【正文】 y easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文，主要講述網(wǎng)購(gòu)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容?！玖咙c(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。點(diǎn)睛：寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話(huà)題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．上周，你們班就初中生能否騎電動(dòng)自行車(chē)上學(xué)進(jìn)行了一次討論。現(xiàn)在，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇介紹討論情況的短文。注意：；，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整、規(guī)范；。生詞提示：electric 討論結(jié)果25人表示同意35人不同意理由；。，騎電動(dòng)車(chē)不安全；，騎電動(dòng)車(chē)也快不起來(lái)?！敬鸢浮縇ast week， our class had a discussion about whether junior students could ride electric bicycles to go to students of our class agreed with it， because they said it was convenient for them and it could takethem less time to go to school. But the other 35 students didn’t agree with them. They said it was not safe forthe junior students to get to school by electric bicycles， for they were too young. They also said in the morningthe traffic was busy and the students couldn’t ride electric bicycles quickly.【解析】試題分析：本題要求以初中生能否騎電動(dòng)自行車(chē)上學(xué)進(jìn)行了一次討論。根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇80100詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文，而且要做到表達(dá)清楚，語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫。根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)可知，本文主要以一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)書(shū)寫(xiě)。要注意把每一個(gè)要點(diǎn)都表達(dá)出來(lái)，不要遺漏任何一個(gè)，書(shū)寫(xiě)時(shí)一定注意時(shí)態(tài)的正確使用。觀(guān)點(diǎn)分明，談及理由按照要求至少要各寫(xiě)兩點(diǎn)。并注意上下文要語(yǔ)句貫通。并且要圍繞主題適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：短文中作者按照題目的要求，給我們介紹了持不同觀(guān)點(diǎn)的學(xué)生各自的理由，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，要點(diǎn)全面。時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整規(guī)范。該文中以下幾個(gè)句子用得很好。Because they said it was convenient for them and it could take them less time to go to school. They also said in the morningthe traffic was busy and the students couldn’t ride electric bicycles ，理由也很充分?？键c(diǎn)：提綱類(lèi)作文。10．寫(xiě)作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文，標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”，請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一篇英文稿件，內(nèi)容需包括以下要點(diǎn):1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右（題目不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。【答案】Last summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫(xiě)作分析：這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文，需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問(wèn)題的回答，描述一次自己讓別人開(kāi)心快樂(lè)的經(jīng)歷，是一篇記敘文，首先要讀懂5個(gè)問(wèn)題，其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問(wèn)題的回答聯(lián)系在一起，變成一篇短文，同時(shí)也要注意在描述過(guò)去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)。寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：既然這是一篇記敘文，就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事，需要加上必要的背景，指明時(shí)間（Last summer），地點(diǎn)（in rural area），簡(jiǎn)要概括事件（teach children English），這是文章首句的點(diǎn)睛之筆，信息量豐富。短語(yǔ)和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少，例如“adjust to…”（調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…），“as time went by”（隨著時(shí)間的流逝），“made great progress”（取得巨大進(jìn)步），“keep on learning”（繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)），“In a word”（總而言之）等等短語(yǔ)使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度，表示如果還有機(jī)會(huì)自己還樂(lè)于參與，這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表意更加清晰。