【正文】 邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如get good results, spend+時(shí)間+on sth, be strict with, however, care for, as well, once upon a time, help sb do, cheer up, be ready to, tell sb to do, try one’s best to do, be full of以及it is adj to do sth等，增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。【點(diǎn)睛】寫作時(shí)可以從以下幾個(gè)方面做起：認(rèn)真審題。審好題是寫好書面表達(dá)的關(guān)鍵。審題時(shí)要注意試題的要求，抓住要點(diǎn)，詞數(shù)符合要求。構(gòu)思提綱。有了提綱，我們就可以根據(jù)提綱和主題確定相關(guān)的寫作材料。通常書面表達(dá)給出的話題是開放的，而具體的內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生自己發(fā)揮，因此選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)乃夭囊彩鞘苟涛闹行耐怀?、明確的關(guān)鍵。初寫短文。一切都準(zhǔn)備就緒，就可以動(dòng)筆寫作了，在寫作的過(guò)程中我們要注意句子的準(zhǔn)確性、連貫性以及簡(jiǎn)潔性。使用的詞語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)及句型盡量用自己有把握的詞。同時(shí)還要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，使句子銜接自然。修改潤(rùn)色。修改潤(rùn)色是獲取高分的必要步驟。這一步我們除了檢查短文的各種錯(cuò)誤外，還要檢查語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)是否合理，有無(wú)重復(fù)、啰嗦的語(yǔ)言，大小寫是否正確，格式是否正確，詞數(shù)是否符合要求等。9．近年來(lái)，習(xí)近平主席提出了實(shí)現(xiàn)中華民族偉大復(fù)興的“中國(guó)夢(mèng)”。學(xué)校開展了“夢(mèng)想少年”的主題演講活動(dòng)，假如你是張明，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提供的要點(diǎn)，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇80－100詞的短文，向大家推介自己。（可聯(lián)系實(shí)際，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮）注意：1．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名。提示詞語(yǔ)： good at ..with ...rules up popular with... to do something【答案】I39。m a Dream Teenager Good morning， dear teachers and friends， I am Zhang Ming． It39。s great honor for me to make a speech here． As a fifteenyearold boy， my dream is to be a good teacher． To make my dream e true， I study hard at school and I am good at all my subjects． Also， I am an outgoing and healthy boy who likes football very much， and I really enjoy sports． At school， I always follow the school rules， so I am popular with my classmates and teachers． On weekends， I39。d like to help people． For example， I volunteer to visit sick children in the hospital and cheer them up．In a word， I believe that the man who holds his dream will be able to achieve his dream one day． That39。s all． Thank you!【解析】【詳解】這是一篇圖表作文。學(xué)校開展“夢(mèng)想少年”的主題演講活動(dòng)，假如你是張明，要求根據(jù)圖表提示內(nèi)容，以“I39。m a Dream Teenager”為題，寫一篇短文，向大家推介自己。根據(jù)所給出的材料提示可知文章時(shí)態(tài)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱主要為第一、第三人稱。首先認(rèn)真審題，看清題目中的要求和要點(diǎn)；然后根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容，列出寫作要點(diǎn)及每個(gè)要點(diǎn)中可能要用到的表達(dá)；然后緊扣要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆寫作。在寫作過(guò)程中，要將圖表內(nèi)提示信息用英語(yǔ)正確的表達(dá)出來(lái)，要涵蓋圖表中提到的所有要點(diǎn)，注意理順要點(diǎn)，防止漏寫。同時(shí)要注意語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣；盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，最好不要寫太長(zhǎng)的復(fù)合句；盡量選取簡(jiǎn)單的易拼寫的單詞，確保正確率；詞匯、句式要豐富多樣，可以為文章增色添彩。最后要細(xì)心復(fù)核檢查，確保正確無(wú)誤。10．書面表達(dá)“Life is like a box of of never know what you are going to get next.”Forrest Gump 中文譯名：《阿甘正傳》“Hope is a good thing. Maybe the best of things and no good thing ever dies.”The Shawshank Kedemption 中文譯名：《肖申克的救贖》“We are all running very hard. We are all dream chasers（追夢(mèng)人）.”President Xi Jingping以上材料告訴我們：生活是豐富多彩的，有快樂(lè)幸福也有傷心失落。但既然選擇了遠(yuǎn)方，便只顧風(fēng)雨兼程。所以在學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，我們要滿懷希望、努力奔跑、追逐夢(mèng)想。請(qǐng)以Dream Chaser為題，談?wù)勀阕约旱挠^點(diǎn)。要點(diǎn)提示：，并努力讓它成為現(xiàn)實(shí)；，使自己不斷強(qiáng)大；，積極參加社會(huì)活動(dòng)；。寫作要求：，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮使行文連貫； ，字跡工整，詞數(shù)不少于80；，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；。Dream ChaserAs we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel ______________________________________________________________________________【答案】As we know, life is not always smooth. Sometimes we may feel satisfied and sometimes we may feel upset. In order to make our dream e true, firstly we should set a practical goal. But just having a goal is not enough. More importantly, we need to study hard to make ourselves stronger. Besides, as teenagers, it is necessary for us to take part in more social activities. We can learn a lot from each other by joining in those social activities. However, there will be many difficulties in both our daily life and study, so please keep patient and be brave to face these challenges. Finally, all our efforts are meaningful and one day our dream will be achieved.【解析】【詳解】：這是一篇材料作文。主要說(shuō)明要有自己的目標(biāo)，努力實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)應(yīng)做到勤奮學(xué)習(xí)，使自己不斷強(qiáng)大；正確面對(duì)困難，積極參加社會(huì)活動(dòng)。：例文用第一人稱來(lái)敘述主要內(nèi)容；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，主要講述如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的目標(biāo)（Firstly,…More importantly,…Besides,…Finally,…）。承接文章開頭，句意完整，避免漢語(yǔ)式英語(yǔ)，敘述條理清晰。：高分短語(yǔ)：feel satisfied；feel upset；e true；set a practical goal；both…and…；keep patient。高分句型：It is +adj. + for sb. +to do sth.；there be句型；祈使句；need to do sth.。