【正文】 n not only enjoy the special and beautiful plants but also learn different cultures in various indoor or outdoor shows. We plan to stay there for a whole day. You39。d better wear a pair of fortable sports shoes and take some food and drinks with you.I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】1. 題干解讀：這是一篇給材料作文，屬于應(yīng)用文寫作。本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；提示的問題就是寫作的基本方向，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮即可。2. 例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：文章采取郵件格式，時(shí)態(tài)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)為主。語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，語言準(zhǔn)確，語意連貫，表達(dá)清楚，具有邏輯性。3. 高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：school gate；invite sb. to do；a lot of；plan to do。句型：not only…but also；You39。d better …；I39。m looking forward to…。9．書面表達(dá)（本題15分）根據(jù)要求完成短文寫作，請(qǐng)將作文寫在答題卡指定的位置上。為了使生活更美好，社會(huì)需要正能量（positive energy）。生活中，我們需要他人的幫助，也要學(xué)會(huì)幫助他人。請(qǐng)你在網(wǎng)上給What would you do?本期節(jié)目留言，內(nèi)容包括：1. 你對(duì)節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法；2. 說說你幫助別人或別人幫助你的一件事例；3. 呼吁大家互幫互助，彼此感恩，讓社會(huì)充滿正能量。作文要求：1．不得照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名。2．語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。 作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不必抄寫在試卷上，也不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”（113w）【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，描述對(duì)節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵(lì)大家相互幫助，并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10．寫作某英文網(wǎng)站的“ Student Life”欄目正在向中學(xué)生征文，標(biāo)題為“ A time when I made someone happy”，請(qǐng)你寫一篇英文稿件，內(nèi)容需包括以下要點(diǎn):1. Who was the person you made happy?2. When was it?3. What did you say or do?4. Why did it make him/her happy?5. How did you feel at that moment?注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右（題目不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。【答案】Last summer,though it was hot,I volunteered to teach children English in rural I arrived there,I couldn39。t adjust to the weather and life ,as time went by,I found myself quite happy when I saw the students I was teaching made great order to teach them,I had to keep on learning as a result,my English improved a ,I made friends with some of my are still keeping in touch by letter now.In a word,not only did I help those in need,but also I myself learn a lot that I have another chance to do volunteer work,I am ready to go.【解析】寫作分析：這是一篇給定標(biāo)題的材料作文，需要逐條完成要點(diǎn)問題的回答，描述一次自己讓別人開心快樂的經(jīng)歷，是一篇記敘文，首先要讀懂5個(gè)問題，其次要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言和銜接手段把這五個(gè)問題的回答聯(lián)系在一起，變成一篇短文，同時(shí)也要注意在描述過去的故事的時(shí)候要正確運(yùn)用過去時(shí)態(tài)。寫作亮點(diǎn)：既然這是一篇記敘文，就應(yīng)該完整地呈現(xiàn)故事，需要加上必要的背景，指明時(shí)間（Last summer），地點(diǎn)（in rural area），簡要概括事件（teach children English），這是文章首句的點(diǎn)睛之筆，信息量豐富。短語和固定搭配的正確使用也為這篇文章增色不少，例如“adjust to…”（調(diào)整以適應(yīng)…），“as time went by”（隨著時(shí)間的流逝），“made great progress”（取得巨大進(jìn)步），“keep on learning”（繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)），“In a word”（總而言之）等等短語使用正確。在收尾部分表達(dá)了作者積極的人生態(tài)度，表示如果還有機(jī)會(huì)自己還樂于參與，這樣使得這篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表意更加清晰。