【正文】 的一件事例；3. 呼吁大家互幫互助，彼此感恩，讓社會充滿正能量。作文要求：1．不得照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實名稱和學(xué)生的真實姓名。2．語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個左右。 作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不必抄寫在試卷上，也不計入總詞數(shù)。In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. _______【答案】In the program, a customer stood up when a blind woman was cheated badly in a cake shop. I really admire her because she was brave enough to help the woman in need.The other day I saw a little girl crying at a street corner on my way home. I tried my best to make her stop crying. When I knew she was lost, I helped her make a call to her dad and stayed with her until he arrived. I found it pleasant to give others a hand.In my opinion, we are supposed to help each other and be thankful for others’ help. I strongly believe helping others will fill our society with positive energy. As the saying goes, “The rose’s in her hand, the flavor in mine.”（113w）【解析】【詳解】本文屬于話題作文，描述對節(jié)目中挺身而出的顧客的看法、發(fā)生在你身上正能量的事件以及鼓勵大家相互幫助，并讓世界充滿正能量。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如be for, adj enough to do, the other day, try one’s best, make sb do, make a call, give sb a hand, in one’s opinion, be supposed to, be filled with, the rose in her hand, the flavor in mine等。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】寫作時可以從以下幾個方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀觥⒚鞔_的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動筆寫作了，在寫作的過程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡潔性。使用的詞語、短語及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤色。修改潤色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯誤外，還要檢查語法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無重復(fù)、啰嗦的語言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。8．書面表達(dá)中考后暑假即將開始，你和一些同學(xué)準(zhǔn)備結(jié)伴出國旅行。旅行社提供了兩個國家供你選擇游玩。請根據(jù)旅行社提供的信息，將你的選擇用英文向同學(xué)們介紹。BritainAustraliaTimeJuly 1 July 14TimeAugust 15 August 24Activitiesvisit the Buckingham Palace (白金漢宮) visit the British Museum (大英博物館)watch football matches…Activitiesvisit the Sydney Opera Housetravel around the Gold Coast (黃金海岸)have fun with kangaroos and koalas…Attentionchangeable weatherAttentionwinterCost20,000 yuanCost16,000 yuan要求：1. 所寫內(nèi)容必須包括某一國家的所有信息及選擇的理由； 2. 結(jié)合游玩國家的情況，自擬希望可以安排的活動，并提出12點(diǎn)出游的注意事項；3. 文章不少于90詞，開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；4. 語義通順、意思連貫、條理清楚、書寫規(guī)范；5. 不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名、校名等相關(guān)信息。The summer holiday is ing. I think it’s a good idea to travel abroad. I hope I will have a good time there!【答案】The summer holiday is ing. I think it’s a good idea to travel abroad. I have read information about two countries——Britain and Australia. I like britain. So I think we can go to time is july 1 to july 14. Its activities include visiting the buckingham palace,visiting the british museum, and watching football first, I want us to visit the Buckingham Palace and the british museum, I think it is very helpful for us to understand the history and culture of Britain. Next I hope to watch football matches. I like football very much. It will be exciting.However, the weather in Britain is changeable, which will make our trip inconvenient. And it39。s expensive to travel to the UK, which costs 20000 yuan, But I still want to travel to England.I hope I will have a good time there!【解析】【詳解】這是一篇給材料作文。中考后暑假即將開始，你和一些同學(xué)準(zhǔn)備結(jié)伴出國旅行。旅行社提供了兩個國家供你選擇游玩。要求根據(jù)旅行社提供的信息將你的選擇用英文向同學(xué)們介紹。首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動筆寫作。在寫作時，注意連句成篇，保持文章的連貫性，要層次清楚，要點(diǎn)分明，中心突出。同時要注意語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣；盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，最好不要寫太長的復(fù)合句；盡量選取簡單的易拼寫的單詞，確保正確率；詞匯、句式要豐富多樣，可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查，確保正確無誤。9．“苔花如米小,也學(xué)牡丹開?！蔽覀兇蠖鄶?shù)人雖然微不足道,但也能有所作為。請以O(shè)ne thing I felt very proud of 為題用英語寫以寫一篇短文,描述你曾經(jīng)做過得引以自豪一件事情。要求:。 【答案】One thing I felt very proud ofI will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday. I tried many times but failed before she came back. Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned. However, I didn’t give up, and finally I succeeded. Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears. I felt proud of cooking on my own.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以O(shè)ne thing I felt very proud of為題，介紹自己曾經(jīng)做過的一件令自己感到自豪的事情。作文是開放式的，題目中只給了主題，具體的寫作內(nèi)容，需要學(xué)生們自己發(fā)揮想象力去補(bǔ)充。審題可知，體裁是記敘文，記敘一件自己做過的事情，且是能讓自己感到自豪的，故文章應(yīng)使用一般過去時，人稱以第一人稱為主。短文應(yīng)由開頭、主體和結(jié)尾三部分組成，開頭引出話題；第二部分為中心，具體描述事情的過程；最后一部分簡要描寫一下自己的感受。寫作時應(yīng)注意英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣和漢語是不同的，不能按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯，寫漢語式的英語，應(yīng)從句子的整體結(jié)構(gòu)出發(fā)，使用較常見、易于把握的簡單句結(jié)構(gòu)，如主謂賓或主系表結(jié)構(gòu)。為提升作文檔次，穿插使用并列句或復(fù)合句，如賓語從句、狀語從句等?；蚴褂闷硎咕?、非謂語動詞、感嘆句等特殊句式結(jié)構(gòu)。語句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，以使文意連貫?！军c(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求描述了自己做過的一件引以為豪的事情。短文有如下幾個特點(diǎn)：首先短文內(nèi)容完整、充實，敘述具體，詳細(xì)，作者描寫了自己做飯給媽媽慶祝生日這件事，符合題目要求。文章分三段，第一段用一句話引出話題；第二段詳細(xì)描寫了事情的過程；最后一段寫了自己的感受。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，安排合理。其次短文里使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，文章以一般過去時、第一人稱敘述，注意了謂語動詞過去式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動詞的過去式。語言得體，語法規(guī)范，句式結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主，也使用了時間狀語從句、并列句、非謂語動詞等復(fù)雜句式結(jié)構(gòu)。短文中較好的句型和短語有：I will never forget how proud I felt when I succeeded in making delicious dishes for my mother.、To show my love for my mother, I decided to cook some dishes for her on her birthday、Especially when making fried eggs, I couldn’t control the temperature of oil and got several eggs burned、Watching the delicious food on the table, my mother was moved to tears等。