【正文】 rk..Because of those，people are spending time by shouting around against customers，pany and are criticizing others，sometimes to times they answer “badly” to customer and their job?s quality is falling proposals to fight against these and to go back to the high quality with motivated employes are：Management should handle the political part out of the employe?s have to stay focused on their core petency，the technical implementing web based training employes could spent their “shouting” time to train themselves from their desk to improve their knowledge and to make their job this，pany avoid any extra costs for acmodations，travel and time spend in training measure bring more workload on Management and more time spent with employes and based training means less time spent on “real” work because of the tie needed to learn and assimil the course? ，做到提綱要求的延伸。但語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤明顯，表述目的不明，結(jié)構(gòu)混亂。以上畫(huà)線部分是很明顯的錯(cuò)誤，還沒(méi)包括一些搭配錯(cuò)誤等。結(jié)構(gòu)上，該文的中心放在了中間段落，目的不清晰，總結(jié)和推論混為一談。例二，Your department needs to recruit more line manager wants you to write a report explaining your requirements and menting on recruitment at the information below，on which you have already made some handwritten ，using all your handwritten notes，write your 120140 (5分)Report on staff recruitmentAs our pany is developing several new products，the department of Ramp。D needs new staff urgently to help design and monitor our we need to recruit 35 new staff，including electrical engineers and product of them should have at least two years ? experience in relevant specific requirements will finally be decided in a few to recruitment methods，the disadvantage of relying on recruitment agency is that we need more time and procedure than we can I suggest we turn to a more direct way of Newspaper advertisement，which has been used many times and proved the two newspaper，Echo and Chronicle，we prefer the former because though it charges ？500 more than the latter，the general readers are 400，000 more，most of whom are are sure to get reply soon after we launch the recruitment ，提綱要求全部達(dá)到，通順易懂，盡管有少量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤，但不影響它的清晰表達(dá)。Sample2（2分）Recruit Require new staffI am sun Lee from production report is provide to Human Resources department manger to explain our requirement and ment on recruitment In order to improve our pany productivity，our department needs 10 higher skill because of last year，our department have 15 workers leave this pany due to there personal reason so，now we need 35 need ten higher skill worker with high degree and others worker should be We have 3 ways to is recruitment use this expenditure is very expensive，and people that provided is not very is online never use this method before，so we can not say this is good or ，online recruitment，sometime the resources is one is newspaper used many times before，and we have two better newspaper，one is Echo，the other is cost of advertisement on the newspaper is ￡25，00 and ￡2， the cost of advertisement on Echo is expensive is higher than Chronicle，the numbers sold on each day is more than Chronicle，is 600，000，the wide rage that the Echo covered is ，we decide use Newspaper advertisement，and name of newspaper is you！題目要求的要點(diǎn)基本談及到，結(jié)構(gòu)是不錯(cuò)的，文章中也使用了表示承接關(guān)系的連接詞，但是不斷的重復(fù)和過(guò)多的語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤讓讀者難以理解文章。從這兩篇中級(jí)文章，我們可以看出，盡管第二篇結(jié)構(gòu)似乎更清晰，但語(yǔ)言上的錯(cuò)誤仍然讓考官難以容忍。從上面的官方例文我們可以看出，ＢＥＣ寫(xiě)作考試對(duì)商務(wù)知識(shí)考得不是很多，大多只需涉及基本的一些觀念就行了；２、提綱所示必須以明確方式體現(xiàn)在文章中；３、語(yǔ)言的基本功底很重要，越是高級(jí)考試，越難以容忍簡(jiǎn)單的基礎(chǔ)性語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤；４、每種文體的結(jié)構(gòu)是有限制的，一定得按照相應(yīng)的商務(wù)文章的結(jié)構(gòu)去謀篇布局，也就是，“八股文”的形式是不應(yīng)該有大的改變的。綜上所述，BEC寫(xiě)作的考點(diǎn)很明確：規(guī)定的商務(wù)英語(yǔ)文章的格式，中心＋3的表述方式是清晰表達(dá)的必然要求（中心即提綱要求，3是指表達(dá)邏輯關(guān)系的連接詞），無(wú)錯(cuò)的英文表達(dá)是合格和優(yōu)秀的基礎(chǔ)。來(lái)源: