【正文】 ning and I39。m very proud of feel more confident and I39。m ready for any challenges in the future.【解析】【分析】本篇是材料作文，根據(jù)所給提示寫一篇自己在初中生活中堅(jiān)持做的事；文中寫明自己是怎么做的并談?wù)勛约旱母惺??！驹斀狻?，用第一人稱寫初中生活中自己堅(jiān)持做的一件事，根據(jù)提示，描寫“What did you do?用一般過去時(shí)，描寫How do you feel?用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。書寫時(shí)要緊扣主題，文句通順?！芭懿健?，正文部分詳細(xì)地描寫了自己起初跑步總是不及格，通過克服困難、不懈地努力，堅(jiān)持跑步，到現(xiàn)在比以前會(huì)跑；結(jié)尾談了這件事對(duì)自己的影響；文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)。比如：固定搭配、固定句型It39。s +adj+ for us +to do sth、love doing sth、keep doing 、be good at、 catch up with、be proud of；不定式in order to；try my best to；狀語從句so…that …；比較級(jí)do much better in …、feel more confident等；短語多彩、文句表達(dá)多樣。 ”9．假如你是李華，你們學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備組織學(xué)生本周五去北京世園會(huì)參觀。你打算邀請(qǐng)外教 Peter參加。請(qǐng)用英語寫一封電子郵件，告訴他集合的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)，在那里可以做什么，以及參觀時(shí)需要準(zhǔn)備什么。提示詞語： school gate, nature, culture, food and drink提示問題： ●When and where are you going to meet?●What are you going to do there?●What do you advise Peter to prepare for the visit?Dear Pete,How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition in I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【答案】Dear Peter，How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition. We will meet at the school gate at 7:00 . this Friday. Then we will go to Beijing International Horticulture Exposition together. We can do a lot of things there. We can not only enjoy the special and beautiful plants but also learn different cultures in various indoor or outdoor shows. We plan to stay there for a whole day. You39。d better wear a pair of fortable sports shoes and take some food and drinks with you.I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】1. 題干解讀：這是一篇給材料作文，屬于應(yīng)用文寫作。本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；提示的問題就是寫作的基本方向，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮即可。2. 例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：文章采取郵件格式，時(shí)態(tài)以一般將來時(shí)態(tài)為主。語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，語言準(zhǔn)確，語意連貫，表達(dá)清楚，具有邏輯性。3. 高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：school gate；invite sb. to do；a lot of；plan to do。句型：not only…but also；You39。d better …；I39。m looking forward to…。10．隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展、人們消費(fèi)觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變， 購物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化?！熬W(wǎng)購”已成為一種時(shí)尚，越來越多的學(xué)生也加入到網(wǎng)購群體中。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格的提示，寫一篇網(wǎng)上購物的文章。優(yōu)點(diǎn)（advantage）；節(jié)約時(shí)間；避免擁擠、勞累，品種多缺點(diǎn)（disadvantage）， 看不到商品本身， 造成浪費(fèi)你的觀點(diǎn)……提示詞匯：網(wǎng)購shopping online。 商品 goods。 導(dǎo)致 cause注意：，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；；：100詞左右，文章開頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總數(shù)。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has bee fashionable. Some of us students also join the group. Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower. Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文，主要講述網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。點(diǎn)睛：寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。