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【正文】 ays as a deterrent to driving offences. Besides, the government may enjoy a greater revenue from severer fines, which can in turn be used to improve road conditions.However, we shall never overlook the other side of the coin: punishment has its downsides. Fines, as the most mon penalty for driving violations, tend to instill in people the misconception that money can pay off their guilt and resolve the problem. As a result, we can see many cases where the traffic offender mits the same or another mistake even after having been fined a lot. In spite of heavier punishment, road safety cannot be enhanced unless drivers are equipped with sufficient driving skills and knowledge. Recently there have emerged many irresponsible driving schools that have produced a host of unqualified drivers, contributing to more traffic offences. Thus tight control on driving schools and the driving testing system is needed as well to improve road safety. Furthermore, advertisements and campaigns concerned should be launched to raise the public awareness. When people are fully aware of the importance of abiding traffic rules, accidents may hopefully be eliminated.From the above discussion, it is clear that only stricter punishment is not enough to enhance road safety. Instead, it should go hand in hand with closer control on driving schools and the testing system as well as higher public awareness.吳老師點評：一、 結構合理，重點突出。作者采用了一面倒的其中一種形式（類似于教材的第二篇范文）: 在第一段引用數(shù)據(jù)，引起讀者對交通問題的重視，同時開門見山提出對方觀點，表明自己的立場。第二段略略承認對方觀點的合理性，而第三段闡述自己的看法，最后總結。二、 句式多樣，體現(xiàn)扎實的語法功底。不斷變化句式，有繁有簡，能夠熟練巧妙的運用套句，不露痕跡。紅色字體標識的為各種句式和套句。三、 用詞精確，搭配合理,善于換用同義表達。如：improve road safety, enhance road safety, raise the public awareness, ensure road safety, bring down the number等等6 /
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