【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 hanges in My Hometown為題，介紹一下自己的家鄉(xiāng)這些年來發(fā)生的變化。題目中用表格的形式，給我們對比的家鄉(xiāng)的過去和現(xiàn)在，我們應(yīng)用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來，并對將來提出兩點(diǎn)希望。審題可知，作文的基本框架和大概內(nèi)容都有了，需要注意的是在描寫過去的時(shí)候，需要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮一到兩點(diǎn)；還有對將來的希望也需要學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮。這兩個(gè)地方需要學(xué)生們展開想象，合理發(fā)揮，注意要與文章的其他部分能夠很好的結(jié)合起來，內(nèi)容也要統(tǒng)一，符合題目要求，合情合理。表達(dá)時(shí)，需要注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯表格中的語句，而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型來表達(dá)。注意句式的多變，長短句結(jié)合、簡單句、并列句或復(fù)合句穿插使用，提升文章的檔次。語句之間注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者按照題目要求，介紹了自己的家鄉(xiāng)這些年來的變化。文章是按照時(shí)間的順序，先介紹了家鄉(xiāng)過去的面貌，這一部分使用了過去時(shí)態(tài)，謂語動(dòng)詞都變成了過去式，形式準(zhǔn)確。然后是家鄉(xiāng)現(xiàn)在的樣子，這里主要以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主。最后對家鄉(xiāng)的未來表達(dá)了自己的愿望。整篇文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)、完整，敘述清晰、條理，結(jié)構(gòu)合理。文章中語言得體，語句通順，句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣，語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文里還使用了一些較好的短語和句型，如In the past, my hometown was very poor and the streets were very narrow.、Now the government takes measures to improve the pollution and the city bees cleaner and cleaner、More and more people have their own cars and live a fortable life、There are thousands of tourists from all over the country every 。6．書面表達(dá)（原創(chuàng)）今年春節(jié)，很多人加入了搶紅包的游戲，但也有人表示擔(dān)憂。學(xué)校英語?？队⒄Z天地》對此進(jìn)行調(diào)查，假如你是一名?？∮浾撸埬憔痛舜握{(diào)查的結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié)，并談?wù)勀阕约旱挠^點(diǎn)。Grabbing red packets on lineAgreement（75%） popular form of entertainment, bring more fun people closer, make more friendsDisagreement（25%）spend too much time.not have enough munication with family members, feel lonelyYour opinion1.2.提示詞：We chat 微信Grabbing red packets on line搶紅包注意：（1）詞數(shù)80左右，開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；（2）文章應(yīng)包括題中所提的所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以使行文連貫；（3）文中請勿提及你的真實(shí)姓名、校名和其他真實(shí)信息。As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in 2016. From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we all know, grabbing red packets on line won popularity with the people during the Spring Festival in 2016. From then on, more and more people have been crazy about it. So we did the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” among students.About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun. It can bring people closer , they can make more friends .Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives. About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets. They don’t have enough munication with their family members .They may feel a little lonelyPersonally, there39。s no doubt that not only does it bring people happiness, but also send blessings to people in a special form. Also, it39。s obvious that it is more convenient. However, as a saying goes, each coin has two sides. It is not an exception, it also has some bad effects. If people can39。t grab the red packets, people may feel sad or illtempered ,even break their cell phones. What39。s worse, it may lead to the crime.【解析】這篇作文要求我們對學(xué)校進(jìn)行的關(guān)于春節(jié)搶紅包這件事的調(diào)查結(jié)果進(jìn)行總結(jié)，并談?wù)勛约簩@件事情的看法。題目中給出了一個(gè)表格，里面包括了支持搶紅包這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)以及反對這個(gè)游戲的人們的觀點(diǎn)和理由，只給了一些短語，我們需要組織語言，將這些要點(diǎn)用正確的英語表達(dá)出來，并使文章內(nèi)容更加豐富、完整。最后還要加上自己的看法。因此文章的內(nèi)容應(yīng)主要包括三部分：支持的人們的理由；反對者們的理由；自己的看法，可以分成兩段或者三段來敘述，這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，有層次。寫作時(shí)，應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語的不同，不要逐詞翻譯，應(yīng)從句子整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，以簡單句為主，穿插并列句和復(fù)合句。為提升文章檔次，還應(yīng)注意使用高級句型和較復(fù)雜的句式。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文章整體意思連貫、表達(dá)流暢。點(diǎn)睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整、結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。文章分為三段，第一段是題目中已經(jīng)給出的，因此了文章的話題。第二段中作者表述了支持和反對玩這個(gè)游戲的人們各自的理由；第三段中作者發(fā)表了自己的看法。其次短文中語言得體，句式準(zhǔn)確，符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。文章以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主，特別注意了謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式，語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文中使用了較豐富的句型，如About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment, bring them more fun.、Grabbing red packets has been part of people’s lives、About 25% of them say some people spend too much time grabbing red packets、Personally, there39。s no doubt that n