【正文】 輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容?！玖咙c說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如convenient，disadvantage，in good quality，figure out，have the chance to do，be attacked by，of course，take care of等。增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。點睛：寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．請根據(jù)表格內(nèi)Zhang Ying的一些表現(xiàn)的提示用英語寫一篇短文，把她介紹給你的外國朋友Mary。TimeGood habitsBad habitsIn the morningGet up earlyEat junk food for breakfastIn classAsk some questionsQuarrel（爭吵） with herclassmates sometimesAfter schoolAlways exerciseGo home lateIn the eveningHelp her parents with houseworkWatch TV or play putergames for more than an hour要求：語言要通順，表達(dá)要正確。文章要求包含表格中的所有提示。詞數(shù)不少于60個英語單詞。文章開頭結(jié)尾已給出，不計入詞數(shù)?！敬鸢浮縊ne possible versionDear Mary,I’m very glad to introduce（介紹） my classmate Zhang Ying to you. She is a 14yearold girl. She has a lot of good habits. She gets up early every morning. In class she likes to ask her teachers some questions. After school she always exercises （for a long time）. After supper she helps her parents with housework. （She is really a good girl. ）But she has some bad habits, too. She often eats junk food for breakfast. Sometimes she quarrels with her classmates in class. She doesn’t go home on time and she always watches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. （This makes her parents unhappy. ）I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將張穎的情況介紹清楚。根據(jù)材料可知，本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第三人稱進(jìn)行敘述，寫作中主語時態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點，做到語句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞?！玖咙c說明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式，如：be glad to do sth高興做某事；a lot of許多；get up起床等。本文中時間詞如After supper，Sometimes，in the evening等的巧妙使用，使得本文看起來邏輯清楚，條理分明。在學(xué)習(xí)中，我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.考點：考查提綱類作文10．書面表達(dá)?！癏ow can a teenager have a successful life?”的討論，為此你采訪了一些同學(xué)（結(jié)果見下表）。請據(jù)上經(jīng)用英語寫一篇短文參與討論，并闡述你的觀點。同學(xué)主要觀點你的觀點努力學(xué)習(xí)尊重父母服務(wù)社會計劃未來……（至少兩條）注意：（1）短文必須包括表中所有內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)；（2）你的觀點至少兩條；（3）詞數(shù)：80—100；（4）短文首句僅供選擇使用，不計入總詞數(shù)。參考詞匯：尊重respect短文首句：I have recently done a survey about how a teenager can have a successful life.【答案】I have recently done a survey about how a teenager can have a successful life.Most students believe it’s necessary to study hard. After all, study plays a key role in their life. They also agree they should respect their parents, who look after them every day. Besides, they’re ready to serve the society and in their opinion it’s really meaningful. What’s more, they think each teenager is supposed to make a good plan for future.From my point of view, we need to make some good friends so that we can learn from each other. Also, we must be active and exercise more to keep healthy because it’s important to a successful life.【解析】試題分析：英語教育網(wǎng)站開展主題為“How can a teenager have a successful life?”的討論，采訪了一些同學(xué)參與討論，寫出他們的觀點及自己的觀點。因為是敘述同學(xué)的現(xiàn)在的觀點，所以句子應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時，敘述同學(xué)的觀點用第三人稱，敘述自己的觀點用第一人稱。注意不要遺漏要點，所寫的句子應(yīng)該符合英語語法，不能是漢語式的句子，要使用一些高級詞匯及句式。寫作亮點：短文用了一些短語和句式，如：do a survey about sth關(guān)于某事做調(diào)查；respect their parents,尊敬他們的父母；look after照顧；make a good plan for sth為某事做一個好的計劃；make some good friends交一些好朋友；keep healthy保持健康。用了賓語從句，如：Most students believe it’s necessary to study hard. What’s more, they think each teenager is supposed to make a good plan for ，如：Also, we must be active and exercise more to keep healthy because it’s important to a successful ，也是提分的經(jīng)典句子。考點：材料作文。