【正文】 ressing the specific task directions and/or in presenting or developing a position on the issue Weak in the use of relevant reasons or examples or relies largely on unsupported claims Limited in focus and/or anization Has problems in language and sentence structure that result in a lack of clarity Contains occasional major errors or frequent minor errors in grammar, usage or mechanics that can interfere with meaning 什么樣的文章是 3分以下 毛新宇 范文分析 6分范文 分析 As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. The statement linking technology negatively [立場(chǎng)明確 ] with free thinking plays on recent human experience over the past century. Surely [邏輯承接 ] there has been no time in history where the lived lives of people have changed [埋下伏筆 ] more dramatically. A quick reflection on a typical day [針對(duì)前文的change給出進(jìn)一步擴(kuò)展 ] reveals how technology has revolutionized [立場(chǎng)詞 ] the world. Most people mute to work in an automobile that runs on an internal bustion engine. During the workday, chances are high that the employee will interact with a puter that processes information on silicon bridges that are .09 microns wide. Upon leaving home, family members will be reached through wireless works that utilize satellites orbiting the earth[對(duì)于上文的 typical day中 technology如何 revolutionized the world給出具體描述 ]. Each of these mon occurrences could have been inconceivable at the turn of the 19th century[再次表明立場(chǎng) ]. 邏輯結(jié)構(gòu) Technology changed human life car puter Mobile phone Technology changed human life statement The statement attempts to bridge these dramatic changes to a reduction in the ability for humans to think for themselves [重述題目 ]. The assumption [挖掘題目成立的邏輯前提 ] is that an increased reliance on technology negates the need for people to think creatively to solve previous quandaries. Looking back at the introduction, one could argue that without a car, puter, or mobile phone[與第一段出現(xiàn)的例子次序完全對(duì)應(yīng) ], the hypothetical worker would need to find alternate methods of transport, information processing and munication[再次對(duì)應(yīng) ]. Technology short circuits this thinking by making the problems obsolete[給出 technology讓人們思考能力下降的原因， subpoint]. Technology changed human life car puter Mobile phone Technology changed human life statement Negative sides of tech transportation information munication Tech short circuits human thinking However[邏輯轉(zhuǎn)折 ], this reliance on technology does not necessarily preclude the creativity that marks the human species [重復(fù)轉(zhuǎn)折法 ]. The prior examples reveal that technology allows for convenience. The car, puter and phone [一致性 ] all release additional time for people to live more efficiently. This efficiency [重復(fù)前詞，頂真結(jié)構(gòu) ] does not preclude the need for humans to think for themselves.[樹(shù)立對(duì)立觀點(diǎn) ] In fact, technology frees humanity to not only tackle new problems, but may itself create new issues that did not exist without technology[subpoint]. For example, the proliferation of automobiles has introduced a need for fuel conservation on a global scale. With increasing energy demands from emerging markets, global warming bees a concern inconceivable to the horseandbuggy generation[針對(duì) create new issue給出的具體事例 ]. Likewise[并行例子 ] dependence on oil has created nationstates that are not dependent on taxation, allowing ruling parties to oppress minority groups such as women. Solutions to these plex problems require the unfettered imaginations of maverick scientists and politicians Rebuttal Negative sides of tech transportation information munication Tech short circuits human thinking New issue raised automobile Global warming oppression New issue raised In contrast to the statement [邏輯詞 ], we can even see how technology frees the human imagination[subpoint現(xiàn)象列舉，證明 technology frees human imagination]. Consider how the digital revolution and the advent of the inter has allowed for an unprecedented exchange of ideas. WebMD, a popular inter portal for medical information, permits patients to self research symptoms for a more informed doctor visit. This exercise opens pathways of thinking that were previously closed off to the medical layman [將例子回歸主旨 ]. With increased interdisciplinary interactions, inspiration can arrive from the most surprising corners [再次現(xiàn)象列舉 ]. Jeffrey Sachs, one of the architects of the UN Millenium Development Goals, based his ideas on emergency care triage techniques. The unlikely marriage of economics and medicine [對(duì)應(yīng)前文中的interdisciplinary interactions] has healed tense, hyperinflation environments from South America to Eastern Europe. This last example provides the most hope in how technology actually provides hope to the future of humanity.[subpoint] By increasing our reliance on technology, impossible goals [對(duì) hope to the future of humanity的進(jìn)一步論述 ] can now be achieved. Consider how the late 20th century witnessed the plete elimination of smallpox.[例證，對(duì)應(yīng) impossible goals] This disease had ravaged the human race since prehistorical days, and yet with the technology of vaccines[technology的具體化 ], free thinking humans dared to imagine a world free of smallpox. Using technology, battle plans were drawn out, and smallpox was systematically targeted and eradicated. Tech does not deteriorate human thinking Frees human imagination WebMD Interdisciplinary interaction Hope to humanity Smallpox