【正文】 s what admissions staff wants to your essay with an attentiongrabbing leadan anecdote, quote, question, or engaging description of your essay with a conclusion that refers back to lead and restates your your essa。Ten Do39。應詳讀學校的介紹,了解其要求,再對自己的學業(yè)背景、計劃加以考慮,寫出自己的風格。重要的是給學校一個專業(yè),認真的印象。（六）態(tài)度誠懇認真,不卑不亢。（四）避免用深奧的字匯,盡量以簡單容易的字來表達。（三）不要用語意模糊的句子,如 ”Your esteemed school“應代以學校的名字。4．”I am attracted to your department by its brilliant faculty.“應說明對於教授的認知是從何而來,如在何處讀到某教授的文章而愿受教于他,或某位教授正在從事一項重要研究,與自己欲攻讀的研究領域相同等。2．”I received extensive training in physics“ 這句話不夠詳細,”My training was in the area of particle physics“就具體多了。（二）寫作時應清楚明確。例如學校要求五百字內完成(In 500 words or less discuss...),則全文最好不要超過五百字。不要像列清單,也不要重覆申請表格已有的資料。這不僅僅對中國人如此,以英語為母語的人在此類寫作時也會感到十分的頭疼,但是我們中國人還需克服語言的障礙。一篇好的申請文書要求申請人能夠用一種與其他申請人完全不同方式,巧妙地展現(xiàn)自己的獨特個性和經驗。當你通過申請文書來介紹你自己時,你會發(fā)現(xiàn)所面臨的機遇和挑戰(zhàn)同樣之大。而西方的大學并不單是通過傳統(tǒng)的考試來考評其申請者的資格,這并不是說他們的錄取標準不嚴格。這對申請者來說是一個絕好的機會。個人陳述應當包含以下內容：（一）申請者的學術或專業(yè)興趣及背景；（二）欲研究的方向；（三）未來的職業(yè)目標。幾乎所有學校都要求提交個人陳述。I could solve the problem of difficulties in managing the patch files by putting the client patch files on the server for Auto update, improving the clients’ satisfaction ’s more, I am very strict with myself and always keep a heart for successfully became a formal employee in advance during the probation I gained the Intermediate Engineer position in only one year which normally took three years by the same time, my strong sense of responsibility helped me never disappoint my supervisors and colleagues even when it was necessary to work overtime continuously or all , I can even get enlightened when facing experience in taking charge of the GCM—Grandsoft Cost Management project can be cited here as an this project, we adopted C/S structure using COM+/Web Service as the munication method, and SQL Server 2000 as the the SQL was optimized and different DB engines and ponents were tried, the querying efficiency was not improved obviously when dealing with mass data and plex business , I learned in the course how to improve the efficiency of database query for huge amount of data, how to conduct efficiency test and experiment and how to use the simplest query to realize the huge business trial use of the Qlikview software of a professional data query pany, although I was not able to solve the problem, I learned the BI thoughts to cache data into the memory to improve the application , though I have laid a solid foundation in my years of studies in Tsinghua University and my selfstudies during the work, though I have improved my ability in practice and problemsolving, I still lack in theories which can be seen from the above practice is not enough to solve problems importance of theories can be also seen in my adjusting the tree traversing improved the GCM product’s tree building efficiency by dozens of times after I analyzed the general law of data , I am more determined to continue my further education gone through the thinking during the learningworkinglearning process, I believe that I’ve already found what I xxx program will be the most meaningful place for me in my next ten years of concentrative research coupled with my determination to accept new challenges will enable me to bee a paving stone on the road of CS 第三篇：留學申請個人陳述范例Applicant for Finance Program from Renmin University of ChinaPersonal StatementMy interest in finance can be initially traced back to the bestseller entitled Rich Dad, Poor Dad written by Kiyosaki Robert Lechter Sharon L..Though a tenyearold boy at that time, I was much fascinated with the economic knowledge conveyed in simple expressions of the book which I read for several times and shared the cases in it with my motivation to explore the financial world also benefits from my parents both of whom have achieved higher education in finance and engaged in the relevant received a rigorous academic training for my past undergraduate study in Renmin University of China, I’m eager to educate myself on an international appeals to me by its extensive and profound far as I’m concerned, the relationship between finance and economy is akin to that between blood and as the physical conditions can be reflected from the circulation of blood according to the Chinese medicine, the economic operation of a country can be judged from its financial status, funds flow, exposures to the professional courses of Money and Banking, Corporate Financing, Macro/Micro Economics, Econometrics, International Finance, and Insurance as well as the mathematical courses such as Mathematical Analysis, Advanced Algebra, Probability Theory and Mathematical Statistics have enabled me to lay a solid academic foundation of , bearing in mind sound interpersonal skills and handson ability are the basic personal qualities required of a successful financial person, I availed myself of various opportunities to undertake began to invest in the stock market in face of the frustrations at the outset, I audited all the courses of security analysis and investment on campus, read a lot of financial magazines and newspapers and consulted some professors and my was uplifted during such a process, not only in money making, but also in grasping the principles and regulations behind the stock value my experiences in conducting research programs which acted as bridges linking my theoretical knowledge with the larger world where it would be importantly, I got much enlightenment and inspiration from making presentations, like my presentations regarding the parison and analysis of appreciations of Yuan and Yen along with the cases of these presentations, I tried to arrive at flexible and prehensive mand of plicated , I derived selfconfidence and sense of joy in immersing myself in the fields where my interests genuinely other unique assets are attributed to my internships in different units where finance invariably plays an important I worked in China Foreign Exchange and Trade Centre, I gained a full understandin