【正文】 一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．上周，你們班就初中生能否騎電動(dòng)自行車(chē)上學(xué)進(jìn)行了一次討論?，F(xiàn)在，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇介紹討論情況的短文。注意：；，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整、規(guī)范；。生詞提示：electric 討論結(jié)果25人表示同意35人不同意理由；。，騎電動(dòng)車(chē)不安全；，騎電動(dòng)車(chē)也快不起來(lái)?！敬鸢浮縇ast week， our class had a discussion about whether junior students could ride electric bicycles to go to students of our class agreed with it， because they said it was convenient for them and it could takethem less time to go to school. But the other 35 students didn’t agree with them. They said it was not safe forthe junior students to get to school by electric bicycles， for they were too young. They also said in the morningthe traffic was busy and the students couldn’t ride electric bicycles quickly.【解析】試題分析：本題要求以初中生能否騎電動(dòng)自行車(chē)上學(xué)進(jìn)行了一次討論。根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇80100詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文，而且要做到表達(dá)清楚，語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫。根據(jù)所給要點(diǎn)可知，本文主要以一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)書(shū)寫(xiě)。要注意把每一個(gè)要點(diǎn)都表達(dá)出來(lái)，不要遺漏任何一個(gè)，書(shū)寫(xiě)時(shí)一定注意時(shí)態(tài)的正確使用。觀點(diǎn)分明，談及理由按照要求至少要各寫(xiě)兩點(diǎn)。并注意上下文要語(yǔ)句貫通。并且要圍繞主題適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：短文中作者按照題目的要求，給我們介紹了持不同觀點(diǎn)的學(xué)生各自的理由，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，要點(diǎn)全面。時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整規(guī)范。該文中以下幾個(gè)句子用得很好。Because they said it was convenient for them and it could take them less time to go to school. They also said in the morningthe traffic was busy and the students couldn’t ride electric bicycles ，理由也很充分?？键c(diǎn)：提綱類作文。10．你是一位九年級(jí)的學(xué)生李明，你用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封郵件給你的筆友Amy，感謝她對(duì)你關(guān)心，并告訴她目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí)，并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。要點(diǎn)如下： （1）. 雖然你大部分功課你都學(xué)得比較好，但是你對(duì)自己不滿意。你認(rèn)為自己學(xué)習(xí)上還要多花工夫。 （2）. 你的父母對(duì)你嚴(yán)格要求，但是也很關(guān)心你。（舉例說(shuō)明，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句）…… （3）. 老師很樂(lè)意幫助你們。他們希望你們實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的理想。他們說(shuō)（適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句）……注意： （1）. 要求語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫。 （2）. 第2要點(diǎn)和第3要點(diǎn)要用2—3句話作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 （3）. 詞數(shù)90個(gè)左右，郵件開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【答案】例文Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. I have got good results in most of my subjects, but I am not happy with myself. I think I must spend more time on my studies.My parents are really strict with me. However, they care for me as well. Once upon a time, I failed in my physics exam and felt stressed and sad. They had a close munication with me and helped me solve my problems and cheer up again.My teachers are also ready to help us. They hope that we can realize our dreams. They tell us to try our best and not to give up. Life is always full of ups and downs. It39。s important not to be afraid of any kind of difficulty. How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，告訴艾米目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí)，并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如get good results, spend+時(shí)間+on sth, be strict with, however, care for, as well, once upon a time, help sb do, cheer up, be ready to, tell sb to do, try one’s best to do, be full of以及it is adj to do sth等，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫(xiě)好書(shū)面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作材料。通常書(shū)面表達(dá)給出的話題是開(kāi)放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫(xiě)短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫(xiě)作了，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫(xiě)是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。