【正文】 材料中所體現(xiàn)的申請者的綜合素質(zhì)的高低就成了評審委員會的教授們錄取裁斷的依據(jù)。分數(shù)只是一個參考而已， GRE主要看平均分數(shù)線， TOEFL 則是一個過關(guān)分數(shù)。這種公式化的寫作方法其實是挺害人的。 第四種錯誤是喜歡在開頭交代自己寫這篇 PS 的目的，比方說， ―This document is to facilitate my application for admission and scholarship.‖，我稱這種寫作為 ―說了也白說 ‖的寫法。 我國學(xué)生很少能夠在自述中展現(xiàn)出外國教授所不知道的但卻很可能感興趣的社會生活及個人情況，諸如做義工的經(jīng)驗、對社會和自己所讀學(xué)科的看法、具備什么特長、對于未來有何展望等等。 切記： ―獨特性 ‖是寫作 PS 的生命。該誰出陣，用什么樣的秩序，就要靠你這個統(tǒng)帥來根據(jù)需要調(diào)兵遣將。品格里面有對專業(yè)的獻身精神，也有超越自身的利益而對社會的獻身精神。 成功案例分析和評改 材料學(xué)專業(yè)申請文件評改 Personal Statement The Creed of my family is ―Believe in yourself and take action to change the reality‖. The creed is what has inspired, is inspiring and will inspire me. It tells me never to give up no matter what will happen and how hopeless, because no one cheat me out of ultimate success but myself. I am born in a impoverished family isolated by high mountains. I have one brother and one sister. The fee for us three is a great burden on my parents. When I was very young, I began to do what I can do to help alleviate the financial burden on my parents and built strong independent ability. And I studied diligently and outperformed most of my classmates. For years, my academic report card was the main source of pride in my family. As the best student of my high school, I was well prepared in 1995 when I took the National University Entrance Examinations, held nation wide once every year to screen high school graduates for higher education. I ranked the first in overall scores of the students who entered the Department of Chemistry in Big Name University that year in my province. On the strength of these scores, I gained acceptance into the Department of Chemistry in the Big Name University to begin my intense undergraduate chemistry study. I was proud of this since the Department of Chemistry ranks 1st together with Peking University in chemistry education and research in P. R. China, and it has raised thousands of scholars. Since I entered into the university, I have studied diligently and conscientiously. With that, I have acquired a solid background in chemistry, mathematics and physics. With an overall GPA of , I have, for four years running, stayed among the top 5% of the class in all subjects of my undergraduate studies. The scholarships and honors are the reflections of my achievements. I have not confined myself to my coursework, however, I have frequented the library and probably read more chemistry literature than most of other students. By satisfying my thirst for more knowledge, I have kept myself abreast of the new developments in chemistry around the world. On the other hand, I did not allow my heavy load of study to deter me from taking part in 這里應(yīng)該分段 extracurricular activities. As the monitor of the class and a member of the Students Union, I honed my anizing skills and augmented my work efficiency. I learned to be both a team leader and a team player. Convinced that the meaning of life es from helping others, I have always been most obliging wherever anyone es to me for help, which has won me lots of friends. Such personality, bined with my intellectual vigor and determination, should stand me ready for any challenges. A precious aspect of my undergraduate education is my research experience. Education at the Big Name University emphasizes the importance of handson experience. In the first semester of college life, we were told to do all the experiments independently. Because of my excellent performance in chemistry and puter, I was elected to the Chemisoft Society, a society that develops program for Computer Aided Instruction of Chemistry. I am the only students who holds the longest membership over 3 years and one of the two students who were admitted into this program exceptionally when we were only freshmen. We worked in our spare time and developed a series of chemistry education software that are used in the teaching now. Our program named ―Periodic System of the Chemical Elements‖ was awarded the first prize by the state Educational Department of China. This is a scale project sponsored for teaching software petition among advanced universities. During the whole course of work, I improved my experiment operation and mastered many kinds of software, At the same time, a strong interest in materials is established, when I read a lot on material chemistry to solve the problems in the development of the software. At the autumn of 2020, Professor Cui made me a member of his research team, a key research team and laboratory in China, Where I was remended for doing my BS research under the direction of Professor Tan. The topic of my thesis is ― the Preparation of the Chisotan Microcarriers‖. It was a challenging topic because nobody in the college had ever tackled it. Together with my advisers, I spent numerous hours in the lab brainstorming, recording, observing and experimenting. There were frustrating moments of course, but we were able to e up with creative solutions and make significant headway in the research. In this project, by using paraffin liquid as oil phrase medium, I prepared the chisotan microcarriers through the suspension method. This can be used to hybrid bioartificial liver support system. First, We used clutaraldehycle as crosslinking reagent. Although the chisotan microsphere was well prepared, yet it had much toxicity to the creature. To solve the problem, I looked up a large amount of materials and finally selected oxided and circleopened lactose as crosslinking reagent. This kind of chisotan microsphere has good patibility and little toxicity to the creature. My director gave me high evaluation for this and my thesis got ―A‖ . Even though I was not the only one participating in this huge and ongoing project and I did not stay long enough to see its pletion, I was proud of my contribution as