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, you had better..., remember to do等句型。在最后祝愿對方成功的時(shí)候 , 可以用簡明扼要的句型 , 如 wish you good luck / wish you success / may you succeed, 使文章長短句結(jié)合得當(dāng)。 由于廢氣、污水、白色垃圾等環(huán)境污染已危及到人類的健康與生存 , 為鼓勵(lì)大家節(jié)能環(huán)保 ,你們學(xué)校將舉辦一次“低碳行動(dòng)”的環(huán)?;顒?dòng) , 假設(shè)你是高三 6班的一名學(xué)生 , 將要在這個(gè)活動(dòng)中向全體師生發(fā)起“低碳生活”的倡議 ,以下是倡議的內(nèi)容: 1. 盡量綠色出行:采取步行或自行車方式 。 2. 少喝一次瓶裝水; 3. 盡量不用一次性制品 , 如一次性木筷子和塑 料袋; 4. 每周至少手洗衣服一次; 5. 每周少開手機(jī)、電視一天。 [寫作內(nèi)容 ] 1. 活動(dòng)背景 。 2. 倡議目的 。 3. 倡議內(nèi)容。 Hello everyone, I am Li Hua from Class Six, Senior Three. ... I believe everyone, as a member of this global village, should take responsibility to take part in the global green campaign! [參考范文 ] I am Li Hua from Class Six, Senior Three. We human beings are seriously threatened by the environmental pollution, such as waste gases, dirty water and white pollution. In order to encourage all of us to save energy and protect our environment, I am going to make the following suggestions. It is suggested that we should walk or take bikes if we go out. To avoid white pollution, we can reduce the use of bottled water and unrecyclable items such as disposable chopsticks and plastic bags. What’s more, if we can wash clothes by ourselves at least once a week as well as turn off our TVs and mobile phones for one day every week, it will be of great benefit to saving energy. I believe everyone, as a member of this global village, should take responsibility to take part in the global green campaign! Li Hua [精華點(diǎn)評 ] 本文的難度在于如何合并信息點(diǎn) , 考生需要用三個(gè)句子覆蓋五個(gè)倡議。這時(shí)通過分析 , 可以發(fā)現(xiàn) , 綠色出行是減少廢氣排放 。 減少使用瓶裝水和一次性物品是為了減少白色污染 。 手洗衣服和減少使用手機(jī)、電視機(jī)是節(jié)能 , 因此考生可以把信息點(diǎn)按照這個(gè)邏輯分成三句 , 并且做出適當(dāng)?shù)难a(bǔ)充 ,如 to avoid white pollution..., ...it will be of great benefit to saving energy等。 考生可以使用不同的詞組表達(dá)同一個(gè)概念 ,使文章語言更豐富 , 如表示建議 , 考生既可以說 make a suggestion..., 也可以用 it is suggested that...。 又如“一次性 (物品 )”的表達(dá) , 既可以使用 unrecyclable也可以用disposable表達(dá)。總之一篇好的作文 , 是非常有必要在詞、短語、習(xí)慣表達(dá)、過渡詞和句型等方面下功夫的。