【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 t of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Ming【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份給自己的英國筆友寫信，告訴他關(guān)于家鄉(xiāng)霧霾的情況。題目中列出了三個要點，我們應根據(jù)這些要點提示，來組織語言，充實內(nèi)容。首先介紹去年家鄉(xiāng)的霧霾情況嚴重；然后介紹為減少霧霾人們采取了一些措施；最后介紹一下你自己在日常生活中應該怎么做。因此文章應主要分成三段，一個內(nèi)容一段。文章內(nèi)容中敘述的情況不一，時態(tài)不能統(tǒng)一，根據(jù)表達的需要使用正確的時態(tài)，注意謂語動詞的正確形式。寫作時，應注意英語句式表達習慣和漢語是不同的，不能逐詞翻譯，應從句子的整體考慮，寫完整的句子，利用簡單句的基本句型，使用恰當?shù)脑~匯和短語。為提升文章檔次，可以穿插使用并列句和復合句；語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分，使文意連貫，表達流暢。【點睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者根據(jù)題目要求介紹了自己家鄉(xiāng)治理霧霾的情況，并結(jié)合自身的實際情況，講述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目中要求的所有信息，沒有遺漏要點；且文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明確，意思表達清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，作者根據(jù)表達需要使用了一般過去時、一般將來時態(tài)和一般將來時態(tài)，動詞形式變化準確，語法規(guī)范。短文中語言得體，句式表達符合英語的習慣。句子結(jié)構(gòu)以簡單句為主，也使用了一些并列句和復合句，長短句結(jié)合，使文章富有節(jié)奏。短文中較好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the 。5．書面表達每個人都有自己心愛的物品，相信你也擁有一個自己心愛的物品吧！請以“A（n） _____ I have”為題，描述一個或一件你心愛的物品，并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?，以及它存在的意義。要求：1. 請在題目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字；2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。3. 語言表達準確，短文連貫通順，80詞左右。A（n） _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A（n） toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析：這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述，要求是進行描述，并談?wù)勀闶侨绾蔚玫剿?，以及它存在的意義。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的，在討論其如何獲得的時候要注意正確使用時態(tài)，在談?wù)撘饬x的時候要注意表達的準確性，避免不熟悉的表達。寫作亮點：這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍，描述玩具槍的時候有適當?shù)募毠?jié)補充，例如a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth（用黃布包著的玩具槍），這里用到了過去分詞作定語，作者還描述了玩具槍的功能（small plastic pills），順便還描述了自己小時候玩槍的經(jīng)歷，準確使用了時態(tài)。在描述得到的經(jīng)歷的時候不落俗套，講到了自己的家庭那時比較困難，父親是通過努力工作為我賺錢買槍的，寫作是富有感情的，也通過這段經(jīng)歷為這把玩具槍賦予了一定的意義。最后玩具的意義得到了升華，表達了作者的期望（I hope I can be a soldier），上升到了保家衛(wèi)國的層面，這樣的一篇作文是有深度的，能夠讓人感動的，是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。6．假如你叫李華，最近你班里的美國交換生Lucy想要感受中國的傳統(tǒng)文化。周末你和父母商議后，打算邀