出比較能夠體現(xiàn)自己獨(dú)特性所在的個(gè)人形象。所謂Personal, 顧名思義，就是要求申請(qǐng)者寫出自己的個(gè)性或者是個(gè)人特色來。 新東方同學(xué)常見的寫作模塊的第三大部分可以稱之為 ―課外活動(dòng)篇 ‖。 所以我勸大家，以后不要再引用什么名人名言了，不僅起不到你所想像的令對(duì)方大跌眼鏡，深為嘆服的效果，相反，他會(huì)覺得你只是一個(gè)缺乏創(chuàng)造力的學(xué)生，在他的內(nèi)心便對(duì)你產(chǎn)生一種厭惡和反感 新東方學(xué)員的第二個(gè)特 點(diǎn)是喜歡在第一段中揭示自己專業(yè)的重要性。 優(yōu)秀的申請(qǐng)材料可以使國外的教授們忽略一定的 GRE 分?jǐn)?shù)差，如幾十分，甚至一兩百分，而決定給予獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金。對(duì)于西方大學(xué)而言，考試成績只是一個(gè)方面，他們最看重的還是考試所不能衡量的那些素質(zhì)。 奉勸那些托福沒有達(dá)到要求的學(xué)生，一定要重考一次，爭(zhēng)取通過。我所接觸到的新東方的學(xué)生常見的寫作內(nèi)容通?？煞譃橐韵聨讉€(gè)部分或者是幾大模塊：開頭部分說廢話，第二部分強(qiáng)調(diào)勤奮和聰明，第三部分講課外活動(dòng)。 公式化寫作的中間部分則通 常會(huì)出現(xiàn)以下兩種情況：一種是喜歡渲染自己如何勤奮，一種是喜歡突出自己如何智慧。 錄取過程是一個(gè)很主觀的 過程，對(duì)于 PS 的寫作來說 , 對(duì)方在尚未見到你的情況下，文中所描繪的你就像是你的替身，在和大洋彼岸的洋教授們進(jìn)行一次悄無聲息的約見或面談，在這種關(guān)鍵時(shí)刻，你可一定要 ―處心積慮 ‖地使對(duì)方迅速建立起一個(gè)好印象。 在一篇 PS中，我們應(yīng)該用心地追溯自己的個(gè)人歷史，努力找出自己的閃 光點(diǎn)。 首先是關(guān)于寫作的動(dòng)機(jī) (Motivation)。除了品格以外還可以寫性格，比如 說很有活力、多才多藝等都可以寫。 Personal Statement The Creed （ motto） of my family is ―Believe in yourself and take action to change the reality‖. The creed is what has inspired, is inspiring and will inspire me. It tells me never to give up no matter what will happen and how hopeless, because no one cheat me out of ultimate success but myself. (deny) (Editor‘s ment： parallelism: what happens and how hopeless the situation may seem。） I realized that I was in need of systematic training at a more advance level. Furthermore, I wish to be embraced in a professional environment to set out on the path toward my lifelong career (goal) : to be a productive and original researcher or professor. Furthermore, I wished to bee part of a professional environment that can aid my progress towards my chosen career, that of an original and productive researcher or professor. //（ Editor39。s ment： This is misplaced. Should be in the paragraph talking about career plan. 應(yīng)該提前。s ment： the names of professors are irrelevant.） （ The topic of my BS thesis was to be ―the Preparation of Chisotan Microcarriers‖, a challenging project which nobody at the college had previously attempted. ） Together with my advisers, I spent numerous hours in the lab brainstorming, recording, observing and experimenting. （ Along with my supervisors, I spent countless hours in the lab brainstorming, recording data, observing and experimenting.） There were frustrating moments of course, but we were able to e up with creative solutions and make significant headway in the research. （ Despite moments of great frustration, we were able to e up with creative solutions and make significant headway in our research. ） In this project, by using paraffin liquid as oil phrase medium, I prepared the chisotan microcarriers through the suspension method. （ Using paraffin as an oil frame medium, I prepared chisotan carriers through the suspension method. ） This can be used to hybrid bioartificial liver support system. （ This can be used to hybrid a bioartificial liver support system.） First, We used clutaraldehycle as crosslinking reagent. （ First, we used clutaraldehycle as a crosslinking reagent.） Although the chisotan microsphere was well prepared, yet it had much toxicity to the creature. Although well prepared, the chisotan microsphere was too toxic. To solve the problem, I looked up a large amount of materials and finally selected oxided and circleopened lactose as crosslinking reagent. After more research, I solved this problem by selecting crosslinking reagents such as oxidized and circleopened lactose. This kind of chisotan microsphere has good patibility and little toxicity to the creature. Therefore, the chisotan microsphere was patible and no longer too toxic. My director gave me high evaluation for this and my thesis got ―A‖ . (慎用 ) Even though I was not the only one participating in this huge and ongoing project and I did not stay long enough to see its pletion, I was proud of my contribution as well as the accolades I earned from my professors for my thesis and I bee more and more fascinated with materials. Although, I was only one member of a team working on this project, and I was unable to see it through to pletion, I still felt proud of my contribution which resulted in accolades from professors and Grade A for my paper. After my graduation in the summer of 2020, I felt that I need more advanced experiment skills and I stayed in a state key laboratory of Big Name University, which was esta