【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 dishes for her on her birthday. I tried many times but failed before she came back. Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned. However, I didn’t give up, and finally I succeeded. Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears. I felt proud of cooking on my own.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以O(shè)ne thing I felt very proud of為題，介紹自己曾經(jīng)做過的一件令自己感到自豪的事情。作文是開放式的，題目中只給了主題，具體的寫作內(nèi)容，需要學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力去補(bǔ)充。審題可知，體裁是記敘文，記敘一件自己做過的事情，且是能讓自己感到自豪的，故文章應(yīng)使用一般過去時(shí)，人稱以第一人稱為主。短文應(yīng)由開頭、主體和結(jié)尾三部分組成，開頭引出話題；第二部分為中心，具體描述事情的過程；最后一部分簡(jiǎn)要描寫一下自己的感受。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，不能按照漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，寫漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，使用較常見、易于把握的簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)，如主謂賓或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。為提升作文檔次，穿插使用并列句或復(fù)合句，如賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句等?；蚴褂闷硎咕?、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、感嘆句等特殊句式結(jié)構(gòu)。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，以使文意連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求描述了自己做過的一件引以為豪的事情。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實(shí)，敘述具體，詳細(xì)，作者描寫了自己做飯給媽媽慶祝生日這件事，符合題目要求。文章分三段，第一段用一句話引出話題；第二段詳細(xì)描寫了事情的過程；最后一段寫了自己的感受。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，安排合理。其次短文里使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，文章以一般過去時(shí)、第一人稱敘述，注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞過去式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過去式。語(yǔ)言得體，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句、并列句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等復(fù)雜句式結(jié)構(gòu)。短文中較好的句型和短語(yǔ)有：I will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.、To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday、Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned、Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears等。10．（安徽中考模擬）書面表達(dá)假如你是華,你的英國(guó)筆友對(duì)中國(guó)文化很感興趣,想到中國(guó)旅行感受中國(guó)文化。你想請(qǐng)他來你的家鄉(xiāng)一安徴一游,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示用英文給他寫一封電子郵件。1位置:中國(guó)東部,安做省南部: :春暖花開,秋季涼爽:山和古村落: :茶、黃梅戲提示詞:黃梅戲 Huangmei Opera注意:,使行文連貫。,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)Dear DaveI know that you are interested in Chinese culture and Im glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my home town, to have fun?【答案】Dear Dave，I know you are interested in Chinese culture and I’m glad you are planning a trip to China. Why not e to Anhui, my hometown, to have some fun.Anhui Province lies in the east of China. The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats. There are many famous places to see. For example, Mt. Huangshan, where you will see wonderful plants and special rocks. Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on. As a fan of Chinese culture, don’t forget to try green tea in Anhui which smells good and tastes better. What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!Wele to Anhui! I’m looking forward to seeing you here!Yours, Li Hua【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份給自己的筆友Dave寫信，邀請(qǐng)他來你的家鄉(xiāng)—安徽一游，題目中列出了文章的提綱，審題可知，短文應(yīng)從以下幾個(gè)內(nèi)容敘述：首先介紹家鄉(xiāng)的位置；然后介紹來這里最好的時(shí)候；接下來是介紹家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化，并給出建議。短文應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)合理安排幾個(gè)內(nèi)容，分清主次，并注意上下文的連貫。另外，英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)是不同的，因此寫作時(shí)不能按照漢語(yǔ)思維逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，寫完整的句子。如可以使用簡(jiǎn)單句結(jié)構(gòu)，易于掌握，不容易出錯(cuò)。但為提升文章檔次，也應(yīng)穿插一些并列句結(jié)構(gòu)或復(fù)合句，以及使用一些復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，如非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求邀請(qǐng)Dave來自己的家鄉(xiāng)旅游，并介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的景點(diǎn)和文化。短文有如下幾個(gè)特點(diǎn)：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有內(nèi)容，并對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充和修飾，使內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)、豐富。短文先對(duì)Dave發(fā)出邀請(qǐng)，然后具體介紹了家鄉(xiāng)的位置、景點(diǎn)、文化等，并提出了建議。全文敘述清晰，層次清楚，主次分明。第二，短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句式結(jié)構(gòu)完整，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來敘述，注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞第三人稱單數(shù)形式的變化。句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了并列句、賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句等復(fù)合句，還有一些好的句型，如The best time to e here is in autumn, because it’s really cool and you can just take some light coats、Besides, Anhui is also famous for ancient villages such as Xidi, Hongcun and so on.、What’s more, e and watch Huangmei Opera. It’s easy to understand and won’t let you down!、I’m looking forward to seeing you here!等。11．（安徽中考模擬）書面表達(dá)你看過中央電視臺(tái)董卿主持的節(jié)目《朗讀者》嗎？這是一檔非常受歡迎的節(jié)目，讓我們看到生活中讀書的美好、讀書的重要。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面表格中所列的要點(diǎn)，以“Growing Up with Reading”為題寫一篇短文。要求：1．語(yǔ)言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，短文連貫、通順；2．短文應(yīng)包括所有內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要逐句翻譯；3．詞數(shù)80詞左右；文章開頭部分已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。【答案】Have you watched the program The Reader hosted by Dong Qing on CCTV? The program is very popular, and it makes us find the beauty and the importance about reading in our life.Reading is wonderful. We can get knowledge by reading. Reading can open our minds. Reading makes us confident and happy.Read good books. Proper books that can improve ourselves are better choice. You should read in a right way. Try to think about more while reading.Keep a love for reading. However, some of us spend much time watching TV or playing games online in our spare time. I’d like to suggest that everyone should read more and develop a reading habit.Let’s grow up with reading. Let reading bee a part of our life!【解析】試題分析：本文是材料作文，也是話題作文，話題是“讀書伴我成長(zhǎng)”，以“Growing Up with Reading（讀書伴我成長(zhǎng)）”為題寫一篇短文。根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示可知本文使用的時(shí)態(tài)有一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。寫作時(shí)，列好提綱，注意使用連詞，句型、句式，使文章整體意思連貫，表達(dá)流暢。寫完以后，注意再讀一遍，看看有無拼寫，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤（時(shí)態(tài)，主謂一致等）。（一）列提綱，本文給詞的要點(diǎn)就是提綱，把要點(diǎn)中的重要短語(yǔ)翻譯成英文：the beauty and the importance/ get knowledge/ open our minds/ makes us confident and happy/ proper books that can improve ourselves/ read in a right way/ think about more/ spend much time watching TV or playing games online in our spare time/ develop a reading habit./ Let’s grow up with reading. Let reading bee a part of our life!；（二）根據(jù)提綱連詞成句，連句成篇，注意連詞的使用。（三）寫完以后，在閱讀一遍，檢查單詞拼寫，語(yǔ)法，動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)序，大小寫，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)，主謂一致等是否有錯(cuò)誤。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確、句子通順。（1）學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。（2）注意給出的起始句（這就給出了時(shí)態(tài)），學(xué)生運(yùn)用正確的時(shí)態(tài)，運(yùn)用所給或所學(xué)的詞語(yǔ)，盡量運(yùn)用熟悉的句型。（3）列好提綱和要點(diǎn)，及需要的重要短語(yǔ)或句型。（3）切忌堆砌詞語(yǔ)，句子，注意運(yùn)用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞使句子流暢，連貫。注意表達(dá)的順序。 （4）注意書寫的規(guī)范：大小寫，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等的正確運(yùn)用。（5）注意檢查：?jiǎn)卧~拼寫，語(yǔ)法，動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)序，主謂一致等。12．（北京中考模擬）（題文）假如你是中學(xué)生李華，你的美國(guó)筆友 Jim 一周前給你發(fā)了電子郵件，詢問你暑假里的旅游計(jì)劃及其他安排， 但由于某種原因你沒有及時(shí)回復(fù)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給他回封郵件： 沒有及時(shí)回復(fù)的原因, 你打算去哪兒旅游，以及你暑假的其他安排。提示詞語(yǔ): exams, go on a trip， volunteer， visit some museums提示問題： ? Why didn’t you reply to Jim’s in time?? Where do you plan to travel?? What are your other plans for the summer holiday?To: JimFrom: Li HuaSubject: A planDear Jim,I39。m terribly sorry I couldn39。t reply to your in time because __________________________Yours sincerely,Li Hua【答案】Dear JimI39。m terribly sorry I couldn39。t reply to your in time because I was busy preparing for theexams.I will go on a trip to Sichuan, where there are a great number of places of interest. I promiseto send you some wonderful photos then.I’m