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order to make it clearer and tidier.、We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic 。文章條理清晰,有層次?!军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者根據(jù)題目要求,向中學(xué)生們發(fā)出號(hào)召,共同參與到城市“雙創(chuàng)”活動(dòng)中來。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)注意:首先英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯,寫漢語式的英語,而應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)考慮,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型,以常見的主謂賓或者主系表構(gòu)成的簡(jiǎn)單句為主,穿插使用并列句或者復(fù)合句,改變文章節(jié)奏,提升文章檔次。根據(jù)這個(gè)內(nèi)容,寫作時(shí),把短文分成兩個(gè)層次,這樣可以使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、條理。題目中并沒有規(guī)定具體的寫作內(nèi)容,而是用圖表的形式,列出了寫作的提綱。要求:,意思連貫,語法正確,書寫規(guī)范;,并做適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣梗?. 行文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名、校名或地名;4. 詞數(shù)80左右,(短文的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù));Since the government created the civilized and healthy city, our living environment has improved a lot. Everyone plays an important role in building our city, so good behaviors can be seen everywhere.As junior high students,___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Let’s take action now. Our actions can make a difference and lead to a more beautiful city.【答案】Since the government created civilized and healthy city, our living environment has improved a lot. Everyone plays an important role in building our city, so good behaviors can be seen everywhere.As junior high students, on the one hand, there are a lot of things we can do. We should be polite to others and try to behave well. It’s kind of you to help people in need. Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier. Also, we can plant more trees and keep off grass. On the other hand, there are many things we shouldn’t do. We shouldn’t make a lot of noise loudly in the public. We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic rules.Let’s take action now. Our actions can make a difference and lead to a more beautiful city.【解析】【詳解】瓊海正在進(jìn)行“雙創(chuàng)”活動(dòng),即創(chuàng)建文明城市、創(chuàng)建健康城市,城市的生活環(huán)境有了很大的改變。自雙創(chuàng)以來,我們的生活環(huán)境得到了很大的改觀,人人積極參與雙創(chuàng)活動(dòng),讓人點(diǎn)贊的文明行為隨處可見。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。短文中語言得體,句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣。首先短文內(nèi)容完整,包含了題目中要求的所有信息,沒有遺漏要點(diǎn);且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,分成了三段,每一段的中心明確,意思表達(dá)清楚、明了。為提升文章檔次,可以穿插使用并列句和復(fù)合句;語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫,表達(dá)流暢。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一,時(shí)態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一,根據(jù)表達(dá)的需要使用正確的時(shí)態(tài),注意謂語動(dòng)詞的正確形式。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴(yán)重;然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施;最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應(yīng)該怎么做。Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours,Li Ming【答案】Dear Jack,I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The gov