【正文】 nd of the school students in Class Three have a farewell invite their parents to the students have performance at the !Chen Jie is singing Peng is playing the is playing the is doing Chinese Kung is Miss White doing? She is has a lot of Liu Yun isn’t has a is at classmates are going to visit her after prepare many gifts fot they will take a picture Good FriendMy name is Liu have a good name is Liu lives in is very thin and kind, she is cute, English and Chinese is very is mother is a likes father is a TV likes listening to Yun likes playing the violin and riding her favorite season is summer, because it39。時態(tài)：這篇文章可以用三種時態(tài)來寫，由于本單元主要講的是一般過去時態(tài)，句型：主語+動詞過去式+過去時間。詞匯量要控制在40~60之間。生病，是臥床不起，應(yīng)該說stay in bed。常見病句：My nose is hurt。不要只用一個單詞，以避免枯燥。句型：要用feel 加形容詞，和表示“患某種疾病“的用法have+表示的疾病的單詞。時態(tài)：這篇文章可以采用一般現(xiàn)在時來寫。結(jié)尾以How happy we are!突出了兩人從友誼中得到的快樂！A Bad ColdI’m not feeling well think I have a bad have a have a nose throat is have to take some medicine and stay in parents will take me to the a bad cold!I hope I can be better I want to go to school.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】寫法：這篇習(xí)作是按照時間順序記敘了得病、病的癥狀、服藥及治療的全過程。例“Our favourite colours are?”，“We like ?best”，“We both like?,too”，為突出不同時間做不同運(yùn)動，用“On Saturdays?”，“On Sundays?”，形成鮮明對比。兩人能成為朋友，一定有共同語言和喜好，共性不容忽視。注意：在列舉兩個人的“體貌、喜好”等方面情況時，應(yīng)一邊列舉，一邊比較。PEP小學(xué)英語六年級下冊各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評My friend and II’ve got a lovely friend at name is is 12 years ’m ’s older than ’s 150 cm ’m 148 ’s taller and ’s 43 kg and I’m 41 ’s favourite colours are white and like summer both like sports, Saturdays, we play Sundays, we play ’s good at I do better at laugh and play happy we are!【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】時態(tài)：像此類題目的作文，運(yùn)用一般現(xiàn)在時即可。如果是寫將來的事情，那么就要注意在表述時多用“begoingto+動詞原形”這種句型。小朋友們在寫這種敘事的文章時，要盡量給讀者交代好時間、地點(diǎn)、人物和活動等，使文章有血有肉。Let’s have a nice dayIt’s Sunday ’m going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow are going to look for some good all like reading are going to eat our lunch at the like chicken, beef and lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by are going to play near the Kunming we are going to row a boat on the , that will be are ing back at 5pm.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】怎樣才稱得上是“美好的一天”？有兩點(diǎn)不能忘記，一是安排得充實(shí)，二是安排得有意義。既描述過程，又適時提自己的看法或想法的寫法，在作文中叫做“夾敘夾議”,描述過程為了提出一種思想服務(wù)，提出看法或想法使原本平實(shí)的描述有了意義。作文的最后一段就非常好，兩句話勝似千言萬語。Planting TreesIt’s ’s time to plant want to plant a tree in our and Mum are very like helps me plant the , we dig the I put a little tree into the I water am so excited and I wait for the tree to weeks later, my tree has some little water it every it has lots of grows should plant more make our world beautiful.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】 小作者寫了一次植樹的經(jīng)歷，但他并沒有單純拘泥于植樹的過程。一定要注意行文中一些關(guān)鍵的地方，如在哪兒轉(zhuǎn)彎，向哪兒轉(zhuǎn)，經(jīng)過哪些重要的交通標(biāo)志或顯眼的標(biāo)志建筑等。其實(shí)介紹路線，無非就是告訴他人某段路的起點(diǎn)和終點(diǎn)，還有就是如何從起點(diǎn)走到終點(diǎn)。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢？通過你的敘述，能讓別人很容易找到博物館，這應(yīng)是最基本的要求。最后以一句話進(jìn)行概括，起到點(diǎn)題的作用。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數(shù)言，讓一個幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們?nèi)ニ伎?，我們能做到嗎？小朋友的這篇作文除了語言優(yōu)美之外，在結(jié)構(gòu)上也有閃光之處。I Love My FamilyHere is a photo lf my are four people in my are my father, my mother, my brother and father is a works in a hospital far goes to work by mother is a works in a school near my goes to work by work, they like reading is the tall boy? He is my is five years older than is a ’s now in goes there by love my family.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】 一個平凡的題材，一篇生動的作文。小朋友們在作文時注意不要圖大，那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞，而要寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。比如上文的“Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不錯的句子，使讀者眼前為之一亮。第一篇：六年級下冊各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)...PEP小學(xué)英語六年級上冊各單元作文范例及點(diǎn)評Li Ying ’S HobbyLi Ying likes English very works hard at reads English every likes speaking often listens to the watches TV only on Saturday she like dancing? No, she doesn’ she likes drawing and parents love all the teachers and her friends like her, says her hobbies make her happy.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】 這一篇寫愛好的文章,小作者的寫作思路很值得我們學(xué)習(xí),他沒有具體寫到劉瑩的某一種愛好,而是從學(xué)習(xí)到課余的多種愛好入手,“愛好”這個角度來看劉瑩的話，我們會覺得這個形象很飽滿。小朋友們寫這種“敘事寫人”作文時，可以從兩個角度下手：一是具體地描繪；二是和上面小朋友一樣，粗線條地勾畫，二者各有所長，另處在行文中使用一些問句，使用一些轉(zhuǎn)述的話，可以使作文更有靈氣，避免了平鋪直敘的缺點(diǎn)。Don’t be against the traffic rulesI go to school from Monday to go to school by bike at 7:30 in the must cross two busy the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the always ride on the right side of the am never against the traffic rules.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】這篇作文的題目是“不要違反交通規(guī)則”，小作者沒有說一些空話，而是從自己的經(jīng)歷寫起，敘述自己以什么方式去上學(xué)，在上學(xué)的路上是怎么做的，很形象。要注意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號等。這樣的命題，我們可能面對幾次，甚至幾十次了。先總說，將自己的家人逐個介紹一遍，后分說，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細(xì)說。我們在寫類似的作文的時候是不是也可以借鑒呢？How to get to the science museumWe are going to the science museum is an old thing show in the you know how we can get to the science museum?The science museum is next to the People’s ’s isn’t far from our we can go1there on straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic can find the People’s Park on the straight, and you’ll see the science museum.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】這篇作文的題目是“怎樣去科學(xué)博物館”。小作者在文中告訴我們什么呢？首先他寫了去博物館的位置，最后濃墨重彩，指明從學(xué)校去博物館的具體路線，這條路線夠清晰吧！小朋友們在寫這類作文的時候，總有些無從下手的感覺，不知從何說起。要給他人說清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然后再通過自己的敘述，將路線清清楚楚得呈現(xiàn)出來。這樣，你就能說清，別人也能弄明白。既有過程，也有感覺，能使文章打動讀者，給人以啟發(fā)。我們可以學(xué)習(xí)一下這種寫法。我們在以后的寫作中也可以試一試。這兩點(diǎn)小作者無疑都想到了，上午去書店看書買書，中午在飯店吃飯，下午去頤和園玩耍、劃船，豐富多彩！文章以時間為線索，敘述清楚，文筆也很優(yōu)美。要看好是寫過去發(fā)生的事情，還是現(xiàn)在正在做的事情，或計(jì)劃、打算要做的事情，以選擇適當(dāng)?shù)木湫?。還有一點(diǎn)也很重要，那就是故事的線索要交代好，讓讀者在閱讀時對整個過程一目了然。句型：因?yàn)樯婕皟蓚€人的比較，不要忘記使用比較級句型：A+be+比較級+than+B。不要一味指出不同，還要列舉相同之處。在表達(dá)喜好時，不同的句型應(yīng)交叉運(yùn)用，避免枯燥的重復(fù)。常使用并列連詞and 和轉(zhuǎn)折連詞 but，使文章讀起來更流暢。寫出了小作者希望快點(diǎn)康復(fù)，好去上學(xué)的愿望。如果主語是第三人稱單數(shù)，動詞別忘加s。注意：在表示疾病時，可以使用ache,hurt 和sore。要寫出得病后的簡單治療及心情，不能只寫得病的情況。因?yàn)閎e后面要加形容詞，而hurt是動詞，因此應(yīng)使用sore；東西放在床上要用on the bed。表示吃藥時，通過用take some medicine，不用eat。My WeekendI had a busy Saturday morning, I washed my clothes and went to a did my homework and went fishing on Saturday Sunday morning, I cleaned my room and visited my played football and watch TV on Sunday was too tired.【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】寫法：這篇習(xí)作是按時間順序記敘了Zoom的周末活動。注意：活動的相關(guān)表達(dá)法采用新舊知識結(jié)合的方法，但要注意動詞過去式的拼寫。s hot, she can eat morning, she goes to school on evening, she reads newspaper at she goes to bed at is my good friendMy FamilyThi