【正文】 自長(zhǎng)輩的壓歲錢（luckymoney）。隨著生活水平的提高，大部分孩子得到越來越多的壓歲錢，有些甚至通過微信（WeChat）或支付寶（Alipay）收壓歲錢。同學(xué)們?cè)撊绾喂芾碜约旱腻X，讓自己的錢用得更有意義？這是一篇給材料作文，本題所給材料比較詳細(xì)，寫作中注意將所給內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來，不能逐字翻譯。通過閱讀材料可知這篇短文主要使用的人稱就是第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意謂語動(dòng)詞的變化。動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫作中注意語義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞?！军c(diǎn)睛】文章使用了很好的短語和句子：In order to make good use of the lucky money, I think we can do the following things. First, we should save part of the money for our study instead of wasting it on video 。9．環(huán)保話題是人們最關(guān)心的話題之一，請(qǐng)以Change for a better China為主題，結(jié)合自己家鄉(xiāng)的變化寫一篇英語短文。注意事項(xiàng)：，條理清楚，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。,詞數(shù)不少于80。 狀況水污染，大氣污染...... 應(yīng)對(duì)措施立即阻止此類活動(dòng),治理環(huán)境（至少兩條）...... 感想建議環(huán)境能夠變得更好......Change for a better China________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】We all know it is being more and more important to protect our environment well. But some people don’t care about it .They throw litter into the river and even worse factories also put waste into the river, the river is full of rubbish. The air is badly polluted because there are more cars on the road these days. Factories that burn coal also pollute the air with a lot of black smoke. We hardly ever see blue skies anymore.I think everyone in our hometown should play a part in cleaning it up. We should write to the government ,they should close down the factories. Trees are very helpful and important for the environment .We can plant more trees and more trees in order to live better and more healthy .Now, Our hometown has started to face the problem, I believe we can make our country a better place if we keep trying.【解析】【詳解】環(huán)保話題是人們最關(guān)心的話題之一，請(qǐng)以Change for a better China為主題，結(jié)合自己家鄉(xiāng)的變化寫一篇英語短文。要求中已經(jīng)給出了部分提示，動(dòng)筆先應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀提示，確定寫作內(nèi)容。寫作中注意表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)時(shí)的常用句式，注意在表達(dá)不同觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，連詞的使用。內(nèi)容上應(yīng)注意描述的全面性；語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣?！军c(diǎn)睛】本文緊扣要求對(duì)家鄉(xiāng)做了簡(jiǎn)單介紹，內(nèi)容完整，用了表格中的信息。2.句式豐富。表述靈活。銜接自然，順暢。文中用到了一些好的句型：The air is badly polluted because there are more cars on the road these days.；We can plant more trees and more trees in order to live better and more 。10．隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展、人們消費(fèi)觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變， 購(gòu)物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化。“網(wǎng)購(gòu)”已成為一種時(shí)尚，越來越多的學(xué)生也加入到網(wǎng)購(gòu)群體中。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格的提示，寫一篇網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的文章。優(yōu)點(diǎn)（advantage）；節(jié)約時(shí)間；避免擁擠、勞累，品種多缺點(diǎn)（disadvantage）， 看不到商品本身， 造成浪費(fèi)你的觀點(diǎn)……提示詞匯：網(wǎng)購(gòu)shopping online。 商品 goods。 導(dǎo)致 cause注意：，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；；：100詞左右，文章開頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總數(shù)。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has bee fashionable. Some of us students also join the group. Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower. Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文，主要講述網(wǎng)購(gòu)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容?！玖咙c(diǎn)說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。點(diǎn)睛：寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。