【正文】 ：本篇作文按照題目要求選擇了城市A作為自己暑假旅游的目的地。對于城市A的缺點，作者用了“Although”盡管一詞輕輕帶過。對于優(yōu)點則重點突出，因為在城市A可以做很多事情，作者在這里用了詞組“a lot of ”。在比較的時候，作者用了多種方式，使句子不單調(diào)，比如在比較溫度時，直接用比較級“higher”在說旅館時用了“l(fā)ess fortable ”，比較食物時，用了“as…as”等。在說選擇城市A的原因時，用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句。本文大部分都是復(fù)雜句，顯示了作者比較熟練的英語寫作水平。9．寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學生征文，標題為“ A time when I made someone happy”，請你寫一篇英文稿件，內(nèi)容需包括以下要點:1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右（題目不計入總詞數(shù)）?！敬鸢浮縇ast summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析：這是一篇給定標題的材料作文，需要逐條完成要點問題的回答，描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷，是一篇記敘文，首先要讀懂5個問題，其次要用恰當?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起，變成一篇短文，同時也要注意在描述過去的故事的時候要正確運用過去時態(tài)。寫作亮點：既然這是一篇記敘文，就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事，需要加上必要的背景，指明時間（Last summer），地點（in rural area），簡要概括事件（teach children English），這是文章首句的點睛之筆，信息量豐富。短語和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少，例如“adjust to…”（調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…），“as time went by”（隨著時間的流逝），“made great progress”（取得巨大進步），“keep on learning”（繼續(xù)學習），“In a word”（總而言之）等等短語使用正確。在收尾部分表達了作者積極的人生態(tài)度，表示如果還有機會自己還樂于參與，這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表意更加清晰。10．假如你是李華，請你根據(jù)以下提示用英語寫一封保護大象的倡議書。 提示：陸地上最大的哺乳動物，可以活到80歲。目前數(shù)量在減少，因為：1）人們砍伐森林，大象漸漸失去家園；2）人們捕殺大象，獲取象牙。3）應(yīng)如何保護它們（不少于三條）。要求：1）恰當運用比較級和最高級；2）80詞左右。倡議書的結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。參考詞匯：哺乳動物mammal。 象牙ivoryDear classmates_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________I believe everyone39。s contribution （貢獻） can make a big difference. Yours,Lihua【答案】Dear classmates,Elephants are the largest mammals on the land and they can live up to be eighty years. But now the number of the elephants is decreasing because of the following reasons. Firstly, people cut down trees in the forest, so elephants are losing their homes. Secondly, people also kill elephants for their ivory.As a result, we need to do something to help them. First, we should plant more trees to build the homes for elephants. Second, we can put up post on the street to tell people that it is against the law to kill elephants. Or we can also hold some activities in some public places to spread the idea of protecting the elephants. I believe everyone39。s contribution （貢獻） can make a big difference. Yours,Lihua【解析】【詳解】本文是一封倡議書,倡議大家保護大象。文章共分為三個方面的內(nèi)容，首先描述大象想在所處的現(xiàn)狀，然后說明出現(xiàn)這種狀況的原因，最后為了保護的大象我們應(yīng)該如何去做。時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時。提出倡議時可以使用We can/ We should/ Let’s/We’d better的表示建議的句子。寫作時注意不要使用太復(fù)雜的句型，以免出現(xiàn)語法錯誤，為使句子具有連貫性，可以適當使用連詞。本篇文章內(nèi)容完整，符合材料要求，Elephants are the largest mammals …,及First, we should plant more trees 也使用到了比較級和最高級；Firstly,…. Secondly,…等詞的使用使文章具有層次性，條理清晰。并且一些連詞的使用，比如so, or, but等也使文章具有連貫性，是一篇不錯的文章。