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Respectfully yours yingying 總體來說,小作文寫得不錯。但這畢竟是我們練習的第一篇作文,希望你經(jīng)過一段時間的復習之后能夠有所提高。所以,你在第二段中一定要加入examples。但你的第二自然段意義引申段顯得過于單薄了,首先是句式簡單,沒有亮點,讓閱卷老師讀起來平淡無奇。The intended meaning of the picture is that the cooperation is very important.(句式太簡單,我們在揭示圖片深層次含義的時候最好能用一個長句,顯得文章句式不那么單薄。所以你一定要寫好首段以及段首句。應改為:As we all know,people who only owns one leg can not walk as we all know,if one only owns one leg,he can not walk as ,首句便出現(xiàn)語法錯誤是非常不好的,容易讓閱卷老師直接認為你英語水平不好而直接給印象分。 two men are running together with their own one picture shows that the two men (who)