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metimes the one who beats you is not others, but yourself. And smile can also keep you healthy. Second, learn to smile at others. It will make you municate better with people. Smiling at others makes yourself happy as well. In a word, smile is a kind of language belonging to everyone. It passes love and friendship and helps shorten the distance between you and other people. Living with a smile ,every day will be shiny.【解析】這是一篇表格式的作文,要點(diǎn)是一表格的形式出現(xiàn),首先要研究表格,找出需要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn),然后加以整合,也可以適當(dāng)增加使意思更連貫,但要點(diǎn)一定要全,不能漏掉。寫作時(shí)要注意遣詞造句,不能受漢語的影響,要用地道的英語表達(dá),注意時(shí)態(tài),語態(tài),單詞拼寫,語法等問題,用好簡單句,適當(dāng)用復(fù)雜句??梢杂靡恍└呒?jí)詞匯。還要注意句子的關(guān)聯(lián)。9.書面表達(dá)某英文報(bào)舉辦“家鄉(xiāng)的變化”主題征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表提示,以“The Changes in My Hometown”為題,用英語寫一篇100詞左右的短文,不必逐字逐句翻譯。過去生活條件差,道路狹窄,房屋破舊。污染嚴(yán)重,垃圾遍地。......(適當(dāng)發(fā)揮一至兩點(diǎn))現(xiàn)在環(huán)境:政府采取措施來改善污染,城市變得越來越整潔。生活:住房寬敞明亮;許多人搬進(jìn)了新公寓。越來越多的人有自己的汽車;生活舒適。交通:新的飛機(jī)場已投入使用多年。be in use(投入使用);旅游:每年有成千上萬來自各地的游客。將來希望……(兩點(diǎn))要求:1. 短文的開頭已為你寫好,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù);2. 短文必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn),并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,使短文連貫通順;3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名、地名等相關(guān)信息。Changes my hometownMy hometown has changed a lot over the years.In the past, _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】My hometown has changed a lot over the years.In the past, my hometown was very poor and the streets were very narrow. Houses were small and old. Rubbish was everywhere. Few people would like to e to my hometown. Now the government takes measures to improve the pollution and the city bees cleaner and cleaner. The houses are big and bright. Many people have moved into new apartments. More and more people have their own cars and live a fortable life. The new airport has been in use for two years. There are thousands of tourists from all over the country every hope my hometown is being more and more beautiful.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以The Changes in My Hometown為題,介紹一下自己的家鄉(xiāng)這些年來發(fā)生的變化。題目中用表格的形式,給我們對(duì)比的家鄉(xiāng)的過去和現(xiàn)在,我們應(yīng)用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來,并對(duì)將來提出兩點(diǎn)希望。審題可知,作文的基本框架和大概內(nèi)容都有了,需要注意的是在描寫過去的時(shí)候,需要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮一到兩點(diǎn);還有對(duì)將來的希望也需要學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮。這兩個(gè)地方需要學(xué)生們展開想象,合理發(fā)揮,注意要與文章的其他部分能夠很好的結(jié)合起來,內(nèi)容也要統(tǒng)一,符合題目要求,合情合理。表達(dá)時(shí),需要注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的,不能逐詞翻譯表格中的語句,而應(yīng)從句子的整體考慮,使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯、短語和句型來表達(dá)。注意句式的多變,長短句結(jié)合、簡單句、并列句或復(fù)合句穿插使用,提升文章的檔次。語句之間注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分,使文意連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文,短文作者按照題目要求,介紹了自己的家鄉(xiāng)這些年來的變化。文章是按照時(shí)間的順序,先介紹了家鄉(xiāng)過去的面貌,這一部分使用了過去時(shí)態(tài),謂語動(dòng)詞都變成了過去式,形式準(zhǔn)確。然后是家鄉(xiāng)現(xiàn)在的樣子,這里主要以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主。最后對(duì)家鄉(xiāng)的未來表達(dá)了自己的愿望。整篇文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)、完整,敘述清晰、條理,結(jié)構(gòu)合理。文章中語言得體,語句通順,句式表達(dá)符合英語的習(xí)慣,語法規(guī)范、準(zhǔn)確。短文里還使用了一些較好的短語和句型,如In the past, my hometown was very poor and the streets were very narrow.、Now the government takes measures to improve the pollution and the city bees cleaner and cleaner、More and more people have their own cars and live a fortable life、There are thousands of tourists from all over the country every 。10.假如你叫李華,最近你班里的美國交換生Lucy想要感受中國的傳統(tǒng)文化。周末你和父母商議后,打算邀請(qǐng)她去老舍茶館。你通過微信告知她:要去哪,在那要做什么以及何時(shí)何地見面。提示詞語:Laoshe Teahouse, drink tea, Peking Opera, magic shows, gate提示問題:Where are you going?What will you do there?When and where will you meet?【答案】Hi, Lucy! I know you like Chinese traditional culture. I want to invite you to Laoshe Teahouse this Saturday morning. We are going to drink tea, watch magic shows, enjoy Peking Opera, and eat Chinese traditional food in Laoshe Teahouse. We can experience Chinese traditional culture there. Let’s meet at the gate of Laoshe Teahouse at 8:30, OK? See you.【解析】這是一篇給材料作文,我通過微信告訴Lucy要去哪,在那里要做什么以及何時(shí)何地見面。結(jié)合所給材料,可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來時(shí),人稱為第一人稱,注意主謂一致問題,句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu),注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用,比如:I want to……,We are going to……,We can……,Let’s meet at……等句式的應(yīng)用。寫作中注意運(yùn)用代詞,注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫作中注意敘述順序,符合邏輯關(guān)系。點(diǎn)睛:本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊,語言簡練。開頭介紹了我想要邀請(qǐng)你去老舍茶館,接下來介紹我們?nèi)ツ抢镒鍪裁?,最后指出我們要在何時(shí)何地見面。此處want to do sth, invite sb to, let sb do sth, at the gate of等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。