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tches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. (This makes her parents unhappy. )I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析:這是一篇提綱類作文,題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將張穎的情況介紹清楚。根據(jù)材料可知,本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài),第三人稱進(jìn)行敘述,寫作中主語時態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點,做到語句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞?!玖咙c說明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式,如:be glad to do sth高興做某事;a lot of許多;get up起床等。本文中時間詞如After supper,Sometimes,in the evening等的巧妙使用,使得本文看起來邏輯清楚,條理分明。在學(xué)習(xí)中,我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.考點:考查提綱類作文9.寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文,標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”,請你寫一篇英文稿件,內(nèi)容需包括以下要點:1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意:1.詞數(shù):100左右(題目不計入總詞數(shù))?!敬鸢浮縇ast summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析:這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文,需要逐條完成要點問題的回答,描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷,是一篇記敘文,首先要讀懂5個問題,其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起,變成一篇短文,同時也要注意在描述過去的故事的時候要正確運用過去時態(tài)。寫作亮點:既然這是一篇記敘文,就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事,需要加上必要的背景,指明時間(Last summer),地點(in rural area),簡要概括事件(teach children English),這是文章首句的點睛之筆,信息量豐富。短語和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少,例如“adjust to…”(調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…),“as time went by”(隨著時間的流逝),“made great progress”(取得巨大進(jìn)步),“keep on learning”(繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)),“In a word”(總而言之)等等短語使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度,表示如果還有機(jī)會自己還樂于參與,這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整,表意更加清晰。10.同學(xué)們,初中生活即將結(jié)束,本次考試后,盼望已久的假期就要到來!請你根據(jù)以下提示,制定出度假計劃,可以結(jié)合自己的實際發(fā)揮。 寫作內(nèi)容:,享受大自然的美景,放松心情。,幫家長做家務(wù)。 寫作要求: 詞左右,開頭部分已給出,但不計入規(guī)定字?jǐn)?shù)。;要點齊全;句子及篇章結(jié)構(gòu)正確、連貫;書寫規(guī)范。My junior high school years are ing to an end. The summer holiday is on the way. Here are my plans for the long exciting holidays. 【答案】My junior high school years are ing to an end. The summer holiday is on the way. Here are my plans for the long exciting holidays.Because I have a busy life in school days,I will get close to nature and relax myself with my parents. I will volunteer to do something for others .I will stay with my parents and help my parents to do some housework in my free. I will also read every morning. From the books, I can get more knowledge to fulfill myself. I also decide to have a good sleep during the vacation. I decide to take part in some social activities in order to know about the real society. I will stay away from dangerous , I will keep a diary and then take it to school for sharing with my classmates.I39。m sure I39。ll have an interesting and meaningful summer holiday.【解析】試題分析:短文要制定出度假計劃,文章需要用第一人稱“I”進(jìn)行書寫,不可使用“we/ you”等其他人稱。文章主要內(nèi)容為計劃的書寫,主要使用一般將來時態(tài)。所寫的句子要符合英語語法,不能遺漏要點。寫作亮點:短文用了一些短語和句式,如:e to an end結(jié)束;on the way在途中;get close to nature親近大自然;volunteer to do something自愿做某事;help sb to do sth幫助某人做某事;take part in sth參加活動。用了一些銜接詞besides等,句子過度自然。用了because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句,增加了文章的亮點??键c:考查提綱作文。