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ou doing? I’m writing to tell you that we received the books that you bought for us. We are grateful to you and all of us are very happy。Last Friday,we had a reading party, which was held on Friday in our reading room. Then we are going to hold an activity to share the feeling with others at 3:00 on Friday afternoon. All of us are fond of buying books on the Internet. We are going to buy some books on the Internet next month. As far as I am concerned, on the one hand, the books on the Internet are cheaper than those in the bookstore. On the other hand, there are all kinds of books, so we needn’t go from one bookstore to another .Best wishes!Yours,Cathy【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,向外教介紹俱樂(lè)部中讀書(shū)交流會(huì)的活動(dòng),并且告訴外教同學(xué)們現(xiàn)在喜歡網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書(shū)并闡述網(wǎng)購(gòu)圖書(shū)的好處。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如bought sth for sb, be grateful to, be going to do, share sth with sb, be fond of, as far as I am concerned, on the one hand...on the other hand, from to以及we had a reading party,which was held on Friday in our reading room中which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了,在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言,大小寫(xiě)是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10.假如你是李華,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封保護(hù)大象的倡議書(shū)。 提示:陸地上最大的哺乳動(dòng)物,可以活到80歲。目前數(shù)量在減少,因?yàn)椋?)人們砍伐森林,大象漸漸失去家園;2)人們捕殺大象,獲取象牙。3)應(yīng)如何保護(hù)它們(不少于三條)。要求:1)恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用比較級(jí)和最高級(jí);2)80詞左右。倡議書(shū)的結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。參考詞匯:哺乳動(dòng)物mammal。 象牙ivoryDear classmates_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________I believe everyone39。s contribution (貢獻(xiàn)) can make a big difference. Yours,Lihua【答案】Dear classmates,Elephants are the largest mammals on the land and they can live up to be eighty years. But now the number of the elephants is decreasing because of the following reasons. Firstly, people cut down trees in the forest, so elephants are losing their homes. Secondly, people also kill elephants for their ivory.As a result, we need to do something to help them. First, we should plant more trees to build the homes for elephants. Second, we can put up post on the street to tell people that it is against the law to kill elephants. Or we can also hold some activities in some public places to spread the idea of protecting the elephants. I believe everyone39。s contribution (貢獻(xiàn)) can make a big difference. Yours,Lihua【解析】【詳解】本文是一封倡議書(shū),倡議大家保護(hù)大象。文章共分為三個(gè)方面的內(nèi)容,首先描述大象想在所處的現(xiàn)狀,然后說(shuō)明出現(xiàn)這種狀況的原因,最后為了保護(hù)的大象我們應(yīng)該如何去做。時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。提出倡議時(shí)可以使用We can/ We should/ Let’s/We’d better的表示建議的句子。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意不要使用太復(fù)雜的句型,以免出現(xiàn)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤,為使句子具有連貫性,可以適當(dāng)使用連詞。本篇文章內(nèi)容完整,符合材料要求,Elephants are the largest mammals …,及First, we should plant more trees 也使用到了比較級(jí)和最高級(jí);Firstly,…. Secondly,…等詞的使用使文章具有層次性,條理清晰。并且一些連詞的使用,比如so, or, but等也使文章具有連貫性,是一篇不錯(cuò)的文章。