【正文】 最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查，確保正確無誤。在寫作時(shí)，注意連句成篇，保持文章的連貫性，要層次清楚，要點(diǎn)分明，中心突出。文章時(shí)態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱主要用第一、第三人稱。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面的提示，寫一篇不少于80詞的英語短文，談一談你對(duì)智能手機(jī)的看法，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。修改潤(rùn)色。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。初寫短文。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【答案】例文Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. I have got good results in most of my subjects, but I am not happy with myself. I think I must spend more time on my studies.My parents are really strict with me. However, they care for me as well. Once upon a time, I failed in my physics exam and felt stressed and sad. They had a close munication with me and helped me solve my problems and cheer up again.My teachers are also ready to help us. They hope that we can realize our dreams. They tell us to try our best and not to give up. Life is always full of ups and downs. It39。 （2）. 第2要點(diǎn)和第3要點(diǎn)要用2—3句話作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。他們希望你們實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的理想。 （2）. 你的父母對(duì)你嚴(yán)格要求，但是也很關(guān)心你。要點(diǎn)如下： （1）. 雖然你大部分功課你都學(xué)得比較好，但是你對(duì)自己不滿意。本文中時(shí)間詞如After supper，Sometimes，in the evening等的巧妙使用，使得本文看起來邏輯清楚，條理分明。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。根據(jù)材料可知，本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第三人稱進(jìn)行敘述，寫作中主語時(shí)態(tài)及主謂一致等問題?！敬鸢浮縊ne possible versionDear Mary,I’m very glad to introduce（介紹） my classmate Zhang Ying to you. She is a 14yearold girl. She has a lot of good habits. She gets up early every morning. In class she likes to ask her teachers some questions. After school she always exercises （for a long time）. After supper she helps her parents with housework. （She is really a good girl. ）But she has some bad habits, too. She often eats junk food for breakfast. Sometimes she quarrels with her classmates in class. She doesn’t go home on time and she always watches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. （This makes her parents unhappy. ）I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。詞數(shù)不少于60個(gè)英語單詞。TimeGood habitsBad habitsIn the morningGet up earlyEat junk food for breakfastIn classAsk some questionsQuarrel（爭(zhēng)吵） with herclassmates sometimesAfter schoolAlways exerciseGo home lateIn the eveningHelp her parents with houseworkWatch TV or play putergames for more than an hour要求：語言要通順，表達(dá)要正確。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。修改潤(rùn)色。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。初寫短文。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.