【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in 2016. From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun. It can bring people closer , they can make more friends .Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives. About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets. They don’t have enough munication with their family members .They may feel a little lonelyPersonally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form. Also, it39。s obvious that it is more convenient. However, as a saying goes, each coin has two sides. It is not an exception, it also has some bad effects. If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對(duì)學(xué)校進(jìn)行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié)，并談?wù)勛约簩?duì)這件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個(gè)表格，里面包括了支持搶紅包這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)以及反對(duì)這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)和理由，只給了一些短語(yǔ)，我們需要組織語(yǔ)言，將這些要點(diǎn)用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)，并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分：支持的人們的理由；反對(duì)者們的理由；自己的看法，可以分成兩段或者三段來(lái)敘述，這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，有層次。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語(yǔ)的不同，不要逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次，還應(yīng)注意使用高級(jí)句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文章整體意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段，第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的，因此了文章的話題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對(duì)玩這個(gè)游戲的人們各自的理由；第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語(yǔ)言得體，句式準(zhǔn)確，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主，特別注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的正確形式，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型，如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form.、If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell 。文章中也出現(xiàn)了一些語(yǔ)法上的小錯(cuò)誤，總的來(lái)說(shuō)，不影響整篇文章的質(zhì)量。6．近年來(lái)，習(xí)近平主席提出了實(shí)現(xiàn)中華民族偉大復(fù)興的“中國(guó)夢(mèng)”。學(xué)校開展了“夢(mèng)想少年”的主題演講活動(dòng)，假如你是張明，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提供的要點(diǎn)，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇80－100詞的短文，向大家推介自己。（可聯(lián)系實(shí)際，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮）注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名。提示詞語(yǔ)： good at ..with ...rules up popular with... to do something【答案】I39。m a Dream Teenager Good morning， dear teachers and friends， I am Zhang Ming． It39。s great honor for me to make a speech here． As a fifteenyearold boy， my dream is to be a good teacher． To make my dream e true， I study hard at school and I am good at all my subjects． Also， I am an outgoing and healthy boy who likes football very much， and I really enjoy sports． At school， I always follow the school rules， so I am popular with my classmates and teachers． On weekends， I39。d like to help people． For example， I volunteer to visit sick children in the hospital and cheer them up．In a word， I believe that the man who holds his dream will be able to achieve his dream one day． That39。s all． Thank you!【解析】【詳解】這是一篇圖表作文。學(xué)校開展“夢(mèng)想少年”的主題演講活動(dòng)，假如你是張明，要求根據(jù)圖表提示內(nèi)容，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇短文，向大家推介自己。根據(jù)所給出的材料提示可知文章時(shí)態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱主要為第一、第三人稱。首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆寫作。在寫作過(guò)程中，要將圖表內(nèi)提示信息用英語(yǔ)正確的表達(dá)出來(lái)，要涵蓋圖表中提到的所有要點(diǎn)，注意理順要點(diǎn)，防止漏寫。同時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣；盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，最好不要寫太長(zhǎng)的復(fù)合句；盡量選取簡(jiǎn)單的易拼寫的單詞，確保正確率；詞匯、句式要豐富多樣，可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查，確保正確無(wú)誤。7．根據(jù)要求完成