【文章內(nèi)容簡介】
ets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對學(xué)校進行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進行總結(jié),并談?wù)勛约簩@件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個表格,里面包括了支持搶紅包這個游戲的人們的觀點以及反對這個游戲的人們的觀點和理由,只給了一些短語,我們需要組織語言,將這些要點用正確的英語表達出來,并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分:支持的人們的理由;反對者們的理由;自己的看法,可以分成兩段或者三段來敘述,這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚,有層次。寫作時,應(yīng)注意英語表達習(xí)慣和漢語的不同,不要逐詞翻譯,應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā),以簡單句為主,穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次,還應(yīng)注意使用高級句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分,使文章整體意思連貫、表達流暢。點睛:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段,第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的,因此了文章的話題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對玩這個游戲的人們各自的理由;第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語言得體,句式準確,符合英語的表達習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)為主,特別注意了謂語動詞的正確形式,語法規(guī)范、準確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型,如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form.、If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell 。文章中也出現(xiàn)了一些語法上的小錯誤,總的來說,不影響整篇文章的質(zhì)量。5.4月23日是“世界讀書日”,你校英語俱樂部正在開展主題為“多讀書,讀好書”的活動。假如你是李華,請你寫一封倡議書,向全體同學(xué)發(fā)出號召。內(nèi)容包括:應(yīng)該讀什么樣的書,以及讀書的意義。提示詞語:story, novel, knowledge, improve, important提示問題:● What kind of books should we read? ● Why do we read?Dear students, the World Reading Day is ing. So I’m here again to call on all of us to read more books and read good books. Li Hua【答案】例文Dear students, the World Reading Day is ing. As a middle school student, everyone should read books. Firstly, reading increases our knowledge and we can learn the world affairs without going out. Secondly, reading is a good way to improve reading and writing skills. Finally, reading can broaden our knowledge and horizon, which is important to job hunting in the future. Therefore, start to reading, no matter how old you are and what you are doing. So I’m here again to call on all of us to read more books and read good books. Li Hua【解析】【詳解】題干解讀:該題目屬于應(yīng)用文寫作,但寫作時要按照應(yīng)用文格式寫,寫作時承接短文開頭,寫出對學(xué)生的倡議。例文點評:例文采用的是一段式,寫的是閱讀的好處,時態(tài)采用的是一般現(xiàn)在時,描述倡議時,描寫細致,條理清晰。高分亮點:短語:Firstly;Secondly;Finally;a good way to do sth;broaden our knowledge and horizon。句型:reading is a good way to improve reading and writing skills;reading can broaden our knowledge and horizon, which is important to job hunting in the future。6.隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展、人們消費觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變, 購物方式也在悄然的發(fā)生變化?!熬W(wǎng)購”已成為一種時尚,越來越多的學(xué)生也加入到網(wǎng)購群體中。請你根據(jù)以下表格的提示,寫一篇網(wǎng)上購物的文章。優(yōu)點(advantage);節(jié)約時間;避免擁擠、勞累,品種多缺點(disadvantage), 看不到商品本身, 造成浪費你的觀點……提示詞匯:網(wǎng)購shopping online。 商品 goods。 導(dǎo)致 cause注意:,可適當發(fā)揮;;:100詞左右,文章開頭已給出,但不計入總數(shù)。With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. 【答案】With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online. It has bee fashionable. Some of us students also join the group. Shopping online has many advantages. Just with the click of a mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowds and save a lot of time. When shopping online, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower. Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods that aren’t like the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping online may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money. All in all, I love shopping online.【解析】本文屬于材料作文,主要講述網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點和缺點。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當增加內(nèi)容?!玖咙c說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣,準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別適用一些亮點詞句,如convenient,disadvantage,in good quality,figure out,have the chance to do,be attacked by,of course,take care of等。增強邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準確,句子通順,行文連貫。點睛:寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試