【正文】 ecently, the moving story of He Sihan has been reported on CCTV. The 14yearold boy is a student in Grade 9. He has lived with his aunt since he was only one year old. When he was a little boy, he showed great interest in painting. At that time, they led a happy life. Unfortunately, his aunt got a serious disease in . Their family became poorer and poorer after that. So he decided to do something for his aunt. By selling the pictures he painted, he raised money for his aunt to treat her disease. You can’t imagine what difficulties he faces, he never gives up. In addition, he offers to do all the housework. What’s more, though he is busy, he studies hard and gets good grades.I feel proud of him. Because he never gives up and tries his best to pay back his aunt, no matter how hard the life is.【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文，介紹何思汗的感人事跡。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如show great interest in, at that time, unfortunately, 比較級and比較級, raise money, give up, in addition, offer to do, what’s more, get good grades, feel proud of, pay back以及try one’s best等。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。14．（浙江中考模擬）你養(yǎng)我長大，我陪你變老。父母親一直在為我們的成長默默付出，成長要學(xué)會愛，感受愛。假設(shè)今天是你爸爸的生日，是你向爸爸表達感激的好機會。請根據(jù)以下要點，寫一篇英語短文。要點：1）給我生命，一直照顧我成長；教我學(xué)會……2）努力工作，為我提供良好的生活和教育條件；3）今天，我要為您……（自主發(fā)揮，至少兩點）要求：1）參考所給內(nèi)容，可適當發(fā)揮；2）語句通順，意思連貫，書寫工整；3）文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和地名等信息。4）詞數(shù)：不少于70詞。（開頭已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)。）You raise me up. I will be with you in your life. You are an important person in the process of my growth.【答案】You raise me up. I will be with you in your life. You are an important person in the process of my growth. You give me life and take care of me all the time, when I have problems with my study and life, you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me. In order to let me in a pleasant life and receive a good education, you always work hard from morning to evening every day.You are ready to help people in need. You teach me to be a kind person. In the past, I never said I love you to you. But today is your birthday, I want to say it to you loudly. I will study harder to get better results. I hope you will be happy and healthy forever.【解析】【詳解】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少，如in your life，take care of, all the time，have problems with，in order to，work hard，from morning to evening，be ready to，in need，in the past，get better results等。而復(fù)雜并列結(jié)構(gòu)In the past, I never said I love you to you. But today is your birthday, I want to say it to you give me life and take care of me all the time, when I have problems with my study and life, you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me./ I hope you will be happy and healthy ，豐富了短文內(nèi)容，使表達多樣化，是本文的亮點。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章表達更有邏輯性，也更富有條理?！军c睛】書面表達題既不是漢譯英，也不是可任意發(fā)揮的作文。它要求將所規(guī)定的材料內(nèi)容經(jīng)整理后展開思維，考查運用所學(xué)英語知識準確表達意思的能力。所以，考生不能遺漏要點，要盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞、短語和句式，盡可能使用高級詞匯和較復(fù)雜的句式結(jié)構(gòu)以便得到較高的分數(shù)。15．（廣東中考模擬）書面表達以下圖畫呈現(xiàn)了林濤和梅梅在公園里發(fā)生的事情。請用英語寫一篇約100詞的短文。要求：?！敬鸢浮縊ne day Lin Tao and Meimei were playing in the garden. They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to die. So they decided to do something for the young tree. First, Meimei kept the tree straight and pushed the earth hard down with her foot. Then Lin Tao knocked a board into the earth. It said, “Please take care of trees.” After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of them.Trees are good for the environment. We should protect them.【解析】這是一篇看圖作文，要求我們仔細觀察圖片，弄清楚里面發(fā)生的事情，用英語將這些內(nèi)容完整地敘述出來，并簡單陳述自己從中學(xué)到的東西。因此寫作前，要仔細看圖片，了解圖片中所發(fā)生的事情，并提煉出要點，列出所要用到的詞匯、短語等，或者列出大概的寫作提綱。通過分析可知，這篇短文講述的是過去發(fā)生的事情，應(yīng)用一般過去時態(tài)，注意謂語動詞形式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動詞的過去式形式。寫作時要注意按照事情發(fā)展的先后順序，這樣可以使文章條理清楚。還需注意的是英語表達和漢語的習(xí)慣不同，不能逐詞去翻譯，應(yīng)從句子整體考慮，使用簡單句的基本句型，如主謂賓結(jié)構(gòu)或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。在文章中點綴幾個并列句、復(fù)合句或復(fù)雜句式，調(diào)整文章節(jié)奏，提升文章檔次。語句之間注意使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。點睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，符合圖片所傳達的信息，表述準確。作者在短文中敘述了林濤和梅梅兩人在公園里給小樹澆水、并掛牌子告訴人們注意保護樹木。整篇文章按照事情發(fā)生的先后順序敘述，條理清晰。文章最后的兩句話也點明了文章的主題。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，文章以一般過去時態(tài)為主，謂語動詞用了過去式，尤其是注意了不規(guī)則動詞過去式的形式，如found, kept, got, were, spoke等。語法規(guī)范、準確。短文中還使用了較豐富的句型和短語，如They found that a young tree needed watering and it was going to ；再如So they decided to do something for the young tree這句話中使用了句型decided to do ；After that, they quickly got water and watered it carefully. Both of them were working hard. Their teacher, Miss Li, spoke highly of that, speak highly of等等。16．（山東中考模擬）書面表達。現(xiàn)在各行各業(yè)都在為建設(shè)美麗中國，實現(xiàn)中國夢而奮斗．請根據(jù)下列圖示，談?wù)勔韵聨追N職業(yè)怎樣做貢獻的．作為學(xué)生，你又該怎么辦？要求：短文需包含提示要點，并適當發(fā)揮；文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和校名；語句通順，結(jié)構(gòu)合理，書寫規(guī)范；詞數(shù)：80詞左右．短文開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．Now all the Chinese people are making their efforts to build beautiful China and achieve the Chinese Dream． 【答案】Now all the Chinese people are making their efforts to build beautiful China and achieve the Chinese Dream．In the fields，a large number of farmers work hard every day to improve our living levels．In order to produce enough vegetables and fruit，they are busy growing plants．Meanwhile，in hospitals，doctors and nurses always try their best to save patients day and night．Besides，they also take good care of the old．（醫(yī)生）In our daily life，we can see many policemen in the streets on duty to protect people．（警察）As for scientists，they concentrate more on scientific studies to invent something useful and raise our living standards．（科學(xué)家）As students，what should we do to build our country？I think we should study hard to get rich knowledge so as to make contributions to our country?！窘馕觥窟@是一篇給材料作文，介紹為建設(shè)美麗中國，實現(xiàn)中國夢，農(nóng)民，醫(yī)生，警察和科學(xué)家怎樣做貢獻的。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱為第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動賓結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用，比如：Now a