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e young. You are also supposed to be kind to other. Next, it’s a good habit to be honest and keep your words. What’s more, you should keep studying , go to bed and get up on time. You mustn’t stay up too late.In my opinion, every family must keep rules and children shouldn’t develop bad habits, like telling lies and be rude to others. We should be strict with ourselves.The family rules also make a great difference to me. I learn to think about others’ feelings and Chinese traditional culture. What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,向山姆介紹你的家規(guī)并向他展示一個溫情的中國家庭。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點詞句,如be supposed to, be kind to, keep your words, what’s more, in one’s opinion, develop bad habits, be rude to, be strict with, make a difference to以及it is a good habit to be honest中it作形式主語。增強邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。10.你是一位九年級的學(xué)生李明,你用英語寫一封郵件給你的筆友Amy,感謝她對你關(guān)心,并告訴她目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí),并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。要點如下: (1). 雖然你大部分功課你都學(xué)得比較好,但是你對自己不滿意。你認(rèn)為自己學(xué)習(xí)上還要多花工夫。 (2). 你的父母對你嚴(yán)格要求,但是也很關(guān)心你。(舉例說明,適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句)…… (3). 老師很樂意幫助你們。他們希望你們實現(xiàn)自己的理想。他們說(適當(dāng)發(fā)揮2—3句)……注意: (1). 要求語句通順,意思連貫。 (2). 第2要點和第3要點要用2—3句話作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。 (3). 詞數(shù)90個左右,郵件開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【答案】例文Hello!Dear Amy, thank you for caring.Now I am working hard for the senior high school entrance examination. I have got good results in most of my subjects, but I am not happy with myself. I think I must spend more time on my studies.My parents are really strict with me. However, they care for me as well. Once upon a time, I failed in my physics exam and felt stressed and sad. They had a close munication with me and helped me solve my problems and cheer up again.My teachers are also ready to help us. They hope that we can realize our dreams. They tell us to try our best and not to give up. Life is always full of ups and downs. It39。s important not to be afraid of any kind of difficulty. How about you? I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Li Ming【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,告訴艾米目前你在全力以赴為中考而學(xué)習(xí),并與她交流一下目前的學(xué)習(xí)和生活情況。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點說明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語言表達符合英語習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點詞句,如get good results, spend+時間+on sth, be strict with, however, care for, as well, once upon a time, help sb do, cheer up, be ready to, tell sb to do, try one’s best to do, be full of以及it is adj to do sth等,增強邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求,抓住要點,詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動筆寫作了,在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外,還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。