【正文】 hers than by their today39。s more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to workslowly and make sure that everything is of the best way that parents can help their teenage children prepare for their adult lifeto encourage them to take a parttime job.第四篇：托福獨立寫作評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)英文版托福獨立寫作評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)5分252。 Well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and or details 252。 Displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors 4分252。 Generally well organized and well developed, using appropriate and sufficient explorations, exemplifications, and or details252。 Displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety and range of vocabulary, though it will probably have occasional noticeable minor errors in structure, word form, or use of idiomatic language that do not interfere with meaning3分252。 Displays unity, progression, and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured252。 May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary2分252。 Inadequate organization or connection of ideas 252。 A noticeably inappropriate choice of words or word forms 252。 Serious disorganization or underdevelopment 252。 Serious and frequent errors in sentence structure or usage第五篇：托福獨立寫作作文修改獨立5現(xiàn)象證明P21 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to bee educated than in the is the foundation of a today have a stronger concept（搭配不當(dāng)，改為sense）of being educated than in the agree with the statement that people gain an easier access to all kinds of educations at current , there are much more schools available today than in the matter where you live, in big cities or in the countryside, the local government spends a large amount of money on the constructions of various types of schools, such as primary schools, middle schools, high schools and even schools for and more universities and colleges have been built to ensure higher education for top you want to study in schools, you will always find a proper one to , the teaching approach diversifies（there are diversified teaching approaches）.Except for（In addition to包括在內(nèi)）blackboard and chalks, many advanced teaching devices are being used today in most schools, including puters, multimedia and some other , labs and libraries have also e into use for students to study deeper and wider(who want to make a deeper and wider study on the fields they are interested in).What is more, the teachers39。t allowed to go to , they have equal rights to study in schools nowadays.（要回到主題，和更容易接受教育要直接聯(lián)系起來，所以再加一句）Obviously, these people surly have easier access to sum up, almost everyone today has equal rights to go to all kinds of schools with diversified teaching people do have an easier way to receive education now than in past reasons above firmly support my opinion(最后一句話不夠有力，可以將三點簡明扼要的用一句話概括).(Word Count: 294)獨立8包含因果關(guān)系P15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today can solve many important problems so they do not need help from the the development of the society, people can do more things by themselves nowadays（于什么時候比較？）than in the I disagree with the statement that people can solve many important problems, therefore the government does not need to help them（therefore they need not depend on the government for any support）.There(are)three reasons as follows:Firstly, People today still cannot solve many important problems by themselves in fact in terms of education, unemployment, war, starvation, poverty and so are international problems all over the world, so a single person or even a group of people may not have the abilities to solve(be capable of solving) example, if a man wants to stop a war between two countries, even he is powerful or wealthy, he(he, however wealthy and powerful,)cannot prevent them from fighting with each other without the help of , people today need more help from the the life standards