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【正文】 like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.① In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air, we plan to have more trees in our school now.② In order to get good places to study and live, we have many plans.③ First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.④ Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.⑤At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers. Wele to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua 第五模塊 │ 題型探究 【 評(píng)論點(diǎn)撥 】 我們來(lái)看看學(xué)生的樣本有什么地方可以改進(jìn)： 第①句：“ In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air ”比較生硬， to make our school beautiful應(yīng)該改為 to make our school more beautiful；“ we plan to have more trees in our school now”中的have改為 plant會(huì)好些。 第②句：沒(méi)有涉及表格內(nèi)的內(nèi)容， 是個(gè)廢句， 而且還霸占了后面的信息的位置。 第③句：“ First, we plan to build a botanical garden_and_let_students_visit_and_use.”中的畫(huà)線部分沒(méi)有表達(dá)出“供同學(xué)們參觀、實(shí)踐”的意思。 第五模塊 │ 題型探究 第④句：“ Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.”中應(yīng)刪掉 up, study后應(yīng)該加上 in。不過(guò)改為“ Second, we plan to build a small garden in which we can take a rest and do some reading.”會(huì)好些。 第⑤句：“ At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers.”中的effect應(yīng)該改為 encourage。 另外，這篇文章的主語(yǔ)全部都是 we, 雖然可以最大限度地減少英語(yǔ)表達(dá)方面的錯(cuò)誤， 但是比較單調(diào)， 可能影響高分。不過(guò)， 我們只要變換句式， 例如改為被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)等， 就可以達(dá)到很好的效果。 第五模塊 │ 題型探究 【參考范文】 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new purposes of the program are to make our school more beautiful, to make the air cleaner and fresher, and to turn our school into a better place for us to study and live to the program, we will plant different kinds of trees, flowers and grass in and around our botanical garden will_be_built_for us to visit and practice , we are to build a small garden in which we can do some reading and take a ’s more, 第五模塊 │ 題型探究 some_statues_of_famous_pe
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