【正文】 然而，不少父母把重視化為對(duì)于點(diǎn)點(diǎn)成績(jī)的糾結(jié)，平日里的“天之驕子”因點(diǎn)點(diǎn)失誤而被“由愛轉(zhuǎn)恨”者有之，一直。勿以點(diǎn)點(diǎn)沉浮論英雄“愛其子，擇師而教之。語言簡(jiǎn)潔、流暢，有一定的文采。接著用自己成長(zhǎng)的例子，說明母親過高期望給自己帶來的壓力及反感，并提出“壓力就像一個(gè)雞蛋，從里面打破的是生命，從外面打破的就只有滅亡”，分析深刻、透徹。立意深刻，中心突出，是本文的另一特色。母親愛兒子，希望兒子優(yōu)秀；兒子愛母親、理解母親，希望能“看到一個(gè)溫柔的母親”，這里沒有點(diǎn)染、沒有修飾、沒有造作，是自然的流露。在書信中巧妙、多次扣題及點(diǎn)題是本文的特色之一。您的兒子 2016年6月7日點(diǎn)評(píng)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的書信。今天，坐在高考考場(chǎng)上，人生往后漫漫長(zhǎng)路也許就在我的筆尖下書寫與改變，只是想借此機(jī)會(huì)，想跟您說一句：這一次，讓我做一回真正的自己，無論結(jié)果如何，我都無怨無悔。同為少年成名的作家蔣方舟，小小年紀(jì)便已出書，但她并不是父母逼的，而是她真的熱愛寫作，到如今已是受廣大讀者喜愛的青年作家之一。我希望您能尊重我內(nèi)心的最真實(shí)的意愿，而不是一味強(qiáng)加壓力給我，我的成長(zhǎng)并不是您個(gè)人的意志就能決定的，就好像思想家盧梭曾說：“大自然希望兒童在成人以前，就應(yīng)像兒童的樣子。而我心里卻是忐忑的，我因?yàn)槟竺看慰荚嚩家?5分以上，所以我才懼怕，即使我的成績(jī)?cè)诎嗌虾芎谩Ｎ矣浀梦胰W(xué)鋼琴，你會(huì)坐著聽我彈，聽我練，直到每一個(gè)音符都彈得流暢，您才會(huì)微笑地放我離開，我去考級(jí)，雖說也并不真的痛恨鋼琴，但我對(duì)考級(jí)的厭惡有一半都來自您過高的期望。我記得小時(shí)候，您一直拿我跟別人比，我記得我的表弟，有時(shí)候他來我家吃飯，您就會(huì)說：“看誰吃得最快。致母親的一封信親愛的母親： 您好！先請(qǐng)?jiān)试S我引用一句名言：“人能夠登上榮譽(yù)的高峰，卻不能長(zhǎng)久地居住在那里。全文文氣涌動(dòng)，文脈清晰，皆賴這十問之功。本段結(jié)尾兩個(gè)反問句，鮮明的觀點(diǎn)自在問中，又自然引出第五段提出解決問題的辦法，推進(jìn)論證向更深一層發(fā)展。第三段結(jié)尾的設(shè)問承上啟下，引出下文產(chǎn)生的“對(duì)分?jǐn)?shù)的執(zhí)著”的社會(huì)根源，使論證更深一層，也發(fā)人深思。開篇以兩問自然引入。“滿分得吻，98分得巴掌這一荒謬現(xiàn)象，正是被詬病許久的唯分?jǐn)?shù)論的體現(xiàn)”，語句簡(jiǎn)潔，觀點(diǎn)鮮明；結(jié)尾簡(jiǎn)短有力，回應(yīng)首段。一是語言凝練。巴掌與吻，是耶非耶？唯有痛定思痛，對(duì)未來的教育報(bào)之以歌。君不見今年校園投毒案中，犯罪的青年雖分?jǐn)?shù)耀眼，但人格上有著致命缺陷，如若僅憑巴掌與吻一味注目分?jǐn)?shù)浮動(dòng)，還能說是“育人”嗎？培育的到底是棟梁還是外表光鮮，內(nèi)里朽爛的速生木？所謂求全責(zé)備與寬容鼓勵(lì)之異，在向教育敲響警鐘，內(nèi)里顯現(xiàn)的教育觀念之弊，正中痛點(diǎn)。滿分得吻、98分得巴掌這一荒謬現(xiàn)象，正是被詬病許久的唯分?jǐn)?shù)論的體現(xiàn)，當(dāng)家長(zhǎng)并不在乎分?jǐn)?shù)背后反映的知識(shí)掌握情況，指導(dǎo)學(xué)習(xí)作用時(shí)，也就不再在意“98分已經(jīng)很接近滿分”這一事實(shí)，而是只看見比上次退步了2分的情況，辨不清“無論55分還是61分都說明孩子學(xué)習(xí)狀況不佳，”而只關(guān)注比上次進(jìn)步了6分。僅從表面上看，母親對(duì)從滿分降為98分的退步的孩子求全責(zé)備，而對(duì)雖然一開始不及格、但后來進(jìn)步的孩子不吝愛吻，是不是僅說明這位母親鼓勵(lì)進(jìn)步之可取與苛責(zé)退步之不妥呢？并非如此，撥開表面的巴掌與吻之別，在這幅漫畫中，我們應(yīng)看到僅僅是分?jǐn)?shù)上的一點(diǎn)變化，都足以使家長(zhǎng)做出截然不同的反應(yīng)，其背后折射出的無數(shù)個(gè)家庭相似的情景，不免令人深思。在追求完美、施行“虎媽狼爸”教育方式的中國(guó)父母群體中，這位母親的寬容心態(tài)顯得那么與眾不同，她或許就是考生們筆下心心念念呼喚的那位“母親”！巴掌之吻 教育之痛一張考卷，幾分浮動(dòng)，換得巴掌與吻。文似看山不喜平，本文的轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)是她“成為了我的母親”，敘事的時(shí)間跨度使文章產(chǎn)生了歷史感，情感色彩從憂傷苦悶逐漸轉(zhuǎn)為平和豁達(dá)，內(nèi)容和情感豐富充實(shí)立體。點(diǎn)評(píng)：與一般考生作文寫法不同，本文并不是千篇一律地從漫畫材料的描述分析開始，而是用了一個(gè)別出心裁的描寫性開頭，營(yíng)造出一種肅穆的氣氛來吸引讀者。不過，后面其實(shí)還有很多輛車在等我，因?yàn)槲乙恢痹谂M(jìn)步，就像小樹一直在努力進(jìn)步和成就一片繁茂；就像水滴一直在努力進(jìn)步匯成一曲江河，奔向所夢(mèng)想的遠(yuǎn)方。如今，我走在了媽媽曾經(jīng)走過的路上，只求問心無愧和爭(zhēng)取進(jìn)步，或許我的進(jìn)步十分微小。功課落下了不少，成績(jī)自然也不算優(yōu)秀，媽媽也還是只有“進(jìn)步”一個(gè)要求。但我媽媽也是有底線的，她不要求我每次都要考滿分、90分，她只要求我每次進(jìn)步，哪怕只有一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)。再后來，她結(jié)了婚，生了小孩，成為了我的母親。畢業(yè)后，女孩搭上南下的火車，找了份工作，平平淡淡地活著。幾個(gè)月后，孩子聽了父親的話，背上行囊，去了一個(gè)二本的院校，繼續(xù)著自己的人生。有進(jìn)步就是好的，雖然你的進(jìn)步并未幫你達(dá)成目標(biāo)，但那又怎樣？只要能進(jìn)步，在哪都能成就精彩?！皩?duì)不起，我還是沒考上，你罵我吧。盛夏，農(nóng)村的夜空被點(diǎn)點(diǎn)繁星照亮，女孩睜著流著淚的眼睛，看著熱鬧的夜空，仿佛自己的夢(mèng)想跟那星星一樣離她如此遙遠(yuǎn)。也許是好事多磨，女孩雖然比最后一次?？挤?jǐn)?shù)多出了很多，但依然未能考上夢(mèng)想院校，只因幾分。只是看見，從那以后，女孩仿佛在書桌旁生了根。女孩于殘陽中站了起來，她撕碎了手里的試卷，回到了家。一個(gè)十八歲的少女坐在河邊，手里拿著最后一次的?？季?，上面的分?jǐn)?shù)令她心寒。一點(diǎn)進(jìn)步，一種人生暮色暗淡，殘陽如血。3．參考詞匯：門票entrance feeDear Editor．I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrancefee should be charged for parks．高考滿分作文1(1號(hào)題)Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for % of us schoolmates think that an entrance fee do not meet people’s expectations, for a park is considered to be a place where the public can have a good time when they are not busy either at home or at an entrance fee must be paid by the visitors for a park, it will be necessary to build a gate and surrounding the end a city will take on a bad % of us schoolmates think that an entrance fee can be accepted, but it must not be too money from ticket selling can be used for paying the gardeners in the park and buying some other kinds of flowers and regard to myself, I think an entrance fee is useful, for it can be used to protect a we share the same opinion, dear editor?Yours truly,Li Hua高考英語滿分作文第二篇Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for students out of one hundred think that an entrance fee should not be bought before one enters a park, for it is a place for the public to go to when they are a ticket must be bought, a gate and walls have to be built for a park, which will make a city look students out of one hundred think that an entrance fee should be bought before one enters a park, but that the price of the ticket should be that is got from ticket selling can be used to pay the gardening workers and buy different kinds of flowers and for myself, I really think parks are good places to go to at weekends and on the sametime, we, as visitors, should pay the entrance fee when we enter a all, it takes a lot of money to maintain a park in good working you agree with me, dear editor?Yours truly,Li HuaDear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for percent of my schoolmates are for the idea that an entrance fee should not be forced on the believe parks are the place where the public enjoy themselves at their think that a gate and wails are to be built if an entrance fee is to be city will not look so beautiful as it should percent of my schoolmates are for the idea that an entrance fee is OK, but it shouldn’t be out of fee can be used to pay the gardeners and buy new types of flowers and myself, I’d like to say that if we all work hard to build our city into a flower garden, who cares about the entrance fee for parks?Yours truly,Li Hua高考英語滿分作文第四篇Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for against charging entrance fee for parks take up 60%.They are of one mind that parks are a place for the public’s tickets are demanded on the visitors of a park, a gate has to be set up and so have the walls on the four so, city will not look as beautiful as it , those in favour of charging entrance fee for parks take up 40%.They all think that ticket price should be controlled properly, and that entrance fee can be used to pay the gardeners and buy new sorts of flowers and truth lies in the hands of the my argument stand to reason, dear editor?Yours truly,Li HuaDear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for all us who have joined in the discussion, 60% share the point of view that an entrance fee should not be charged while 40% share the opposite who don’t agree with the idea think that a park is a place where the public can spend their spare time for in support of the idea think that entran