【正文】 句，改變文章節(jié)奏，提升文章檔次。語(yǔ)句之間使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫、流暢。【點(diǎn)睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，向中學(xué)生們發(fā)出號(hào)召，共同參與到城市“雙創(chuàng)”活動(dòng)中來(lái)。首先短文的內(nèi)容完整，文章根據(jù)題目中列出的圖表，補(bǔ)充了具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，從應(yīng)該做的和不應(yīng)該做的兩個(gè)方面，對(duì)中學(xué)生的日常行為提出了要求。文章條理清晰，有層次。其次短文中使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱(chēng)，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)句通順，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。短文中句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡(jiǎn)單句為主，也使用了并列句和復(fù)合句以及一些較復(fù)雜的高級(jí)句式，語(yǔ)句之間也使用了較好的連接成分，如We should be polite to others and try to behave well. 、It’s kind of you to help people in need. 、Meanwhile, We can help clean up our city in order to make it clearer and tidier.、We can’t spit anywhere and we shouldn’t throw rubbish everywhere. At the same time, we shouldn’t break traffic 。9．共享單車(chē)自從2016年在江陰投入使用以來(lái)，給人們帶來(lái)了諸多便利，受到人們的追捧，改變了人們的出行方式，但同時(shí)也遇到了一些挑戰(zhàn)，是國(guó)民素質(zhì)的“照妖鏡”，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)表格中信息的提示，給21世紀(jì)英文報(bào)寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于共享單車(chē)看法的稿件。社會(huì)現(xiàn)狀自從出現(xiàn)，飽受贊譽(yù)。諸多優(yōu)勢(shì)隨處可見(jiàn)，出行方便有益健康，減少污染費(fèi)用不高，負(fù)擔(dān)得起存在問(wèn)題未及時(shí)歸還占道擋路你的觀點(diǎn)我認(rèn)為參考詞匯：公共自行車(chē)public bicycles注意事項(xiàng)：，要求語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫?！澳愕挠^點(diǎn)”一欄用23句話展開(kāi)合理想象，做適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。，文章的開(kāi)頭部分已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。Public bicycles are being more and more popular in our daily life. 【答案】Public bicycles are being more and more popular in our daily life. They have won high praise since they appeared. Public bicycles have brought us many advantages. They can be seen everywhere so that it’s easy for us to get around on public bicycles. Also, Riding bicycles not only is good for our health but also can help reduce pollution. What’s more, using public bicycles costs so little that we can afford it. But there are some problems too. Some people can’t return public bicycles in time. Sometimes because public bicycles take up too much of the road, they are in our way. I think we should encourage more people to use public bicycles. After all, it’s a way of living a green life.【解析】這是一篇材料作文，要求給英文報(bào)社寫(xiě)一篇投稿，介紹對(duì)共享單車(chē)看法。作文應(yīng)包括4個(gè)主要內(nèi)容，一個(gè)是社會(huì)現(xiàn)狀，第二個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)，第三是存在的問(wèn)題，最后發(fā)表個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真審題，深入挖掘題材內(nèi)涵，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。要注意上下文的連貫，將這些內(nèi)容有機(jī)的連接起來(lái)，不要逐句翻譯。使用一些好的句型和短語(yǔ)，注意正確的時(shí)態(tài)和語(yǔ)態(tài)以及謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的形式，還需要注意英語(yǔ)表達(dá)和漢語(yǔ)習(xí)慣的不同，讓整篇短文表達(dá)流暢。10．請(qǐng)根據(jù)表格內(nèi)Zhang Ying的一些表現(xiàn)的提示用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文，把她介紹給你的外國(guó)朋友Mary。TimeGood habitsBad habitsIn the morningGet up earlyEat junk food for breakfastIn classAsk some questionsQuarrel（爭(zhēng)吵） with herclassmates sometimesAfter schoolAlways exerciseGo home lateIn the eveningHelp her parents with houseworkWatch TV or play putergames for more than an hour要求：語(yǔ)言要通順，表達(dá)要正確。文章要求包含表格中的所有提示。詞數(shù)不少于60個(gè)英語(yǔ)單詞。文章開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。【答案】One possible versionDear Mary,I’m very glad to introduce（介紹） my classmate Zhang Ying to you. She is a 14yearold girl. She has a lot of good habits. She gets up early every morning. In class she likes to ask her teachers some questions. After school she always exercises （for a long time）. After supper she helps her parents with housework. （She is really a good girl. ）But she has some bad habits, too. She often eats junk food for breakfast. Sometimes she quarrels with her classmates in class. She doesn’t go home on time and she always watches TV or plays puter games for more than an hour in the evening. （This makes her parents unhappy. ）I think Zhang Ying is a very good girl. Do you think so?YoursHuang Deshun【解析】試題分析：這是一篇提綱類(lèi)作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫(xiě)作中注意將張穎的情況介紹清楚。根據(jù)材料可知，本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第三人稱(chēng)進(jìn)行敘述，寫(xiě)作中主語(yǔ)時(shí)態(tài)及主謂一致等問(wèn)題。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，做到語(yǔ)句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞?！玖咙c(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文在寫(xiě)作中使用了很多固定句式，如：be glad to do sth高興做某事；a lot of許多；get up起床等。本文中時(shí)間詞如After supper，Sometimes，in the evening等的巧妙使用，使得本文看起來(lái)邏輯清楚，條理分明。在學(xué)習(xí)中，我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.考點(diǎn)：考查提綱類(lèi)作文