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he Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is don39。t even have to step out of the seems all easy and , people39。s opinions vary on this believe that on line shopping is time and money plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time others insist that mispurchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we39。d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account :這是一篇“中等偏上”的學(xué)生作文。本文先對網(wǎng)購熱潮進行簡介,引出全篇;接著對網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物的正反兩方面進行對比;最后提出自己的看法結(jié)束全篇。整體看思路清晰,邏輯嚴(yán)密,行文流暢,用語較為地道。下面說一下這篇文章的有待提高之處:,能看得出該同學(xué)試圖采用議論文的“三段式”(提出問題、分析問題、解決問題)。但是,以“With the development of the Internet”為開首語,有些落入俗套,有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意,應(yīng)該能寫出更好的句子。,有些語句稍顯啰嗦,比如With plentiful selection options? 簡化成With plentiful selections? 更好,意思沒有絲毫減損,表達(dá)力反而增強許多。高分版With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is ing into fashion in most of shopping is weled by most people due to various the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don39。t have much spare click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don39。t have much circulating don39。t have to rent a house and spend money on employees pared with the traditional trade , there are still some defects in online , lace of face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and , people will lose the fun of is undeniable that shopping on the internet has bee an irresistible trend in modern 39。s of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws accordance with the rapid growth of online in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being :本次四級作文探討的是最近的熱點話題之一——互聯(lián)網(wǎng)網(wǎng)購。目前網(wǎng)購的風(fēng)靡程度是眾所周知,因此,考生對于該話題還是比較熟悉的。但是,比較特殊的是,題干所列出的要求的是考生從一個客觀的角度來闡述該話題,而不是簡單陳述自己的意見。所以,考生應(yīng)當(dāng)審清楚題,在寫作時不僅僅要列出網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點,還必須給出相應(yīng)的缺點。按照四級作文的要求,考生在第一段時應(yīng)該總述現(xiàn)象并引出話題;第二段考生應(yīng)當(dāng)從正反兩方面來論述網(wǎng)購,分別鋪陳其優(yōu)缺點;關(guān)于優(yōu)點,網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點很多,考生可擇其最突出顯著的方面來闡述,比如說網(wǎng)購可以節(jié)省很多時間;網(wǎng)購可以節(jié)省很多成本開支等;其次,缺點方面考生可以把重心放在誠信方面;為了不至于跟優(yōu)點相比,缺點方面太輕,考生可以考慮稍微提一下其他缺點,比如說與傳統(tǒng)購物相比,網(wǎng)購少去了很多砍價的樂趣;第三點要求考生對于第二段列出的缺點給出自己的建議。此處我們可以根據(jù)第二段列出的缺點方面給出相應(yīng)的防范應(yīng)對措施。整篇作文話題比較好展開,難度不大,只要考生審好題,列出相應(yīng)點,相信作文不會他是難題。2010年12月大學(xué)英語四級考試How Should Parents Help Children to Be Independent?, 父母應(yīng)該……Nowadays, an increasing number of families in China have only one parents love and care for children so much as to help children deal with every , children get used to depending on their parents in everything and lack the ability to solve problems are some effective ways for parents to help their children to be start with, parents should give their children more chances to experience the world and life around their children can enhance the capability to overe the difficulties and handle problems addition, parents should offer enough assistance when their children need this way, they depend on their parents in a right way and can solve problems independently when they face the same one next but not least, parents should allowtheir children to make decisions the above discussion, I strongly believe that parents should help their children to be independent by instructing them in a proper way rather than planning and considering everything for Due Attention Should Be Given to Spelling(論壇)學(xué)習(xí)中不重視拼寫,…,我認(rèn)為….Nowadays, students attach little importance to the spelling of words in the process of English phenomenon greatly influences students’ writing and brings on worries among are possibly three reasons contributing to this , examoriented education makes students pay little attention to , some teachers should also be responsible for it because they don’t emphasize the importance of spelling during but not least, some students are too lazy to recite spelling is one of the most important factors in English study, due attention should be given to I see it, first, exams should be modified to add spelling into , schools should establish effective mechanisms to help teachers as well as students to realize the , students should be interested in word in this way, can we surely realize the importance of spelling and make Creating a Green Campus ,我們應(yīng)該……Recently, with the idea of making and maintaining “a green earth” being the focus of the society, “green campus” has bee a more and more popular concept in universities or colleges, which, undoubtedly, will bring us an everlasting benefit to both our campus and our concept of “green campus” does not only mean a green environment but also refers to an environmental sense in people’s plays a crucial role in educating the young generation and the consciousness of “green campus” will definitely produce a profound effect on students’ various environmental protection activities after their ’s more, the young generation is under the burden of severe environmental pollution and there are many problems waiting for them to make “green campus” e true, firstly, it is necessary to work out effective principles for the development of sustainable and recyclable , it calls for people’s awareness of the serious pollution around us and actual action to reduce the but not least, it is necessary to strengthen the ties between campus and society, so as to ensure that “green campus” can work smoothly with the coeffort of the whole Limiting the Use of Disposable Plastic Bags一次性塑料袋的使用。一次性塑料袋帶來的問題。限制一次性塑料袋的意義。In our daily life, most people use disposable plastic bags for shopping and other , the excessive use of disposable plastic bags has resulted in a great damage to our problems brought by disposable plastic bags are various, ranging from environment to people39。s the first place, it takes years for the plastic p