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ning and I39。m very proud of feel more confident and I39。m ready for any challenges in the future.【解析】【分析】本篇是材料作文,根據(jù)所給提示寫一篇自己在初中生活中堅持做的事;文中寫明自己是怎么做的并談談自己的感受?!驹斀狻?,用第一人稱寫初中生活中自己堅持做的一件事,根據(jù)提示,描寫“What did you do?用一般過去時,描寫How do you feel?用一般現(xiàn)在時。書寫時要緊扣主題,文句通順?!芭懿健?,正文部分詳細地描寫了自己起初跑步總是不及格,通過克服困難、不懈地努力,堅持跑步,到現(xiàn)在比以前會跑;結尾談了這件事對自己的影響;文章結構清晰,前后呼應。比如:固定搭配、固定句型It39。s +adj+ for us +to do sth、love doing sth、keep doing 、be good at、 catch up with、be proud of;不定式in order to;try my best to;狀語從句so…that …;比較級do much better in …、feel more confident等;短語多彩、文句表達多樣。 ”9.假如你是李華,你們學校準備組織學生本周五去北京世園會參觀。你打算邀請外教 Peter參加。請用英語寫一封電子郵件,告訴他集合的時間和地點,在那里可以做什么,以及參觀時需要準備什么。提示詞語: school gate, nature, culture, food and drink提示問題: ●When and where are you going to meet?●What are you going to do there?●What do you advise Peter to prepare for the visit?Dear Pete,How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition in I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【答案】Dear Peter,How is it going?I am writing to invite you to visit Beijing International Horticulture Exposition. We will meet at the school gate at 7:00 . this Friday. Then we will go to Beijing International Horticulture Exposition together. We can do a lot of things there. We can not only enjoy the special and beautiful plants but also learn different cultures in various indoor or outdoor shows. We plan to stay there for a whole day. You39。d better wear a pair of fortable sports shoes and take some food and drinks with you.I39。m looking forward to your early reply.Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】1. 題干解讀:這是一篇給材料作文,屬于應用文寫作。本文已經給出了主要寫作要點,動筆前要先認真閱讀要點,寫作中,應注意描述的全面性,盡量將提示的內容利用上;提示的問題就是寫作的基本方向,然后圍繞要點適當發(fā)揮即可。2. 例文點評:文章采取郵件格式,時態(tài)以一般將來時態(tài)為主。語言的表述應該符合語法的結構,語言準確,語意連貫,表達清楚,具有邏輯性。3. 高分亮點:短語:school gate;invite sb. to do;a lot of;plan to do。句型:not only…but also;You39。d better …;I39。m looking forward to…。10.隨著網絡的發(fā)展、人們消費觀念的轉變, 購物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化?!熬W購”已成為一種時尚,越來越多的學生也加入到網購群體中。請你根據(jù)以下表格的提示,寫一篇網上購物的文章。優(yōu)點(advantage);節(jié)約時間;避免擁擠、勞累,品種多缺點(disadvantage), 看不到商品本身, 造成浪費你的觀點……提示詞匯:網購shopping online。 商品 goods。 導致 cause注意:,可適當發(fā)揮;;:100詞左右,文章開頭已給出,但不計入總數(shù)。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has bee fashionable. Some of us students also join the group. Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower. Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文,主要講述網購的優(yōu)點和缺點。根據(jù)要表達的內容確定并準確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當增加內容?!玖咙c說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務,語言表達符合英語習慣,準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別適用一些亮點詞句,如convenient,disadvantage,in good quality,figure out,have the chance to do,be attacked by,of course,take care of等。增強邏輯關系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準確,句子通順,行文連貫。點睛:寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。構思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內容要求學生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結構是否合理,有無重復、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。