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ly: You use much too much salt on your food, Paul — it’s not good for you!” Paul put down his knife and frowned: ”Why on earth not! If you didn’t have salt on your food it would taste awful… like eating cardboard硬紙板 or sand… just imagine bread without salt in it, or potatoes or pasta面團 cooked without salt!” Kate was patient. She didn’t want to quarrel with Paul. She wanted to persuade him. She said firmly: ”But too much salt is bad for you. It cause high blood pressure and latter on, heartattacks. It also disguises掩蓋 the taste of food, the real tastes which are much more subtle微妙的 than salt, and which we have lost the sensitivity to appreciate any more.” (136words) ? 可以用第三人稱概括為: ? Kate quarreled/disagreed with Paul over how much salt they should eat. She wanted less, but he wanted more. ? (18words) Revision ? 草稿擬好以后,對它進行 修改 。 ? 首先,與原文比較看是否把所有 重要的觀點 都 概括 了,縮寫中的觀點是否與原文中的完全 一致 。 ? 其次,如果縮寫中出現(xiàn)了 不必要的細節(jié)、詞匯、短語或長句子 , 刪除或概括 它們。 ? 第三,檢查 拼寫、語法和標點符號 的錯誤。 ? 最后,保持 語言簡單明了 。