【正文】 ”全刪，修改為We can maintain a happy ,a healthy and harmonious society as we all wish.雙號非諷刺修改1. 第二段中primarily句中刪除upsetting2. 第二段中what’s more 一句刪除，“worsening”3. It’s hard……if we fail to guasp such cases and can’t put them into pratices4. 把Additionally——段尾換成“舉例“To make the point even clearer,let’s e to an example regardingAn acquaintance of mineThat it is high time all parties concerned took effective and efficient measure to practice .The authorites the mass media ,aswell as each invidual are involved And I’m strongly convinced that we’ll properly ensure such practices,thus maintaining a happy, heathy society as we all wish.3. 萬一表格，則僅僅修改第一段As is vividly presented in the ******above,……in contrast,……what on earth does the,……What’s apprantly illustuated in the——is that ……in contrast 2后面接上一兩個(gè)描述性句子用下3段落都不用修改除非要求分析原因等等（重點(diǎn)是漫畫，諷刺）一般作文的三個(gè)部分是1， describe 2，imply 3，ment suggest小作文Dear sir or madam, Thank you in advance for your attention to this letter and I’mwriting to present my plaint/inquiry/application/apology/推薦 concerning sth that……（引述事實(shí)或理由 例 concerning puter that I’ve bought in your shop last weekend）There’re an array of factors contributing to (同result in 同一個(gè)意思)（同大作文一樣）。句1一般用來簡單描述漫畫內(nèi)容，句2和句1形成對比例如：06年的一個(gè)小男孩。Nowhere in the history has the issue of sth（其中of sth也可省略不寫）been talked about so much as in our society today（歷史上任何時(shí)刻都比不上我們的時(shí)代這樣關(guān)注這件事情）In the second place, the painting reveals an upsetting story（事情）and similar events happened and happening are heared or reported in nearly all aspects of our life.（27字）Additionally,the painter intends to convince us that a package of programs（一攬子項(xiàng)目，計(jì)劃，方案）should be initiated to reverse the grim stuation（此處是破折號）lauching（發(fā)起，發(fā)動）a nationwide education campaign,setting up relvant laws and regulations,and the list goes on.（36字）三段To conclude,it is high time that much importance were attached to such cases .And it is imperative