【正文】 筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．書面表達(dá)（本題15分）根據(jù)要求完成短文寫作，請(qǐng)將作文寫在答題卡指定的位置上。為了使生活更美好，社會(huì)需要正能量（positive energy）。生活中，我們需要他人的幫助，也要學(xué)會(huì)幫助他人。請(qǐng)你在網(wǎng)上給What would you do?本期節(jié)目留言，內(nèi)容包括：1. 你對(duì)節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法；2. 說說你幫助別人或別人幫助你的一件事例；3. 呼吁大家互幫互助，彼此感恩，讓社會(huì)充滿正能量。作文要求：1．不得照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名。2．語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。 作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不必抄寫在試卷上，也不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”（113w）【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，描述對(duì)節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵(lì)大家相互幫助，并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10．書面表達(dá)“Life is like a box of of never know what you are going to get next.”Forrest Gump 中文譯名：《阿甘正傳》“Hope is a good thing. Maybe the best of things and no good thing ever dies.”The Shawshank Kedemption 中文譯名：《肖申克的救贖》“We are all running very hard. We are all dream chasers（追夢(mèng)人）.”President Xi Jingping以上材料告訴我們：生活是豐富多彩的，有快樂幸福也有傷心失落。但既然選擇了遠(yuǎn)方，便只顧風(fēng)雨兼程。所以在學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，我們要滿懷希望、努力奔跑、追逐夢(mèng)想。請(qǐng)以Dream Chaser為題，談?wù)勀阕约旱挠^點(diǎn)。要點(diǎn)提示：，并努力讓它成為現(xiàn)實(shí)；，使自己不斷強(qiáng)大；，積極參加社會(huì)活動(dòng)；。寫作要求：，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮使行文連貫； ，字跡工整，詞數(shù)不少于80；，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；。Dream ChaserAs we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel ______________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel upset. In order to make our dream e true, firstly we should set a practical goal. But just having a goal is not enough. More importantly, we need to study hard to make ourselves stronger. Besides, as teenagers, it is necessary for us to take part in more social activities. We can learn a lot from each other by joining in those social activities. However, there will be many difficulties in both our daily life and study, so please keep patient and be brave to face these challenges. Finally, all our efforts are meaningful and one day our dream will be achieved.【解析】【詳解】：這是一篇材料作文。主要說明要有自己的目標(biāo)，努力實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)應(yīng)做到勤奮學(xué)習(xí)，使自己不斷強(qiáng)大；正確面對(duì)困難，積極參加社會(huì)活動(dòng)。：例文用第一人稱來敘述主要內(nèi)容；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，主要講述如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的目標(biāo)（Firstly,…More importantly,…Besides,…Finally,…）。承接文章開頭，句意完整，避免漢語式英語，敘述條理清晰。：高分短語：feel satisfied；feel upset；e true；set a practical goal；both…and…；keep patient。高分句型：It is +adj. + for sb. +to do sth.；there be句型；祈使句；need to do sth.。