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rules that we have to follow. First, you should respect the old and love the young. You are also supposed to be kind to other. Next, it’s a good habit to be honest and keep your words. What’s more, you should keep studying , go to bed and get up on time. You mustn’t stay up too late.In my opinion, every family must keep rules and children shouldn’t develop bad habits, like telling lies and be rude to others. We should be strict with ourselves.The family rules also make a great difference to me. I learn to think about others’ feelings and Chinese traditional culture. What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,向山姆介紹你的家規(guī)并向他展示一個溫情的中國家庭。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達符合英語習慣,準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點詞句,如be supposed to, be kind to, keep your words, what’s more, in one’s opinion, develop bad habits, be rude to, be strict with, make a difference to以及it is a good habit to be honest中it作形式主語。增強邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10.假如你是李華,請你根據(jù)以下提示用英語寫一封保護大象的倡議書。 提示:陸地上最大的哺乳動物,可以活到80歲。目前數(shù)量在減少,因為:1)人們砍伐森林,大象漸漸失去家園;2)人們捕殺大象,獲取象牙。3)應(yīng)如何保護它們(不少于三條)。要求:1)恰當運用比較級和最高級;2)80詞左右。倡議書的結(jié)尾已給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。參考詞匯:哺乳動物mammal。 象牙ivoryDear classmates_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________I believe everyone39。s contribution (貢獻) can make a big difference. Yours,Lihua【答案】Dear classmates,Elephants are the largest mammals on the land and they can live up to be eighty years. But now the number of the elephants is decreasing because of the following reasons. Firstly, people cut down trees in the forest, so elephants are losing their homes. Secondly, people also kill elephants for their ivory.As a result, we need to do something to help them. First, we should plant more trees to build the homes for elephants. Second, we can put up post on the street to tell people that it is against the law to kill elephants. Or we can also hold some activities in some public places to spread the idea of protecting the elephants. I believe everyone39。s contribution (貢獻) can make a big difference. Yours,Lihua【解析】【詳解】本文是一封倡議書,倡議大家保護大象。文章共分為三個方面的內(nèi)容,首先描述大象想在所處的現(xiàn)狀,然后說明出現(xiàn)這種狀況的原因,最后為了保護的大象我們應(yīng)該如何去做。時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時。提出倡議時可以使用We can/ We should/ Let’s/We’d better的表示建議的句子。寫作時注意不要使用太復(fù)雜的句型,以免出現(xiàn)語法錯誤,為使句子具有連貫性,可以適當使用連詞。本篇文章內(nèi)容完整,符合材料要求,Elephants are the largest mammals …,及First, we should plant more trees 也使用到了比較級和最高級;Firstly,…. Secondly,…等詞的使用使文章具有層次性,條理清晰。并且一些連詞的使用,比如so, or, but等也使文章具有連貫性,是一篇不錯的文章。