【正文】 r to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析：這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述，要求是進行描述，并談談你是如何得到它的，以及它存在的意義。要求：1. 請在題目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字；2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。整篇文章語句通順、意思連貫、表達流暢。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，文章以第一人稱、一般將來時和一般現(xiàn)在時為主，謂語動詞形式準發(fā)，語法規(guī)范，符合英語句子的表達習慣。作者主要從三個方面敘述：首先介紹了自己的身份和寫留言的目的；接下來詳細介紹了自己參加這次冬令營的愿望；最后是一個簡單的結尾。點睛：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。另外還應注意語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫。通過分析可知，這篇短文應使用第一人稱I來敘述，時態(tài)應以一般將來時態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時為主。文章內(nèi)容主要包括三個部分：首先是介紹自己的身份；然后寫留言的目的，包括冬令營的時間、想要去參觀London Canal Museum以及聽Liz Payne的講座；最后簡單介紹一下你的預期的收獲。作文的開頭和結尾已經(jīng)給出,不計入總詞數(shù),也不必抄寫在答題卡上。內(nèi)容包括：；（包含冬令營的時間,聽Liz Payne的講座）；。t talk too much, but always keeps a smile on his face.、If I need any help for my math exercises, he is always the one that can help me out.、He also does well in many sports, such as badminton and pingpang.、He is my idol and I wish I could be a student as good as he 。用詞準確，語言得體，句式結構完整，符合英語的表達習慣。各部分內(nèi)容安排合理，主次分明?！军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，介紹了一個曾經(jīng)激勵過自己的人。為提升文章檔次，應使用高級詞匯以及復雜結構。應該從句子的整體結構入手，寫完整的句子。寫作時應注意：首先要符合題目要求，包括題目中要求的所有信息，不能遺漏要點，可以適當發(fā)揮，注意上下文的銜接。學生們可以這兩個問題為提綱，發(fā)揮想象力，充實細節(jié)信息，組織語言，連貫成文。s pingpang petition.You can see the good personality and the spirit of persistence in this small body. He is my idol and I wish I could be a student as good as he is.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以The person who inspired me為題，介紹一個曾經(jīng)激勵過你的人?！敬鸢浮縏he person who inspired meMany people around gave me deep impressions. They helped me, encouraged me and inspired me. But the person who inspired me most, I think, is my friend Wang Peng. Wang Peng is a small thin boy with two big black eyes. He doesn39。要點： 1. What kind of person is he/ she？2. How did he/ she inspire you？要求： 1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和校名。4． “inspire” 一詞的漢語解釋是“激勵；鼓舞；賦予靈感；或啟發(fā)思考”等。開頭介紹了我最大的個人變化是喜歡上讀書，接下來介紹我小時候不喜歡讀書，最后指出現(xiàn)在書籍是我的朋友。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關系?！驹斀狻拷Y合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時，人稱為第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問題，句子結構主要為系表結構和動賓結構，注意一些常見句式的應用，比如：When I was……，my mother always read……，Gradually I began to……，Books are……等句式的應用。3．每一次變化都伴隨著我們的成長，作為初中生的你，你感覺自已比起小時候有了哪些變化?請寫一篇文章描述一下你認為最明顯的變化。開頭表明自己的看法，接下來陳述自己的理由，最后介紹自己的建議。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關系。結合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱為第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問題，句子結構主要為系表結構和動賓結構，注意一些常見句式的應用，比如：My idea is that……，There are……，Some allA students in school have…….，The reason is……，So I suggest that……等句式的應用?！敬鸢浮縃i,TigerMom,What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in idea is that it is not quiteright for you to do so.Although high grades are an important factor in evaluating students and for their future university admission,development in wisdom,emotion,health,and life attitude should never be ignored. There are many examples around us. Some allA students in school have turned out not to be as successful insociety as they were expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Furthermore,punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.So I suggest that you take your friends39。 2. 陳述自己的理由。 請你根據(jù)博客內(nèi)容，寫作要點和要求，給這位家長回復。常用的重點句型和短語有：sb. spend some time doing sth.，in order to do sth.，try to do sth.，the importance of…等。（I think ???；try one39。根據(jù)題干要求可知，本篇文章主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時寫作，人稱用第三人稱復數(shù)和第一人稱。（3）要點齊全，行文連貫，可適當發(fā)揮?，F(xiàn) 狀大約70%學生眼睛近視主要原因1. 睡眠不