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dear father!【解析】寫作分析:這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述,要求是進(jìn)行描述,并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿模约八嬖诘囊饬x。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的,在討論其如何獲得的時(shí)候要注意正確使用時(shí)態(tài),在談?wù)撘饬x的時(shí)候要注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性,避免不熟悉的表達(dá)。寫作亮點(diǎn):這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍,描述玩具槍的時(shí)候有適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)補(bǔ)充,例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth(用黃布包著的玩具槍),這里用到了過(guò)去分詞作定語(yǔ),作者還描述了玩具槍的功能(small plastic pills),順便還描述了自己小時(shí)候玩槍的經(jīng)歷,準(zhǔn)確使用了時(shí)態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時(shí)候不落俗套,講到了自己的家庭那時(shí)比較困難,父親是通過(guò)努力工作為我賺錢買槍的,寫作是富有感情的,也通過(guò)這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華,表達(dá)了作者的期望(I hope I can be a soldier),上升到了保家衛(wèi)國(guó)的層面,這樣的一篇作文是有深度的,能夠讓人感動(dòng)的,是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。5.俗話說(shuō),國(guó)有國(guó)法,家有家規(guī)。家規(guī)是中華民族傳統(tǒng)文化的重要組成部分。我們的國(guó)家主席習(xí)近平多次強(qiáng)調(diào)良好家風(fēng)家規(guī)的重要性。假如你是李華,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下表格內(nèi)的要點(diǎn)提示,并結(jié)合你的家庭實(shí)際情況,給你的英國(guó)筆友Sam寫一封信,向他介紹一下你的家規(guī),并向他展示一個(gè)溫情智慧的中國(guó)家庭。要點(diǎn)提示:三條家規(guī)尊老愛幼,禮貌待人誠(chéng)實(shí)守信,不斷學(xué)習(xí)按時(shí)作息,杜絕熬夜你對(duì)你家家規(guī)的看法......簡(jiǎn)單闡述你是如何受益的......寫作要求:,可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,使行文流暢、通順;;。文章的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of our Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Sam,Haven’t written to you for a long time! As you know, family rules are an important part of you Chinese traditional culture. Today I’m writing to tell you something about my family rules.There are many rules that we have to follow. First, you should respect the old and love the young. You are also supposed to be kind to other. Next, it’s a good habit to be honest and keep your words. What’s more, you should keep studying , go to bed and get up on time. You mustn’t stay up too late.In my opinion, every family must keep rules and children shouldn’t develop bad habits, like telling lies and be rude to others. We should be strict with ourselves.The family rules also make a great difference to me. I learn to think about others’ feelings and Chinese traditional culture. What about you? Do you have any family rules? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【詳解】本文屬于材料作文,向山姆介紹你的家規(guī)并向他展示一個(gè)溫情的中國(guó)家庭。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯,可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明:這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù),語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣,準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致,特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句,如be supposed to, be kind to, keep your words, what’s more, in one’s opinion, develop bad habits, be rude to, be strict with, make a difference to以及it is a good habit to be honest中it作形式主語(yǔ)。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系,增加上下文意思連貫,用詞準(zhǔn)確,句子通順,行文連貫?!军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起:認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求,抓住要點(diǎn),詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱,我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的,而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮,因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒,就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了,在寫作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞,使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外,還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理,有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言,大小寫是否正確,格式是否正確,詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。6.書面表達(dá)中考后暑假即將開始,你和一些同學(xué)準(zhǔn)備結(jié)伴出國(guó)旅行。旅行社提供了兩個(gè)國(guó)家供你選擇游玩。請(qǐng)根據(jù)旅行社提供的信息,將你的選擇用英文向同學(xué)們介紹。BritainAustraliaTimeJuly 1 July 14TimeAugust 15 August 24Activitiesvisit the Buckingham Palace (白金漢宮) visit the British Museum (大英博物館)watch football matches…Activitiesvisit the Sydney Opera Housetravel around the Gold Coast (黃金海岸)have fun with kangaroos and koalas…Attentionchangeable weatherAttentionwinterCost20,000 yuanCost16,000 yuan要求:1. 所寫內(nèi)容必須包括某一國(guó)家的所有信息及選擇的理由; 2. 結(jié)合游玩國(guó)家的情況,自擬希望可以安排的活動(dòng),并提出12點(diǎn)出游的注意事項(xiàng);3. 文章不少于90詞,開頭和結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入總詞