【文章內(nèi)容簡介】 o big black eyes. He doesn39。t talk too much, but always keeps a smile on his face. He is warmhearted and ready to help others. If I need any help for my math exercises, he is always the one that can help me out. As a good student, he studies very hard. In the early morning, you can see him stand near a tree and read English intensively. Few students can arrive at school as early as he is. He also does well in many sports, such as badminton and pingpang. He got the first prize in last year39。s pingpang petition.You can see the good personality and the spirit of persistence in this small body. He is my idol and I wish I could be a student as good as he is.【解析】【詳解】這篇作文要求我們以The person who inspired me為題，介紹一個曾經(jīng)激勵過你的人。題目中用問題的形式給予了提示，審題可知，短文應包括兩個部分的內(nèi)容：首先介紹這個激勵過你的人是誰，他是怎樣的一個人；然后介紹他是如何激勵你的。學生們可以這兩個問題為提綱，發(fā)揮想象力，充實細節(jié)信息，組織語言，連貫成文。短文應以一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時為主來敘述，人稱是第三人稱和第一人稱，注意謂語動詞形式的變化。寫作時應注意：首先要符合題目要求，包括題目中要求的所有信息，不能遺漏要點，可以適當發(fā)揮，注意上下文的銜接。其次應注意英語表達習慣和漢語的不同，不要按照漢語思維逐詞翻譯。應該從句子的整體結構入手，寫完整的句子?？梢院唵尉浣Y構為主，輔以并列句、復合句。為提升文章檔次，應使用高級詞匯以及復雜結構。同時語句之間使用恰當?shù)倪B接成分使文意連貫、自然?！军c睛】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文作者根據(jù)題目要求，介紹了一個曾經(jīng)激勵過自己的人。短文有以下幾個優(yōu)點：首先文章內(nèi)容完整，層次清晰，短文分三段，第一段先介紹了這個人是誰，第二段描寫了這個人身上的品質以及對自己的應選；最后一段結尾。各部分內(nèi)容安排合理，主次分明。其次短文中使用了正確的人稱和時態(tài)，文章以第三人稱和第一人稱為主來敘述，主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時，動詞形式變化準確，注意了第三人稱單數(shù)形式以及過去式形式的變化，語法規(guī)范。用詞準確，語言得體，句式結構完整，符合英語的表達習慣。短文中使用了一些較好的句型和短語，如But the person who inspired me most, I think, is my friend Wang Peng.、Wang Peng is a small thin boy with two big black eyes.、He doesn39。t talk too much, but always keeps a smile on his face.、If I need any help for my math exercises, he is always the one that can help me out.、He also does well in many sports, such as badminton and pingpang.、He is my idol and I wish I could be a student as good as he 。6．書面表達每個人都有自己心愛的物品，相信你也擁有一個自己心愛的物品吧！請以“A（n） _____ I have”為題，描述一個或一件你心愛的物品，并談談你是如何得到它的，以及它存在的意義。要求：1. 請在題目空白處填上你心愛物品的名字；2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。3. 語言表達準確，短文連貫通順，80詞左右。A（n） _________ I have__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】A（n） toy gun I haveEveryone has an object that she/ he like best. So do I.In my drawer, there is a toy gun wrapped by yellow cloth. It’s a black toy gun and it can shot some small plastic pills for ten meters. When I was young, I played with other kids with my toy gun. They all admired me and put me in the place of leader. I was so happy then. When I was a little boy, I liked watching the war movies best. I was eager to have my own toy gun. One day, it was my birthday. I asked for it when my father came back. My family was poor then and my father didn’t promise me. From then, father worked harder and came back more lately. A week later, father put a box to me. A black toy gun in it! I was moved with tears. In order to get it, father worked late and hurt himself. He died a month later.Now I hope I can be a soldier and own a real gun to protect my country and family. I will remember my father’s love forever. Every time I miss him, I’ll take out the toy gun and say “Thank you, my dear father!【解析】寫作分析：這篇作文需要就自己最喜歡的物品展開描述，要求是進行描述，并談談你是如何得到它的，以及它存在的意義。寫作的難度是逐漸加深的，在討論其如何獲得的時候要注意正確使用時態(tài)，在談論意義的時候要注意表達的準確性，避免不熟悉的表達。寫作亮點：這篇文章講了自己最喜歡的玩具槍，描述玩具槍的時候有適當?shù)募毠?jié)補充，例如a toy gun w