【文章內(nèi)容簡(jiǎn)介】 g with the times and new knowledge emerges with the leaps and bounds of development. Old as a person may be, he can be active in learning as long as he has a passion for knowledge and understands the virtues of studying. ④ Life is like the sea while education resembles the boat. By rowing the boat continuously, w can have a taste of the happiness of the life voyage.⑤Education is an infinite period of time that stretches to the end of our lives. In no case should we stop learning as long as we are breathing. At last, we must keep in mind that education brings us knowledge which fits in all walks of life, that education gives birth to new ideas and that the long lasting education truly stands for the significance of our life.⑥點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文最大的特色之一在于其長(zhǎng)句和修辭格的運(yùn)用，極大的加強(qiáng)了語(yǔ)言的氣概和情感色彩。同時(shí)，本文詞匯豐富，語(yǔ)言流暢，顯示出強(qiáng)大的語(yǔ)言?xún)?chǔ)藏量。 此長(zhǎng)句的前半句以舉例方式直觀說(shuō)明Education is an unlimited term.，并和所舉實(shí)例相對(duì)應(yīng)。舉例適切，說(shuō)明征詢(xún)題。過(guò)度自然簡(jiǎn)約，用詞精確豐富。句式多樣，連接緊湊，詞語(yǔ)豐富，黑體字為亮點(diǎn)詞組。運(yùn)用比喻的修辭格，形象的說(shuō)明了Education is an unlimited term.在最后的長(zhǎng)句中，keep in mind的三個(gè)并列賓語(yǔ)從句都以education 作主語(yǔ)，句式構(gòu)造統(tǒng)一，構(gòu)成排比，使整個(gè)結(jié)尾氣概宏大。同時(shí)，詞組的表意豐富更加強(qiáng)了內(nèi)容的氣概。黑體字為本句的亮點(diǎn)詞匯。C．小明因家境貧寒，正在擔(dān)憂高考后上大學(xué)的費(fèi)用征詢(xún)題。你是張林，請(qǐng)你以朋友的身份給他一點(diǎn)建議，上大學(xué)的費(fèi)用(tuition and fees)能夠通過(guò)多種途徑處理，總有一種適宜他，請(qǐng)他不要擔(dān)憂。審題分析： 此題是一篇信件類(lèi)作文，要求學(xué)生寫(xiě)信給朋友小明提出建議，說(shuō)明上大學(xué)的費(fèi)用能夠通過(guò)多種途徑處理，讓他不要擔(dān)憂。 由于本文的寫(xiě)作目的是提出建議并撫慰小明，因而在內(nèi)容上要有理有據(jù)，讓小明服氣；語(yǔ)言上要懇切真誠(chéng)，真正起到撫慰他的作用，讓他不要擔(dān)憂。范文：Dear Xiao Ming,I’ve learned that you are worried about the college expenses you will be faced with. I am only too willing to give you some suggestions on this matter.①Poor as your family is, you still have confidence in yourself and bee one of the top students with your own efforts. Judging from your ability, chances are that you can find a parttime job easily. Not only can you earn enough money for tuition and fees, but you also can gain practical experience.② Apart from doing parttime job, winning the scholarship is also feasible. Concentrate on your study and spare no effort to make progress, and you can surely bee the winner. ③It will really relieve you of some burden.As we all know④, help from society is available. You can apply for the study fund. People from all walks of life will offer a helping hand to you. With the help of society, there is no possibility that you can’t finish your course for lack of money⑤.Since there are many ways to solve the problem of money, there is no need for you to be anxious about it. What really matters is not how you can pay for the expenses, but whether you are qualified for college education. Prepare yourself for any challenge, and you will make it⑥!I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours ,Zhang Lin點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文構(gòu)造完好，層次明晰，展開(kāi)充分，語(yǔ)言感情色彩突出。尤其出色的是結(jié)尾最后兩段，在總結(jié)全文的根底上撫慰小明，讓他不要擔(dān)憂，充分表達(dá)了本文“以朋友身份”給小明寫(xiě)的一封“信”的要求。 一個(gè)only too willing to 表現(xiàn)出作文真誠(chéng)懇切的情感，想要協(xié)助小明。 用Not only +倒裝，but also… 句型加強(qiáng)了這個(gè)建議的力度。 用“祈使句，and sb. Can/will…” 句型指出努力的方向，增將建議的力度。 承接轉(zhuǎn)換不夠自然，建議改成moreover 雙重否認(rèn)，加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)氣。 在總結(jié)建議的同時(shí)給小明以決心和鼓舞，使整封信真誠(chéng)誠(chéng)懇。篇三：六年級(jí)作文精選【精選美文】銀都小學(xué)（六年級(jí)：趙一如）朋友是什么朋友是鑰匙，能解開(kāi)我心中的鎖；朋友是陽(yáng)光，平和著我的心田；朋友是清風(fēng)，為我吹走酷暑。教師今天給我們上了一節(jié)關(guān)于“朋友”的課，讓我們舉例一樣物品，然后用我們舉例的物品說(shuō)出和朋友有關(guān)的句子。開(kāi)場(chǎng)了，我們都按耐不住心中的激動(dòng)，我一心二用，一