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按通常意義，第一個小孩是優(yōu)生吧，第二個算是很普通的學(xué)生吧，可是全都生活在被分?jǐn)?shù)控制的世界里，悲喜交替，無處可逃。可是眼前的漫畫卻讓我思緒翻滾。這些都是因?yàn)樘粗乩娉煽儐味鴮?dǎo)致的容易一葉障目的結(jié)果。同樣的，教師的教學(xué)不只有分?jǐn)?shù)，還應(yīng)該有理解與賞識，還應(yīng)該有“詩和遠(yuǎn)方”。孩子的成長需要經(jīng)歷幸福，更需要經(jīng)受困難挫折，他在學(xué)習(xí)過程中要懂得付出汗水，也要懂得不是每一次努力之后都能立刻進(jìn)步，懂得進(jìn)步未必能立刻體現(xiàn)在成績上，懂得成績起伏本就是正常現(xiàn)象，只有持續(xù)努力，不斷積蓄力量，才能成就更好的自己，從而開出人生之花，結(jié)出人生之果。其實(shí)，孩子就像正在成長的樹，他取得的成績就像一片片的葉子，實(shí)在不必因孩子之樹上長出一片好看的葉子而欣喜若狂，更不必因長出一片不太好看的葉子而全盤否定甚至大打出手，切勿因一葉而障目。正如朝霞之壯麗，落霞之斑斕，春花之燦爛，秋葉之靜美，天地間每一種生命都自有其美好，你只需要笑著去尊重和欣賞，而不是在簡單粗暴的比較中掄起你的巴掌。也沒必要把最好的我和一般的我比較，那會陷入自卑。因?yàn)槿松皇菍m廷劇，更不是角斗場，非得要比得筋疲力盡，斗得你死我活。畢淑敏說：“沒有人能替代我，就像我不能替代別人。“更”是無窮，是進(jìn)取，是新的希望。望子成龍，那是普天下所有父母的共同心愿，我怎會不懂，只是——你可知道，再優(yōu)秀的成績也經(jīng)不起比。每一個生命都無須比較從我牙牙學(xué)語起，你便開始拿我和別的小孩比較，從中你得到了快樂和滿足。全文緊緊圍繞著“點(diǎn)點(diǎn)浮沉中的成績”所存在的問題展開議論。只有看到孩子真正的實(shí)力，給予及時支持，方能在無涯學(xué)海上為他撐起一片小舟，助他學(xué)成至彼岸。父母看待孩子分?jǐn)?shù)的眼光也不應(yīng)局限于一隅，而應(yīng)看到整體的、比較的，這樣才能知道成績背后那點(diǎn)點(diǎn)浮沉的真正意義。而若父母的愛變得“有償”，須用分?jǐn)?shù)進(jìn)步來贏得，只會讓孩子戰(zhàn)戰(zhàn)兢兢，時刻背負(fù)“優(yōu)生的包袱”或者“差生的重?fù)?dān)”?！抖Y記》有言“父之愛子，乃生而行之乎。分?jǐn)?shù)的沉浮本就有多重原因，孩子的掌握、思維方式、老師出題的難度，甚至于個人的運(yùn)氣皆可改變成績的高低。勿以點(diǎn)點(diǎn)沉浮論英雄“愛其子，擇師而教之。接著用自己成長的例子，說明母親過高期望給自己帶來的壓力及反感，并提出“壓力就像一個雞蛋，從里面打破的是生命，從外面打破的就只有滅亡”，分析深刻、透徹。母親愛兒子，希望兒子優(yōu)秀；兒子愛母親、理解母親，希望能“看到一個溫柔的母親”，這里沒有點(diǎn)染、沒有修飾、沒有造作，是自然的流露。您的兒子 2016年6月7日點(diǎn)評：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的書信。同為少年成名的作家蔣方舟，小小年紀(jì)便已出書，但她并不是父母逼的，而是她真的熱愛寫作，到如今已是受廣大讀者喜愛的青年作家之一。而我心里卻是忐忑的，我因?yàn)槟竺看慰荚嚩家?5分以上，所以我才懼怕，即使我的成績在班上很好。我記得小時候，您一直拿我跟別人比，我記得我的表弟，有時候他來我家吃飯，您就會說：“看誰吃得最快。全文文氣涌動，文脈清晰，皆賴這十問之功。第三段結(jié)尾的設(shè)問承上啟下，引出下文產(chǎn)生的“對分?jǐn)?shù)的執(zhí)著”的社會根源，使論證更深一層，也發(fā)人深思?！皾M分得吻，98分得巴掌這一荒謬現(xiàn)象，正是被詬病許久的唯分?jǐn)?shù)論的體現(xiàn)”，語句簡潔，觀點(diǎn)鮮明；結(jié)尾簡短有力，回應(yīng)首段。巴掌與吻，是耶非耶？唯有痛定思痛，對未來的教育報之以歌。滿分得吻、98分得巴掌這一荒謬現(xiàn)象，正是被詬病許久的唯分?jǐn)?shù)論的體現(xiàn)，當(dāng)家長并不在乎分?jǐn)?shù)背后反映的知識掌握情況，指導(dǎo)學(xué)習(xí)作用時，也就不再在意“98分已經(jīng)很接近滿分”這一事實(shí)，而是只看見比上次退步了2分的情況，辨不清“無論55分還是61分都說明孩子學(xué)習(xí)狀況不佳，”而只關(guān)注比上次進(jìn)步了6分。在追求完美、施行“虎媽狼爸”教育方式的中國父母群體中，這位母親的寬容心態(tài)顯得那么與眾不同，她或許就是考生們筆下心心念念呼喚的那位“母親”！巴掌之吻 教育之痛一張考卷，幾分浮動，換得巴掌與吻。點(diǎn)評：與一般考生作文寫法不同，本文并不是千篇一律地從漫畫材料的描述分析開始，而是用了一個別出心裁的描寫性開頭，營造出一種肅穆的氣氛來吸引讀者。如今，我走在了媽媽曾經(jīng)走過的路上，只求問心無愧和爭取進(jìn)步，或許我的進(jìn)步十分微小。但我媽媽也是有底線的，她不要求我每次都要考滿分、90分，她只要求我每次進(jìn)步，哪怕只有一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)。畢業(yè)后，女孩搭上南下的火車，找了份工作，平平淡淡地活著。有進(jìn)步就是好的，雖然你的進(jìn)步并未幫你達(dá)成目標(biāo)，但那又怎樣？只要能進(jìn)步，在哪都能成就精彩。盛夏，農(nóng)村的夜空被點(diǎn)點(diǎn)繁星照亮，女孩睜著流著淚的眼睛，看著熱鬧的夜空，仿佛自己的夢想跟那星星一樣離她如此遙遠(yuǎn)。只是看見，從那以后，女孩仿佛在書桌旁生了根。一個十八歲的少女坐在河邊，手里拿著最后一次的?？季恚厦娴姆?jǐn)?shù)令她心寒。3．參考詞匯：門票entrance feeDear Editor．I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrancefee should be charged for parks．高考滿分作文1(1號題)Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for % of us schoolmates think that an entrance fee do not meet people’s expectations, for a park is considered to be a place where the public can have a good time when they are not busy either at home or at an entrance fee must be paid by the visitors for a park, it will be necessary to build a gate and surrounding the end a city will take on a bad % of us schoolmates think that an entrance fee can be accepted, but it must not be too money from ticket selling can be used for paying the gardeners in the park and buying some other kinds of flowers and regard to myself, I think an entrance fee is useful, for it can be used to protect a we share the same opinion, dear editor?Yours truly,Li Hua高考英語滿分作文第二篇Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for students out of one hundred think that an entrance fee should not be bought before one enters a park, for it is a place for the public to go to when they are a ticket must be bought, a gate and walls have to be built for a park, which will make a city look students out of one hundred think that an entrance fee should be bought before one enters a park, but that the price of the ticket should be that is got from ticket selling can be used to pay the gardening workers and buy different kinds of flowers and for myself, I really think parks are good places to go to at weekends and on the sametime, we, as visitors, should pay the entrance fee when we enter a all, it takes a lot of money to maintain a park in good working you agree with me, dear editor?Yours truly,Li HuaDear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for percent of my schoolmates are for the idea that an entrance fee should not be forced on the believe parks are the place where the public enjoy themselves at their think that a gate and wails are to be built if an entrance fee is to be city will not look so beautiful as it should percent of my schoolmates are for the idea that an entrance fee is OK, but it shouldn’t be out of fee can be used to pay the gardeners and buy new types of flowers and myself, I’d like to say that if we all work hard to build our city into a flower garden, who cares about the entrance fee for parks?Yours truly,Li Hua高考英語滿分作文第四篇Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for against charging entrance fee for parks take up 60%.They are of one mind that parks are a place for the public’s tickets are demanded on the visitors of a park, a gate has to be set up and so have the walls on the four so, city will not look as beautiful as it , those in favour of charging entrance fee for parks take up 40%.They all think that ticket price should be controlled properly, and that entrance fee can be used to pay the gardeners and buy new sorts of flowers and truth lies in the hands of the my argument stand to reason, dear editor?Yours truly,Li HuaDear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we have had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for all us who have joined in the discussion, 60% share the point of view that an entrance fee should not be charged while 40% share the opposite who don’t agree with the idea think that a park is a place where the public can spend their spare time for in support of the idea think that entrance fee for parks can’t be beyond against the idea think that a city’s appearance will be damaged because a gate and wails will be built if an entrance fee is to be who agree with the idea think entrance fee can be used to pay the gardeners and b