【正文】 bravely. 改寫 : My parents praised Ah Fu warmly. It was our brave Ah Fu who had saved my little sister. 例 2 We lost our way, but the pass helped us. 改寫 : We lost our way, but in the very time, the pass helped us. (2) 復(fù)合句 例 1 We had to stand there to catch the offender. 改寫 : What we have to do was to stand there, trying to catch the offender. 例 2 We swam cross a river and got ourselves wet. Then we lost our way. 改寫 : We swam cross a river and got ourselves wet. What was worse, we lost our way. (3) 介詞短語 例 1 (with: being acpanied by) My mother sat in a chair with a newspaper in her hand. 例 2 She left without saying goodbye. 例 3 With the knowledge gained in classroom training, we were able to solve all the problems we met in the wilderness survival program. 例 4 It was very crowded in town, with all the Christmas shoppers. 例 5 With being in the trade, I am able to get goods at a discount(打折 ). 例 6 With all his boasting, he has achieved very little. (with all= in spite of) 例 7. He died with his life’s work still unfinished. (4) 分詞短語 例 1 Satisfied with the result, he decided to go on with a new experiment. 例 2 After putting bags onto a board, we jumped into the river and swam cross it successfully. 例 3 We left home in the early morning. We took all the useful things: a pass, a map a knife, a firstaid kit, and so on. 改寫 : We left home in the early morning, carrying the things which were supposed to be useful on our journey: a pass, a map a knife, a firstaid kit, and so on. 例 4 An old man came out of the City Park and wanted to cross the Park Road. 改寫 : An old man dressed in black came out of the City Park and was about to cross the Park Road. （ 二 ） 使用較復(fù)雜的詞匯 例 1 Believe it or not, it was the most delicious meal I’ve ever had! 例 2 But now, as a result of less burden of studies, we can do whatever we like. 例 3. For instance, during the daytime we can visit museums, study puter programming, join some clubs and so on. In the evenings, we can watch TV, read books, or do anything we like. 例 4. As far as I am concerned, I strongly hold that this plan should be carried out continually not only because it gives us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability but also because we really feel much happier than ever before. 五 、 典型錯誤歸納 （ 一 ） 句子基本框架錯誤 1. 句子不完整 。 1)使用銜接詞或過渡詞 because , but , therefore , instead , the most importance , besides , in addition , as a result …. 2) 保持時態(tài)、語態(tài)及人稱的正確性和一致性。 when the sun was rising from the horizon / first / then / after that / after a long walk / while 三、 語言表達(dá)的連貫性 1. 連貫的標(biāo)準(zhǔn) ：流暢 1)思路清楚， 思維沒有跳躍， 使讀者能跟上作者的思路。 while… )、 非謂語動詞作狀語 (… singing happily)、 賓語從句 (… wondering which was the correct way… )、 定語從句 (… the most delicious meal I’ve ever had!)、插入語 (Believe it or not… ) 等復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu) 。 1） 使用各類狀語從句 (when… 。文體規(guī)范 2020NMET 周末活動（減負(fù)前） 周末活動（減負(fù)后） 白天：上課 、 做作業(yè) 白天：參觀博物館 、 學(xué)習(xí)電腦 、 繪畫等 晚上：做作業(yè) 晚上：看新聞 、 讀書 、 看報 就寢時間： 11： 30 就寢時間： 10： 00 Good beginning : Although there is still much debate over whether the plan of reducing students’ learning load should be carried out , it has indeed brought us many pleasant changes. Body: Take the weekend life for example. One month ago, we just attended classes and did our homework from morning till night. That left us very tired, and we had no time at all to do what we wanted. But now , as a result of less burden of studies, we can do whatever we like. For instance, during the daytime we can visit museums, study puter programming, join some clubs and so on. In the evening , we can watch TV, read books , or do anything we like. Ending: As far as I am concerned, I strongly hold that this plan should be carried out continually not only because it gives us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability but also because we really feel much happier than ever before. 2020年北京題 英語書面表達(dá)例文： Li Ming and I started off, when the sun was rising from the horizon, singing happily. We had pass, camp, bread, map, light, matches, knife, clothes, flashlight and firstaid kit in our bags and prepared our minds for the hard training. We first climbed a mountain, then swam across a river when our bags also ―swam‖ on a piece of wood. After that, we entered a forest. I was just wondering which was the correct way when Li Ming used the pass and showed me the way. After a long walk, we finally arrived at the campsite. I was in charge of setting up the camp while Li Ming made a fire and cooked our dinner. Believe it or not, it was the most delicious meal I’ve ever had ! 、 內(nèi)容完整 五幅畫面六個要點(diǎn)： (1) 出發(fā) Li Ming and I started off, when … (2)背包中的物品 We had pass, camp, bread, map, light, matches, knife, clothes, flashlight and firstaid kit in our bags… (3) 爬山 We first climbed a mountain… (4) 過河 … then swam across a river… (5) 找路 I was just wondering which was the correct way when Li Ming used the pass and showed me the way. (6) 宿營 After a long walk, we finally arrived at the campsite. I was in charge of setting up the camp while Li Ming made a fire and cooked our dinner. 2. 詞匯 、 語法結(jié)構(gòu)變化豐富 ： （ 1） 交叉使用簡單句 、 復(fù)合句 、 并列句 。語言連貫、文字流暢 4。結(jié)構(gòu)完整（句子、篇章） 2。 記敘文范文 ： Mrs Myra Webb, who was told by doctors that she would never hear again, lived for six years in a world of silence. But yesterday she heard a blackbird sing in the garden of her home at Brighton, Su