【正文】 for my part, public facilities will enhance the economic development and enable the government to sponsor arts.12. 譬如說(shuō)，投資交通系統(tǒng)可以讓人們上下班容易，提高生產(chǎn)力，而投資高鐵和飛機(jī)場(chǎng)可以讓物品運(yùn)輸更加方便。 For instance, investment in transportation system makes urban mute easier, while investment in highspeed rail and airport makes good transportation more convenient. 13. 有了這些設(shè)施，城市可以吸引投資，變得更加富裕，人們生活更好。The city can attract more investments with these facilities and thus people will embrace a richer and better life.14. 相比之下，投資藝術(shù)很多時(shí)候在短時(shí)間很難獲得一個(gè)好的經(jīng)濟(jì)回報(bào)。On the contrary, investment in art is hard to receive an economic reward in a short run.15. 因此，我認(rèn)為即便藝術(shù)讓我們的城市更加美麗，我認(rèn)為政府的重心應(yīng)該是在公共設(shè)施上。 As a result, even though art makes our city more beautiful, I insist that the government should lay emphasis on public services and facilities.顧家北句1 Citizens hold different views about government sponsorship towards the art, especially when facing budget problems.改：這個(gè)分詞結(jié)構(gòu)有歧義，不大清楚是修飾government，還是citizens正：People have different views about government funding for the arts, especially when a country struggles with budget deficits. 句2 I reckon that we should give priority to infrastructures and then to invest in the art when having a surplus.改：to invest 不清楚是否和前面的to對(duì)稱，因?yàn)榍懊娴膖o是個(gè)介詞正：I reckon that we should give priority to essential services and infrastructures and then fund the arts when governments have a budget surplus. 句3 Many people support to provide funds on arts, which can make our cities more appealing and attractive.改：沒(méi)有support to的表達(dá)。 funds on 也不是習(xí)慣的表達(dá)正：Many people support the public funds for the arts, which can make our cities more visually attractive. 句4 The work of art such as sculptures, painting and statues can make public places like library, metro station and even bathroom pretty. 改：library 這些名詞都是可數(shù)名詞，要加復(fù)數(shù)正：It is true that artworks, including sculptures, paintings and statues can decorate public facilities such as libraries, metro stations, or even toilets, and increase the artistic appeal of these places.句5 If the art industry developed prosperously, and the different buildings of cities also have the unique styles. And for the reason, we will enjoy the city life better. 改：developed時(shí)態(tài)不對(duì)；第一句話沒(méi)有主句，有兩個(gè)連詞，正：If the art industry prospers, cities have a mix of different architectural styles and we are more likely to enjoy urban life. 句6 If we are exposed to art, it can decrease our pressure and make our mood well.改：well是個(gè)副詞，一般make something+形容詞正：Exposure to artworks can reduce our pressure and put us in a good mood. 句7 Though the art is very important, many people think the public facilities should be focused more and should get the government sponsorship firstly.改：focused more一般不這么表達(dá)；如果是art單獨(dú)寫(xiě)，不需要用定冠詞正：Although the funding for the arts is important, many people would argue that public facilities deserve more of public money. 句8 Ordinary people are more interested in public facilities(such as water and electricity power, schools, libraries，roadways),which has a direct impact on their living standards.改：一般當(dāng)你列舉幾個(gè)名詞的時(shí)候，要用and相連；定語(yǔ)從句的has和前面的名詞不一致正：Ordinary people are more interested in public facilities (such as water and electricity supply networks, schools, libraries and roads), which have a direct impact on their living standards.句9 For example, good sanitation and clean water can improve people’s fitness and reduce disease and schools and libraries can popularize knowledge and give people a promising career.改：disease可數(shù)名詞，最好用復(fù)數(shù)；schools前面的and不恰當(dāng)，因?yàn)樘嗖⒘械某煞终篎or example, good sanitation and clean water can improve people’s health and reduce diseases, while schools and libraries can disseminate knowledge and improve young people’s job prospects. 句10 In contrast, works of art, such as paintings and operas, are luxury items to most people and are not likely to bring them tangible benefits.改：operas不是works of art， 所以不能作為works of art的例子正：In contrast, sculptures, paintings and operas are luxury items to most people and are not likely to bring tangible benefits to them.句11 From my perspective, governments need to support the public facilities first, and this can promote the economic development.改：public facilities, economic development前面都不用加the，因?yàn)椴挥锰刂刚篒n my view, improvements in public facilities can promote economy development so that the government can have enough money to invest in art.句12 For example, investment in transport system make it easy for people to go to work, so the productivity can be improved, while investment in highspeed rails and airports can make transportation more easier.改：system可數(shù)名詞，要用冠詞；investment make主謂不一致；more easier沒(méi)有這個(gè)表達(dá)正：For example, the investment in the transport system can improve the productivity of working people by making daily muting easier, while the public spending on highspeed railway systems and airports can ensure that cargo can be delivered faster. 句13 As a result, cities can attract investment and bee wealthy, people’s living standards can also be improved.改：兩個(gè)句子沒(méi)有連詞正：Cities can attract investment and bee wealthy, so people’s living standards can also be improved.句14 By contrast, people are hard to get a good economic feedback by investing arts in a short time.改：人不能說(shuō)hard to；invest是不及物動(dòng)詞，不能不加介詞正：By contrast, the investment in the arts cannot create such returns in a short time.句15 Therefore, I think the government should focus on developing public facilities rather than art even it is useful to make our city more charming. 改：even是副詞，不是連詞；沒(méi)有something is useful to do something的說(shuō)法正：To sum up, I believe that the government should focus on services and facilities vital to the wellbeing of the general public, even though artistic projects have made our cities spectacular.Around the world, more adults can work from home and more children can study from home as puter technologies bee cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?Since puter has found its way